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Lightning struck twice, and now Tian finds himself in the vast world of DanMachi with nothing but his wits and his courage. Oh, and cultivation of course.
With this, he'll ascend to the heavens from where the gods descend.
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レビューを書くA story I thought of a while ago now. The writing is still amateurish but feel free to read it if you have some free time! The main character, self-named Tian, is someone that transmigrates into the world of DanMachi after an instant death and is given the gift of cultivation by a mysterious god. With it, he'll have to catch up to the most dangerous adventurers in the world as the implications of someone able to ascend to the Heavens becomes known to the outside world. He will have to go over all the obstacles on his way to the Heavens, starting with the fact that he has to create a cultivation method by himself and learn how to cultivate from scratch, something that isn't an easy task. Obviously, other gods and mortals won't stay put while they see someone gradually ascending and they will have various reactions to Tian's way of becoming stronger.
It was going so well until for some odd reason author thought it was a good idea for the mc to just randomly tell Hestia that he reincarnated and that shes a fictional character he read from a book. Dumbest thing one could do in a fanfiction. Literally no reason to add it at all. I was actually liking the powers of the mc and his character. How he wouldnt shy away from taking Hestia from Bell and being a loser. But 3 chapters in and Something already dumb happened. sigh like why do this. NO point in it at all.
ネタバレを明かすvery well written and would be a fun read if it weren't for the unnecessary drama in chapter 3, seriously i just met you about 20 minutes ago but did you know you're a fictional character, you were in love with a guy named bell i got jealous and came to try my luck . it was a 5 star, but chapter 3 dropped to 2 stars, I'll give it 3 for pity.
The fanfic idea is good, but the development is terrible. The mc who was an ordinary person, barely stepped into the world of danmachi and has already adapted. As soon as he entered Orario the mc's first thought was to find Hestia and make her his wife, basically seeing her as an object. The characters don't look alive (especially the mc), the cultivation method is weird and boring. But the last straw was Bell being a girl. Basically the author doesn't have enough confidence to make Hestia fall in love if mc has any competition. (which makes sense given the mc's personality). Normally I would consider this a bad fanfic, but with an interesting idea (cultivator in danmachi) that is worth reading and seeing what happens when you have nothing else to do, but the mc's personality is simply Trash. The fact that most of the danmachi fanfics are of high quality may also have affected how I see this one a bit, but overall this fanfic is terrible.
mc is disappointing, he tries to seduce a goddess who has rejected several suitors with better appearance than the protagonist known as the 3 great virgins of heaven. according to mc he has great possibilities of seducing her, with simple compliments The big mistake in most novels is when Mc says that he is a reincarnated person and that he has system powers for the first person of love interest. my simple opinion
ネタバレを明かすWritten as of the most recent chapter, chapter 5. The writing quality is great. Spelling, capitalization, punctuation, grammer. It should always be decent in stories, but sadly thats not always the case. The story so far is going okay, there hasnt been much. There are some unique aspects that I am liking, and look forward to. I’ve rarely found Danmachi fanfics where the MC’s goal is to ascend and actually achieves it. Bad things: The cringe. The first three chapters are filled with the Shrek: “*Snap* Yep, that’s going into my cringe compilation”. He does some weird and shameful stuff that was difficult to read through, but around chapter 4 it gets better. One of the most annoying things an author can do is to make the MC make literal braindead decisions just for the sake of moving plot along. Which happened. This dude knew that monsters dropped purple crystals when killed, which exchange for money. But somehow he forgot all of that. Doesnt even take a bag in, and has to use his shirt. And because of that, a whole issue comes along. I’m truly hoping that the story will be good and continued.
Concept is good but The stupid cultivation technique thing is annoying me. Maybe give him a technique by the cliche random old book finding thing. story is good doh. Maybe make the MC feel a bit more alive.
MC is gonna be one of the cultivators that Take time to find Out what Happens when i Push my KI this way insteed and makes a perfect cultivation Method on His own somehow right...?
ネタバレを明かす2 Chaps and I'm already hooked, pls. I beg you to not drop, just take your time.... Good luck author!! Do your best!, Ganbatte!, <Insert Inspirational shit.>, Wish you all the best!
Très bien bonne continuation...............................................................................................................................
It has good grammar, interesting ideas and a promising future, but it has some problems in my opinion. The main problem was how Tian starts his new life in the world. You are practically making him create a cultivation technique without having a base technique for it. It's the same thing as having someone from 1000 AD create a cell phone, it's impossible. He was a normal person who lived in a world without involvement with the supernatural (who had no mana, energy, superpowers, etc.). I will continue reading because I want to see a little more to decide whether to follow or not. Have a nice day.
ネタバレを明かすI absolutely love this story so far. Its well written and organized and extremely realistic. Plz keep writing this. I would really like to see more of this.
It's nice to see stories like these that even consider the smallest details. I read about the detail of saying that Danmachi's world is fictional but after analyzing the reasons why the main character says that it becomes acceptable. Lying to a God is impossible and after telling the secret the relationship of son and Goddess became very good. Keep it up author. The story is wonderful.
really good danmachi story, love how you make it different than others in the sense of developing the characters personalities and showing how it really is instead of what the anime showed
The story has been very entertaining so far, and the pacing of the plot is also very nice. If I had to complain about something, it would be the slow updates. Other than that, I'm enjoying the story so far.
It is a well thought out fanfic. There are a few minor grammar errors, predominantly typos, but the author seems to have a good grasp of the english language. The characters are a bit different from the original ones personality-wise, but this seemed to be a choice taken to make the story verisimile. It is still far from being perfect and from reaching the realms of big authors - not the ones in this platform, as the majority of the fictions here seem to be written by braindead kids. It is still good, and can be classified as being among the best ones from here. I, personally, did not like the genderbend on Bell Cranel, slips like these can easily spoil the entire work.
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I thought I'd leave a review, since most of the other reviews aren't particularly helpful. The story has the basis of a man being reincarnated in the world of Danmachi with the ability to cultivate, pretty cool premise so far! Writing : The quality of the writing is better than most on webnovel, which isn't saying much admittedly, but comparatively the writing quality is great and I didn't notice any outstanding flaws when reading. Story: Next is the problem some people had with chapter 3, the MC didn't explicitly say the world is fictional but essentially that records of the world of Danmachi exists in his world and that includes future knowledge. I think the change of changing Bell into a girl is a interesting idea which adds a lot to the substance of the story as it doesn't remove the character entirely, which would de-rail the entire story plot and adds a interesting plot point. Characters: The changes the author introduced to the story doesn't effect the flow of the story as there were some changes to the world and backstory of Bell to reflect the changes to the character so it isn't just slapping some flex tape on the character and calling it a day. Some degree of effort went into thinking about how the new Bell would of grown up and how that would effect her character and how the world itself would react to a female Bell. Hestia seems about the same as the original material, not many other characters have been introduced so far as of chapter 6, but I'm looking forward to what other changes occur due to the presence of the Tian. Main Character: That goes onto the final point which is the Tian himself, he isn't particularly very smart, self-admittedly and hasn't really had much chance to show more of his character but a good foundation is there to build upon. TLDR: Some of the other reviews are unduly harsh for miniscule or miscounstrued reasons but it is ultimately a story with good potential, and you should give it a try if you like Danmachi or the general themes.