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作者: Erivva

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"I'm just a silly child with an unreachable dream. As a child, I always dreamed of being a Hero, but I went down the wrong path. I now look back at my foolish dream of wanting to be a Hero and saving others.
Me, a Hero, what a farce. My sins can never be repented for they were too great."

"Hah, don't even get me started on the story about my journey, for it's just a long and painful route to becoming a Diamond."

"Power, luxury, worlds we can have all of them, but we can never fully be happy."

"Diamond goddess my ass!! What is the use of becoming a powerful being if we can't even Live peacefully?" She turns to look at the child with pink hair and pink eyes.

"Would you be interested in knowing who we are?" Iris asked the child.

"Yes of course since I'm one too it would be good if I know," Polyra answered shyly and she twisted her hair on her fingertips.


"Diamonds were supreme beings that were given to create life and destroy life, also known as world destroyers. They could pass through time and dimensions and create worlds of their own." I said as stars formed around them.

"All Diamonds have a Diamond Gem in their body plus we have Diamond-shaped pupils to identify ourselves."

"So then are we like cool or something," Polyra asked joyfully.

Iris gave her a blank yet sad look, "I wish we were..."

"All I know is throughout myself as a Diamond all I've felt was pain, but one thing that keeps me going is to find my sisters."
"Diamonds are never free unless we're truly strong, but if we aren't we would be chased for the rest of our days."

"What about the rest of the other Diamonds? There must be more people like us, right? Polyra asked nervously.

"They're not my problem to deal with," Iris said coldly.

"Then why did you save me?" Polyra asked as she stared deep into Iris's lifeless eyes.

"Maybe a connection, I don't know." She responded.

"Well then Iris if you won't find the rest of the other Diamonds, I will," Polyra stood up proudly.

"Hahahaha, fine then have it your way."

"Polyra, do you still want to be the Pink Diamond and become my follower?" she asked, stretching out her hand.

"How can you also ask such a silly question Iris. You were the one who raised me and I don't care if I become a follower of the Black Diamond Goddess, because you're like a mother to me," she said softly.

"Then the whole heavens would hate you dear child.
For the Black Diamond shall always be the Diamond to bring calamity, chaos, and evil upon everything…."

"And the Diamond war shall begin soon."

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meixiaolian

I dont find any errors on reading this novel, in fact the prologue is interesting and an idea about God's is really a greattt concept. This should be read by everyone though and oh, how to be one of the twelve diamonds elite?

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Erivva

Hey everyone, well I've finally decided I want to take my book to the next level, so would kindly like to ask if you could all support me by sharing this book with your friends and if you want you can vote. I want to be able to join the rankings but it's not time yet for me so all I can ask for is your support. And thank you for supporting me.

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Shirario

Sorry ❤️ author you had to change your book because fanfics can't be accepted as original stories. but don't worry I'll support you and you must update more for us 😉

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Iriscute7

Loved your new chapter author. Tina sounds like a super sexy spy and my Shiro she just had to leave her room at night. And Jane is so scary 😩I thought she was cute. well I'm waiting for more updates.

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Iriscute7

I'm glad your story can now be voted author and I would gladly support you since you story has alot of potential 😩😭✋✋and should be recognized. And pls update more

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Prikkrang

I didn't find the synopsis that appealing but the prologue is bomb author. I mean it was like I was seeing some movie, it was that descriptive and emotional. I hope for this novel's success author-sama! Fighting!!!

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Zico_Bollin

A very interesting and amazing story author, i hope your book gets noticed soon and i'll be cheering you on. Keep up the good work. i like Iris and i already hate the black diamond

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Ellinia_ab

The story is absolutely amazing. Its not following any tropes and its unique in its own way. i'm not able to predict what would happen next. THis story truly deserves to be great

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precious_pruddy

The story Is amazingly written. The story is catchy and very interesting to read. The character description and world building has been done well. Great job author.

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Daoist1jkJ37

Author pls tell me when there would be a fast update. This slow update is killing me 😭😭😩😩✊✊ I love your story and leaving me on a cliffhanger like that is just mean.

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Yvette_Celia

i really like this story. theres nothing that i can complain about. the author has done a great job at writing. i love it so much and will read it again

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Akira_Monadelle

This was a very fun read. I read all the way to chapter 11 so far and the story as well as the author's writing just keep getting better and better. I enjoyed reading, it was very interesting and the pace was perfection. There were little to no grammatical errors making this an easy and understandable read regardless of the many types of people I had to memorize lol. There were so many: Diamonds, gems, pearls, regals and later monsters and probably a lot more but those were the ones I remembered. I'm looking forward to future updates, keep up the wonderful work [img=recommend]

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Want_A_Martini

Although by no means a bad story, the writing often feels amateurish, using lackluster and repetitive wording that makes the story feel more like a glorified middle school fan-fic than a fantasy novel. Though many people seem to enjoy the author's style, so don't take my analysis as a deterrent. The world-building is fairly detailed, if not overly expository and at cost of early story pacing. Things, people, and locations are often over-described every time they're mentioned or are always mentioned in full name, making sentences harder to read and bogging down the story's flow. The characters are fairly well done, only feeling more like "characters" than people due to the exposition and description issues I've mentioned earlier. I'll leave world-building and characters at "solid," as the story hasn't been around long enough to fully realize either of them. Though I will say, leaving things to unfold as the story progresses will leave you with far more to work with later, and will lessen your chances of driving the story in a direction that makes no sense, just for more content. Pacing>Exposition My second piece of advice would be to use more descriptive wording, rather than more descriptions. The reader's detail can fill in a lot, part of reading is imagining what's happening. Using descriptive wording and painting a picture that allows them to fill in the gaps, rather than overly describing things, allows for the story to flow much more naturally, while still giving them an idea of what things are like in the story.

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AarnaReddy

Hello auth I am hooked with your diamonds story and it is really very interesting. Your writing style and story development is good. I felt that the content on the initial chaps is too much to take for light readers. So please check it once apart from that everything is nice. All the best❤

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loretha

Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact leorichard2021*@*outlook.com (please ignore both * when sending email). A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.

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JJ_Prakoso

Here is my thought with this novel, I do really like the first few chapters, it feels like I am watching a great action movie. The world-building and lore about this book are very interesting especially with the diamonds and their existence through human eyes. To be honest, the prologue on this novel is very fascinating and enjoyfull to read which is quite rare in some other novel. The reason is because the author show the great war of the diamonds instead of telling. I think that's all I have to say about this novel that may have a great potential in future and thank you very much. Keep up the good work

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Scarlet_Wolf96

your story is amazing. Every time I read chapter by chapter it makes me very very curious. Moreover, there are unexpected moments that make this story even more interesting. good job [img=recommend][img=update]

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Fravashii

It is a great concept and I am reading this for the first time!! Different characters and different personalities are fun to read especially when you perceive them as the diamonds described by the author <3. There are times when the tense keeps changing but that doesn't disrupt the flow of reading at all. 4.8/5 from me personally because this is a gem in the world of games and with a little polishing it will shine to one of the bests.

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Ashley7Black

The story setting is interesting but it felt like there was too much information being told in the first chap(but I can undst that it is bcz it is the introductory chap) . Except for that -the character descriptions was nice. Hope u get a nice ranking!!!

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The story sounds interesting, I'm not really into this genre but, reading this wasn't bad. It's well written and you will find yourself looking for the next chapter!! You should give it a try. Character Design: It was a good idea to explain every important character in the prologue from the start, so the readers are not lost while following the story. It makes people curious to see how Iris being Shiro now will change knowing the colour of her diamand. Story development: It's logically written, we have a start a dreadful event and a new life!

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