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Alex, who died in the modern world, was born in the versatile wizarding world.
He got the system at age 7.
He made his first awakening at the age of 8.
He made his second Awakening at the age of 12.
Alex was a high-level magician when Mo Fan was transferred to this world.
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Lacking and rushed. The writing quality suffer from the mediocre translation and lack of editing. The characters lack depth. Not enough interactions. The parents and grandparents are barely known. The love interest was barely part of the story, so them being together, while expected, was just dumped on us. The characters and surroundings lack descriptions. Too much focus on the level-ups of the elements, and status updates. No real training or cultivating shown. Just the results.
please correct your he or she because they always repeat and when you mention mc you always change it to she and the chapter 3 or 4 has many mistake please change it
Low score due to not knowing what gender the MC is, also for the harem path. If there is a harem there is no plot. So far as I have read, it is confusing to say the least. there is the beginnings of a plot but it seems like it's going to just become a wish fulfillment story. No building on the characters except for the time he got slashed by a rat.
Not very good, lots of issues. Too lazy to make a long review, not worth your time.
It's a very good novel. [img=exp]..............................................................................................................................
Grammar and punctuation need improving, it's hard to read through all the sentence errors. Getting the correct gender for the characters is also needed. It seems like an okay read but there is a big need for improvement, writing-wise. Those are some of the things that need improving.
seems like it would be a great book but I can't stand the fact that the grammar is so bad if it gets fixed I will come back and read it again even if the mc is a girl
MC is Man, but author always uses She, Her. Grammar is not very good. This is chapter 3 and I want to drop the novel already. one hundred and forty words
Honestly I like a lot of things about this novel but One thing i dont like is the grammer i know that whoever made this doesnt speak english to well but please use Something like grammarly so You can fix your mistakes Besides that its really interesting
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Sorry to crappy translation for me, to read it was painful. Your idea is good, if you can translate it better I will read it, good luck. .......................................................................................................................................
I am getting crazy with how the author can't write she/he right it's so disturbing to read like the story is good but this error is like terrible
I can say that this got potential. With OP mc, it would be good to always keep track of his progress in one auxiliary chapter. And hope you could write more because it would improve your English. That's all, thank you.
although update stability is good but throughout the chapter there will be at least 3 or 4 times author will show the status of the mc which takes half of the chapter. And there really is no development in story. He just keeps on training and becoming stronger. no introduction with original cast yet. No interaction with other characters other than his family and his 2 lovers. in short it's pretty boring
Wow! I can't believe the ridiculous amount of VM fics that have SI have awakening so young... Do you think that everyone else is a retard???
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Writing Quality: Most of it is good, but the first few chapters were kinda bad, so I think 4 stars is fair. Stability of Updates: I don't know... I binge-read my way to Chapter 31, and since then Author hasn't posted a new chapter. Story Development: The Author managed to keep the story good, and maintained an admirable attitude of writing, and didn't go crazy halfway (which I often do while writing). I think that, in itself, is admirable. Character Design: ...What can I even say... Okay, I have no words for this one other than 'Nothing is Perfect'. World Background: Well, the World itself is that of Versatile Mage, and the Author didn't stray awak from the basics of that series so it's enough for 4 stars, and again, 'Nothing is Perfect'.
The overall experience is great. The only big suggestion is find an editor who has english as a first language to correct the grammar and tense errors . hope you are doing better
When the followers did not evaluate, I said I would do it myself. Because of my eye problem, I can write a part in half a day. After writing it, I translate it to English. I am correcting mistakes in translation for an hour. then I check again with the translation program. After all, I'm publishing the episode. My reward for doing all this is eye pain that I have to endure. There may be errors in the sections after what I have done, but I will not edit it further. Because I do not gain anything from this. I wrote it for fun.