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Word of warning to those who want to read this based on the description. This is a joke. It’s a mess. It’s a horrible fanfic. I couldn’t get past chapter 3. The dialogue is horrible, the mc is weak asf and dumb asf, and almost the entire second chapter is dedicated to a rock funeral after he dropped a rock down a drain…. A rock funeral…. Just don’t read it if you want any sanity.
This is a beautiful start to a fascinating take on Harry Potter. It's well written and the characters are developed incredibly well; while also placing them seamlessly into the world of Harry Potter. The small additions and minor tweaks to the world give the story a much more magical feel than you'd find in other stories. Overall, compared with other fan fictions here, this one is amazing. If anything subtracts from the story, it would be that the author was too good. Usually this isn't much of an issue in stories like this because the author doesn't manage to draw their reader enough into their story. From a literary standpoint, the beginning of the story was harsh. The tone and mood was drastic to say the least. You started with an overall comedic and easy flowing overtone, building a relationship between two childhood friends; and then suddenly twisted it to an overall disgust. The writing and ploy was excellent, however it only resulted in creating negative emotions for a reader. Was it a good plot device that separated the two friends, while also displaying his seer abilities and magical prowess? Yep. Did it also turn off and leave a negative feeling for the reader at the very beginning of the story? Yep again. Again, usually this isn't something that matters in works like this because the author isn't a good author. But in this case, Id really recommend thinking about tone and mood, especially at the very beginning of a story. Still, a diamond of a story. Hope to see it advance into a full one.
Well I really like the story. It’s definitely a fun read and sometimes the grammar is off but it’s not like other hp fanfics. It is actually like he’s ATTENDING SCHOOL and he’s doing SCHOOL THINGS. Also I like how he has no interest in romance 👍. Really overall this is one of the better hp fanfics I’ve read. Also no system 😁
Its a good story so far........... ...................................................................................................................
I found this treasure by recommendation and off what I like. I now can only see it as a five star treasure for it's summary alone and my opinion shall not change.
really well written so far I am enjoying it immensely not the usual HP fanfic drivel either not one complaint at all Keep up the good work you have a future ahead of you as an author if you get the inspiration to write your own
this is tiring to read, the author is trying to lengthen the chapter by repeating the same sentence with a different word but still the same meaning,seriously the amount of filler in each chapter is a lot
This Story to is not really a Story, there is pretty much no plot. If it were an Anime, it would be a Filler with a ton of additional Filler. It starts before Harry Potter Canon and is pretty much about OCs going to Hogwarts, it already took 10 Chapters just to get to Diagon Alley. The MC seems also to be mentally impaired while being a Ravenclaw. He set Olivanders Store on fire by saying 'I cast Fireball' when he found his wand... just why? Besides the Author having something to stretch out the Word count. The whole Story feels like just stretching the Word Count. First unnecessary Drama with the Muggle Friend who gets abused at home, and shouldn't matter for the Story since she can appear only during the Holidays. Of course we also have Political correctness, a deaf girl who the MC meets on the train. Just how is she gonna attend classes? Of course! How lucky, the MC knows sign language and the word count can be stretched with more filler Plot on how he helps her to learn in Hogwarts. And since it's before Canon we have a lot of totally original OCs, instead of 'Hannah Abbot' the first kid to be sorted is 'Anna Abbot'. We also have Pure Bloods from sacred 28 who for a moment sounded like 'Draco Malfoy' but don't worry it's just 'Draken Macmillian' a new friend who gets sorted in Slytherin for the novel idea of inter house friendship. This should give you a good idea about the story. The grammar is not bad.
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I dislike the bell character. The scenes involving luise were extremely pointless and were there probably to just give the mc trauma also it gets brought back up like twice from the chapter he enters hogwarts to the current last chapter (ch-18) just my opinion but i don't think the event that made his magic explode with emotions should get brushed off that easily
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Well, the character scenes had no real meaning. Disappointed with this book 🫠
I've not even read the fanfic yet and you have already earned a 5 Star review from me simply based on the Synopsis! GG my good fellow.
Forgot to drop a review when this came out, but its Joanjudo so you can just know this going to be good
روايه رائعة جدا لقد أنهيت الفصول المفتوحه كلها مره واحده اتمنى ان تستمر ف ترجمتها شخصيه البطل تجذبني للقراءه أكثر فضوله عن السحر اتمنى ان يستمر ولا تكون فتره معينه فقط وبعدها ينشغل عن السحر وهل سيكون هناك حريم اتمنى، لا لا احبهم ابدا ولكن اريد ان اعرف اسم الاصلي من فضلك
The description on its own is already enough to convince me on its own :) ..............................................................................................................................
The description on its own deserves 5 stars I haven’t even started reading it yet………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………..
Didn't felt like reading this after louise fiasco you will see it is pretty early in the chapters
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I CAST 'CONSTANTLY TWITCHING LEFT EYE!!' ..................I CAST 'KIDNEY STONE!!'............I CAST 'COMMON COLD!!'...............................................................................................................................................
Story is awesome by the way🤩🤩, I really really enjoyed reading the story. I hope you continue to give us unique and Awesome chapters in the future, I loved Mc Personality he quite unique and also loved his Mom and Dad. ..... ..... ..... .....
Goooooooooooddd shittttttt tbh ………… ……………….. ……………………………. ……………….. ……………. [img=Feeling it][img=Good night][img=Feeling it][img=Good night][img=Feeling it][img=Good night][img=Loving it][img=Loving it][img=Loving it][img=Loving it][img=Loving it]
5 stars cause this is first fanfic/story that Ihave seen that uses these most powerful spells :)
I’m the author so obviously this is a mandatory five stars, now onto the actual book. This book has many things like a plot, characters, hopeful character development, villains, fights and other book related things. If you don’t like this just know I will Cast Instant Brazilian Wax on each and every one of you. Now go read and I hope you enjoy it.
2 chapter so my review is not objective, but cool. Even if the synopsis remind me my dnd campaign so i start with a good mood
me ha gustado mucho como se han llevado el desarrollo de los personajes secundarios y el protagonista , me gusta que la interacción de ellos me agrada bastante,además la historia tiene un buen ritmo no muy lento ni rápido, me gustaria ver cómo se sigue desarrollando la historia y ver cómo lleva a sus personajes,(ya estoy esperando con muchas ansias el siguiente capítulo).
Word of warning to those who want to read this based on the description. This is a joke. It’s a mess. It’s a horrible fanfic. I couldn’t get past chapter 3. The dialogue is horrible, the mc is weak asf and dumb asf, and almost the entire second chapter is dedicated to a rock funeral after he dropped a rock down a drain…. A rock funeral…. Just don’t read it if you want any sanity.
This is a beautiful start to a fascinating take on Harry Potter. It's well written and the characters are developed incredibly well; while also placing them seamlessly into the world of Harry Potter. The small additions and minor tweaks to the world give the story a much more magical feel than you'd find in other stories. Overall, compared with other fan fictions here, this one is amazing. If anything subtracts from the story, it would be that the author was too good. Usually this isn't much of an issue in stories like this because the author doesn't manage to draw their reader enough into their story. From a literary standpoint, the beginning of the story was harsh. The tone and mood was drastic to say the least. You started with an overall comedic and easy flowing overtone, building a relationship between two childhood friends; and then suddenly twisted it to an overall disgust. The writing and ploy was excellent, however it only resulted in creating negative emotions for a reader. Was it a good plot device that separated the two friends, while also displaying his seer abilities and magical prowess? Yep. Did it also turn off and leave a negative feeling for the reader at the very beginning of the story? Yep again. Again, usually this isn't something that matters in works like this because the author isn't a good author. But in this case, Id really recommend thinking about tone and mood, especially at the very beginning of a story. Still, a diamond of a story. Hope to see it advance into a full one.
Well I really like the story. It’s definitely a fun read and sometimes the grammar is off but it’s not like other hp fanfics. It is actually like he’s ATTENDING SCHOOL and he’s doing SCHOOL THINGS. Also I like how he has no interest in romance 👍. Really overall this is one of the better hp fanfics I’ve read. Also no system 😁
Its a good story so far........... ...................................................................................................................
I found this treasure by recommendation and off what I like. I now can only see it as a five star treasure for it's summary alone and my opinion shall not change.
really well written so far I am enjoying it immensely not the usual HP fanfic drivel either not one complaint at all Keep up the good work you have a future ahead of you as an author if you get the inspiration to write your own
this is tiring to read, the author is trying to lengthen the chapter by repeating the same sentence with a different word but still the same meaning,seriously the amount of filler in each chapter is a lot
This Story to is not really a Story, there is pretty much no plot. If it were an Anime, it would be a Filler with a ton of additional Filler. It starts before Harry Potter Canon and is pretty much about OCs going to Hogwarts, it already took 10 Chapters just to get to Diagon Alley. The MC seems also to be mentally impaired while being a Ravenclaw. He set Olivanders Store on fire by saying 'I cast Fireball' when he found his wand... just why? Besides the Author having something to stretch out the Word count. The whole Story feels like just stretching the Word Count. First unnecessary Drama with the Muggle Friend who gets abused at home, and shouldn't matter for the Story since she can appear only during the Holidays. Of course we also have Political correctness, a deaf girl who the MC meets on the train. Just how is she gonna attend classes? Of course! How lucky, the MC knows sign language and the word count can be stretched with more filler Plot on how he helps her to learn in Hogwarts. And since it's before Canon we have a lot of totally original OCs, instead of 'Hannah Abbot' the first kid to be sorted is 'Anna Abbot'. We also have Pure Bloods from sacred 28 who for a moment sounded like 'Draco Malfoy' but don't worry it's just 'Draken Macmillian' a new friend who gets sorted in Slytherin for the novel idea of inter house friendship. This should give you a good idea about the story. The grammar is not bad.
ネタバレを明かす I dislike the bell character. The scenes involving luise were extremely pointless and were there probably to just give the mc trauma also it gets brought back up like twice from the chapter he enters hogwarts to the current last chapter (ch-18) just my opinion but i don't think the event that made his magic explode with emotions should get brushed off that easily
ネタバレを明かす Well, the character scenes had no real meaning. Disappointed with this book 🫠
I've not even read the fanfic yet and you have already earned a 5 Star review from me simply based on the Synopsis! GG my good fellow.
Forgot to drop a review when this came out, but its Joanjudo so you can just know this going to be good
روايه رائعة جدا لقد أنهيت الفصول المفتوحه كلها مره واحده اتمنى ان تستمر ف ترجمتها شخصيه البطل تجذبني للقراءه أكثر فضوله عن السحر اتمنى ان يستمر ولا تكون فتره معينه فقط وبعدها ينشغل عن السحر وهل سيكون هناك حريم اتمنى، لا لا احبهم ابدا ولكن اريد ان اعرف اسم الاصلي من فضلك
The description on its own is already enough to convince me on its own :) ..............................................................................................................................
The description on its own deserves 5 stars I haven’t even started reading it yet………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………..
Didn't felt like reading this after louise fiasco you will see it is pretty early in the chapters
ネタバレを明かす I CAST 'CONSTANTLY TWITCHING LEFT EYE!!' ..................I CAST 'KIDNEY STONE!!'............I CAST 'COMMON COLD!!'...............................................................................................................................................
Story is awesome by the way🤩🤩, I really really enjoyed reading the story. I hope you continue to give us unique and Awesome chapters in the future, I loved Mc Personality he quite unique and also loved his Mom and Dad. ..... ..... ..... .....
Goooooooooooddd shittttttt tbh ………… ……………….. ……………………………. ……………….. ……………. [img=Feeling it][img=Good night][img=Feeling it][img=Good night][img=Feeling it][img=Good night][img=Loving it][img=Loving it][img=Loving it][img=Loving it][img=Loving it]
5 stars cause this is first fanfic/story that Ihave seen that uses these most powerful spells :)
I’m the author so obviously this is a mandatory five stars, now onto the actual book. This book has many things like a plot, characters, hopeful character development, villains, fights and other book related things. If you don’t like this just know I will Cast Instant Brazilian Wax on each and every one of you. Now go read and I hope you enjoy it.
2 chapter so my review is not objective, but cool. Even if the synopsis remind me my dnd campaign so i start with a good mood
me ha gustado mucho como se han llevado el desarrollo de los personajes secundarios y el protagonista , me gusta que la interacción de ellos me agrada bastante,además la historia tiene un buen ritmo no muy lento ni rápido, me gustaria ver cómo se sigue desarrollando la historia y ver cómo lleva a sus personajes,(ya estoy esperando con muchas ansias el siguiente capítulo).