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everything is good the problems's is. pacing and the paragraphs feel off meaning it just needs sum update and it should be good
I wonder if gloxinia will become stronger or stay that way because there are fatuis and other characters that are stronger than the archons that would be a problem if they notice it you could give him the power of meliodas the full counter as a last resort that instead of reflecting magical attacks reflect elemental power with double the power to have a chance against enemies stronger than him although it is just my opinion.
truly a unique story i must say and i like the interaction between the characters (ex:MC and arranaras)
It got potential, though the story pacing a little to fast. i hope you give pov to the village people so we can see how they met mc
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Love the story so far wondering if you are going to give him a vision and/or a gnosis? Oh, also a idea is connecting to the abyss or something like that.
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everything is good the problems's is. pacing and the paragraphs feel off meaning it just needs sum update and it should be good
I wonder if gloxinia will become stronger or stay that way because there are fatuis and other characters that are stronger than the archons that would be a problem if they notice it you could give him the power of meliodas the full counter as a last resort that instead of reflecting magical attacks reflect elemental power with double the power to have a chance against enemies stronger than him although it is just my opinion.
truly a unique story i must say and i like the interaction between the characters (ex:MC and arranaras)
It got potential, though the story pacing a little to fast. i hope you give pov to the village people so we can see how they met mc
nice work author (☞^o^) ☞(☞^o^) ☞(☞^o^) ☞(☞^o^) ☞(☞^o^) ☞(☞^o^) ☞(☞^o^) ☞(☞^o^) ☞(☞^o^) ☞(☞^o^) ☞(☞^o^) ☞
Love the story so far wondering if you are going to give him a vision and/or a gnosis? Oh, also a idea is connecting to the abyss or something like that.