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The story shows promise, but the linearity of the story is confusing. Characters are introduced and then forgotten quickly. The story itself is confusing and bounces around constantly, especially with the time skips and changes development. Like what happened with his sister or Emerald? why did they just stop being mentioned? What about the rest of his family? Who the hell is Xavier, and why did he get a single mention in a chapter and then never get explained? The story has promised, but it seems like it's steam rolling forward with no linear progression or sense.
Five star shameless author review - this book is peak, you can ask your questions here and I’ll answer them
I agree with the other comment. The concept is interesting, the idea is great, writing is on point, update rate is good (especially lately), but I think you could work on transitions between events within the plot, the changes are too sudden and all over the place. Also theres not enough interaction between characters. There were a lot of conversations I wanted to see but got disappointed like for example: mc and his sister after kidnapping or mc and kiara after he saved her. Also what happened with Celine? Im a little bit confused, I also hardly remember anything about his mother and system.
ネタバレを明かす The story shows promise, but the linearity of the story is confusing. Characters are introduced and then forgotten quickly. The story itself is confusing and bounces around constantly, especially with the time skips and changes development. Like what happened with his sister or Emerald? why did they just stop being mentioned? What about the rest of his family? Who the hell is Xavier, and why did he get a single mention in a chapter and then never get explained? The story has promised, but it seems like it's steam rolling forward with no linear progression or sense.
Five star shameless author review - this book is peak, you can ask your questions here and I’ll answer them
I agree with the other comment. The concept is interesting, the idea is great, writing is on point, update rate is good (especially lately), but I think you could work on transitions between events within the plot, the changes are too sudden and all over the place. Also theres not enough interaction between characters. There were a lot of conversations I wanted to see but got disappointed like for example: mc and his sister after kidnapping or mc and kiara after he saved her. Also what happened with Celine? Im a little bit confused, I also hardly remember anything about his mother and system.
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