4.31
あなたの考えを他の人と共有してください
レビューを書くFILLED with inconsistencies and the progression is painful. MC just waves his hand and poof “i invented automated steam engine factory producing me the dozens of products i invented!” If your capable of temporarily labotomizing yourself I would recommend. (this was a very rude review sorry about that)
Great story Great characters Great all around.[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=strong][img=strong][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=strong][img=strong][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
too many plotholes that are skipped with simple explanations. best example is his whole business that is distillery with automation and steam engines that is earning millions of gold per year, but somehow failing to create printing press. also too many POV-s of misc characters. overall subpar fan fiction.
[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
The author obviously did not put much thought in writing this story. The pacing,,the explanations, the dialogues and the narrative of the story is just not put together well. 4/10
[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
[img=strong][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
recomendada, siga con el buen trabajo, pero incremente el ritmo de publicaciones si no es mucho pedir, cuenta con mis piedras si así sera jeje
Gooooood!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!![img=strong]
the development is limited to small excerpts explaining what the MC did, his actions are without rhyme or reason and he can change his thoughts at any time, overall this story gave me a great feeling of "disorder".
I know that many say mc is simp but I like where this going . many say he not alpha but you must know this fanfiction people read fanfiction for forget the hard days of life and be entertained
Good.....................................................................................................................................................................................................
Kind of boring since the novel just goes in circles and characters just revert to their old ways despite spending years with the MC who was very close to them. Feel like the story was a rush job.
[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Interesting premise using a character from a house that isn’t common. Writing so far seems solid and the path taken by the MC so far is cool interested to see how the war of 5 kings will play out.
[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Pretty good so far. Pretty good so far. Pretty good so far. Pretty good so far. Pretty good so far. Pretty good so far. Pretty good so far. Pretty good so far.
Too much deux ex machina. The characters have no depth and feels more like those CN black bellied cardboard cutouts. Updates stopped for a while now.
FILLED with inconsistencies and the progression is painful. MC just waves his hand and poof “i invented automated steam engine factory producing me the dozens of products i invented!” If your capable of temporarily labotomizing yourself I would recommend. (this was a very rude review sorry about that)
Great story Great characters Great all around.[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=strong][img=strong][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=strong][img=strong][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
too many plotholes that are skipped with simple explanations. best example is his whole business that is distillery with automation and steam engines that is earning millions of gold per year, but somehow failing to create printing press. also too many POV-s of misc characters. overall subpar fan fiction.
[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
The author obviously did not put much thought in writing this story. The pacing,,the explanations, the dialogues and the narrative of the story is just not put together well. 4/10
[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
[img=strong][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
recomendada, siga con el buen trabajo, pero incremente el ritmo de publicaciones si no es mucho pedir, cuenta con mis piedras si así sera jeje
Gooooood!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!![img=strong]
the development is limited to small excerpts explaining what the MC did, his actions are without rhyme or reason and he can change his thoughts at any time, overall this story gave me a great feeling of "disorder".
I know that many say mc is simp but I like where this going . many say he not alpha but you must know this fanfiction people read fanfiction for forget the hard days of life and be entertained
Good.....................................................................................................................................................................................................
Kind of boring since the novel just goes in circles and characters just revert to their old ways despite spending years with the MC who was very close to them. Feel like the story was a rush job.
[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Interesting premise using a character from a house that isn’t common. Writing so far seems solid and the path taken by the MC so far is cool interested to see how the war of 5 kings will play out.
[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Pretty good so far. Pretty good so far. Pretty good so far. Pretty good so far. Pretty good so far. Pretty good so far. Pretty good so far. Pretty good so far.
Too much deux ex machina. The characters have no depth and feels more like those CN black bellied cardboard cutouts. Updates stopped for a while now.