The Arcane Path

LV 4

Airelda

So MC starts at Hogwarts in Harrys 3rd year. You don't find this out until chapter 5, so before chapter 5, I thought this was at a time before Harry because there are too many weird things about this kids existence that make no sense. Like a ton of muggles know he has magic because his magical bursts are uncontrollable and easily triggered by bullying. Yet the boy who is obviously a threat to the secrecy laws is out there for over 5 years proving to muggles magic is real, not on purpose of course, and no one comes to him. When he does get his letter, he gets introduced to Hogwarts by some random old guy that has nothing to do with Hogwarts? This old guy also gives him money for school and buys him an expensive Occamy?! Whose money is this? Sorry but no, Hogwarts definitely knows the kid is living in the streets and they don't send anyone? At this point I believe this whole story is in his head, in reality he's in a coma at some hospital, either from bullying gone bad or abuse from his father, the end. There are more weird things so far but this temporary review is already longer than I had intended.

LV 15

Postmand

The novel is building a closed of bullied type of edgy MC, tries som mystery, has some forced plots, skips large impressions and stuff like that. It feels a little rush and not well thought out. The MC and the people he interacts with don’t feel real and more like he’s having conversations with NPCs. Read to the sorting ceremony where he gets put in Slytherin and the author just writes that they call him mudblood and stuff like that without giving any dialogues or anything, he just tells us it happened.