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hello everyone, just wanted to let you know my thoughts on this book so far ~100chs in. The author often forgets what he has said in past chapters. For example, saying everyone's strength is limited to level 1 no matter how strong they are, yet still compares strength saying someone is stronger as a level 6, when all their powers are supposed to be limited suggesting there is no limiting factor🤦♂️. The pronouns used make it difficult to know who is talking and what gender they are, because the wrong pronouns are constantly used. The names all seem to be non-gender-specific. I'm not sure what gender a lot of the characters are because of the pronouns issue, but also because some male/female names seem to be used for the wrong gender. The flow of conversations will sometimes leave you scratching your head wondering what just happened because the responses make no sense based on what happened before and then what they end up doing after. On a plus note, the spelling seems pretty accurate so far, no notable mentions. The author desperately needs to write up a prologue to explain about the tribal fire, totems, and everything related to that to make things clearer to readers. Right now it seems like anything goes for the author🤦♂️. Overall, the book needs heavy editing. The story is interesting, but very confusing to keep track of what is what and what is happening. Makes me wish I had the time it takes to be an editor because there are a lot of books on web novel that desperately need a good editor😅. I like this book, but it's not good enough to pay for unless the author is willing to pay a really good editor to help make the story flow better. What is there is good, but it's like a diamond in the rough needing some heavy polishing to really stand out. Have a good day everyone!
The Novel has a great start around ch 90's the supernatural in the novel increases way too much, with so many tribes, tower arc feels like ripped out of some cultivation novel. What I personally liked about the novel was the prehistoric theme which is starting to fade. Still a decent novel worth a read if you have time.
Do you have pictures of beautiful women or not?....................................... ................................................................
personality trash mc like disdain towards primitive people without much worldly experience (what do you expect from primitive people) and laziness to teach them knowledge to quench their curiosity etc. with a messy way to uplift the tribes livelihood and organized functioning society, he just bombarding them with things here and there without proper planning.
Es muy interesante y me encanta la forma en que se va desarrollando la historia.
decent story. decent writing. I have not gotten far, but so far it has a lot of potential to go places. I guess we will see. I hate to see a good story line fall short so 🤞. if I finish I will comment with an update .
This book is good but it only lets u go to chapter 35 before u have to u passes witch almost all other books let u go to at least chapter 40 so in that regard this book suck and I wont use passes unless itspast chapter 40 at the very minimum!!
as of chapter 141 I've enjoyed the story. the world building is slow but detailed, characters are distinct, but could use a bit more detail. the storyline is good as well. my biggest complaint is the constant change of he/him/she/her. characters are introduced and referred to as male, then 2 paragraphs later are "she/her" then back to male again. dozens of chapters after a character was introduced (Yara) I still have no idea if they are a man or woman because of the pronouns changing constantly. this problem is not exclusive to this character, but as a whole, pronouns are constantly flip-flopped.
Повествование рваное, действия персонажей нелогичное. Лор интересный. Точно не 5 звёзд. Хотя задумка интересная, автор непоследователен в своих действиях и не учитывает множество нюансов. Если ты пишешь историю про развитие племени, то напиши ее хоть нормально
Hey Can you check out my book “I BECAME SUPER RICH AFTER DISCOVERING A MINIWORLD IN MY BOOKCASE “ Thank You🙏🙏
Good book. Please don't drop it author. I'm waiting for more chapters to binge.
Hello i love your book but it lack followers readers, and rating, am not sure if you have any social media platforms so we can discuss better
I'm currently on chapter 60, and this novel has a lot of potential to be discovered. As you can see in the synopsis, the story starts in the primitive era where the MC has the power of the Tree of Life. The MC can help a person reach their full potential and heal the injured. This is just the starting point of his power. By the way, based on the story, it is a harem. So if harem isn't to your taste, leave we don't want you here. But if you're interested in a compelling tribe story, then read this. Lastly, I'm just curious does he have any children, author? It's been months, but there is no outcome.
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Great book, a real page turner. The excellent world building and kingdom building are such a rare find on Web Novel. I got hooked reading this book from the beginning.
The reason I like this book is that it makes me feel the story is completely real and logical. Unlike other novels that feature superhuman abilities, which can feel quite unrealistic, this one stays grounded. That’s why I will keep on reading!
A great novel that makes me reluctant to skip even a single chapter. I’m eagerly anticipating the protagonist’s future growth. Writing such a novel isn’t easy; it requires a lot of accumulated common sense and knowledge. I’m looking forward to the content of the author’s future works.
The story of this novel is just too exciting; it’s the most thrilling plot I’ve seen so far. I hope to see the protagonist lead his tribe to develop step by step! It’s truly something to look forward to.
The setting of this book is very interesting, and the protagonist doesn’t have any superpowers. This kind of novel can keep readers engaged for a long time; it’s truly great!I really enjoy this novel; the content is incredibly captivating, and the story’s pace is very tight. It’s definitely worth reading, and I will keep following it and continue reading! I am willing to recommend this novel to my friends. Honestly, it’s truly fantastic!
Hello everyone, I'm the author Doubleyolkeggs, and I'm thrilled to be serializing my new book here. This is a story about transmigrating to a prehistoric world, which might be a bit niche, but I've spent a lot of time contemplating the world-building for this narrative. I hope to present it to you in a very engaging way and I hope you all enjoy it and find ample joy in reading it![img=recommend]
I didn’t say the beginning. I just fell in love with the story to me a kingdom building story are extremely rare and a good one at that but later in the story, he leaves the Crimson star tribe, and he becomes a personal power show which disappoints me, to be honest, I started reading the story because I had a kingdom title honestly, it’s hard for me to find any kingdom building story but this story has entertain me so yeah.
hello everyone, just wanted to let you know my thoughts on this book so far ~100chs in. The author often forgets what he has said in past chapters. For example, saying everyone's strength is limited to level 1 no matter how strong they are, yet still compares strength saying someone is stronger as a level 6, when all their powers are supposed to be limited suggesting there is no limiting factor🤦♂️. The pronouns used make it difficult to know who is talking and what gender they are, because the wrong pronouns are constantly used. The names all seem to be non-gender-specific. I'm not sure what gender a lot of the characters are because of the pronouns issue, but also because some male/female names seem to be used for the wrong gender. The flow of conversations will sometimes leave you scratching your head wondering what just happened because the responses make no sense based on what happened before and then what they end up doing after. On a plus note, the spelling seems pretty accurate so far, no notable mentions. The author desperately needs to write up a prologue to explain about the tribal fire, totems, and everything related to that to make things clearer to readers. Right now it seems like anything goes for the author🤦♂️. Overall, the book needs heavy editing. The story is interesting, but very confusing to keep track of what is what and what is happening. Makes me wish I had the time it takes to be an editor because there are a lot of books on web novel that desperately need a good editor😅. I like this book, but it's not good enough to pay for unless the author is willing to pay a really good editor to help make the story flow better. What is there is good, but it's like a diamond in the rough needing some heavy polishing to really stand out. Have a good day everyone!
The Novel has a great start around ch 90's the supernatural in the novel increases way too much, with so many tribes, tower arc feels like ripped out of some cultivation novel. What I personally liked about the novel was the prehistoric theme which is starting to fade. Still a decent novel worth a read if you have time.
Do you have pictures of beautiful women or not?....................................... ................................................................
personality trash mc like disdain towards primitive people without much worldly experience (what do you expect from primitive people) and laziness to teach them knowledge to quench their curiosity etc. with a messy way to uplift the tribes livelihood and organized functioning society, he just bombarding them with things here and there without proper planning.
Es muy interesante y me encanta la forma en que se va desarrollando la historia.
decent story. decent writing. I have not gotten far, but so far it has a lot of potential to go places. I guess we will see. I hate to see a good story line fall short so 🤞. if I finish I will comment with an update .
This book is good but it only lets u go to chapter 35 before u have to u passes witch almost all other books let u go to at least chapter 40 so in that regard this book suck and I wont use passes unless itspast chapter 40 at the very minimum!!
as of chapter 141 I've enjoyed the story. the world building is slow but detailed, characters are distinct, but could use a bit more detail. the storyline is good as well. my biggest complaint is the constant change of he/him/she/her. characters are introduced and referred to as male, then 2 paragraphs later are "she/her" then back to male again. dozens of chapters after a character was introduced (Yara) I still have no idea if they are a man or woman because of the pronouns changing constantly. this problem is not exclusive to this character, but as a whole, pronouns are constantly flip-flopped.
Повествование рваное, действия персонажей нелогичное. Лор интересный. Точно не 5 звёзд. Хотя задумка интересная, автор непоследователен в своих действиях и не учитывает множество нюансов. Если ты пишешь историю про развитие племени, то напиши ее хоть нормально
Hey Can you check out my book “I BECAME SUPER RICH AFTER DISCOVERING A MINIWORLD IN MY BOOKCASE “ Thank You🙏🙏
Good book. Please don't drop it author. I'm waiting for more chapters to binge.
Hello i love your book but it lack followers readers, and rating, am not sure if you have any social media platforms so we can discuss better
I'm currently on chapter 60, and this novel has a lot of potential to be discovered. As you can see in the synopsis, the story starts in the primitive era where the MC has the power of the Tree of Life. The MC can help a person reach their full potential and heal the injured. This is just the starting point of his power. By the way, based on the story, it is a harem. So if harem isn't to your taste, leave we don't want you here. But if you're interested in a compelling tribe story, then read this. Lastly, I'm just curious does he have any children, author? It's been months, but there is no outcome.
ネタバレを明かす Great book, a real page turner. The excellent world building and kingdom building are such a rare find on Web Novel. I got hooked reading this book from the beginning.
The reason I like this book is that it makes me feel the story is completely real and logical. Unlike other novels that feature superhuman abilities, which can feel quite unrealistic, this one stays grounded. That’s why I will keep on reading!
A great novel that makes me reluctant to skip even a single chapter. I’m eagerly anticipating the protagonist’s future growth. Writing such a novel isn’t easy; it requires a lot of accumulated common sense and knowledge. I’m looking forward to the content of the author’s future works.
The story of this novel is just too exciting; it’s the most thrilling plot I’ve seen so far. I hope to see the protagonist lead his tribe to develop step by step! It’s truly something to look forward to.
The setting of this book is very interesting, and the protagonist doesn’t have any superpowers. This kind of novel can keep readers engaged for a long time; it’s truly great!I really enjoy this novel; the content is incredibly captivating, and the story’s pace is very tight. It’s definitely worth reading, and I will keep following it and continue reading! I am willing to recommend this novel to my friends. Honestly, it’s truly fantastic!
Hello everyone, I'm the author Doubleyolkeggs, and I'm thrilled to be serializing my new book here. This is a story about transmigrating to a prehistoric world, which might be a bit niche, but I've spent a lot of time contemplating the world-building for this narrative. I hope to present it to you in a very engaging way and I hope you all enjoy it and find ample joy in reading it![img=recommend]
I didn’t say the beginning. I just fell in love with the story to me a kingdom building story are extremely rare and a good one at that but later in the story, he leaves the Crimson star tribe, and he becomes a personal power show which disappoints me, to be honest, I started reading the story because I had a kingdom title honestly, it’s hard for me to find any kingdom building story but this story has entertain me so yeah.