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I'd like to begin this review by saying you have a good idea here. With that said, let's begin. Writing quality is fairly decent. However, there are too many mistakes. Multiple cases of repeated words or sentences that dont make sense. Use grammerly or an AI to proofread a sentence, but dont use it for every sentence. There's also the issue with originality. I know that's weird to say for a fanfic, but the first two chapters are from another story. At least edit them a bit. Story development and background are my big issues. Events feel rushed and glossed over. Tony's time in the cave was at least 3 months. you had him there for a week, and he had somehow made his first suit. This is just one example. I get that this is an AU, but use the synopsis to tell us. Don't just drop a short description with no info as to what's going on and leave us out to dry.
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I haven't seen a web novel with so much potential in a long time, I love your novel, I love Tomas Andre!!!!...................................................... .
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So far, im loving this. There are some pitfalls i hope dont happen. Like more of the solo verse coming to this world. Him losing his powers. u know lame stuff. This really seems like a good fic, and im hopeful about its future.
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Read the first three chapters and I can already tell it’s going be a great fanfic
This refreshing 🤩😄. I love it. The author really shows Thomas's personality correctly
Love how the author portrays him in this fanfic. Some people don't know that Andre even though he seems to look arrogant he still a hero who protects society just like in the manhwa.
Sounds like a great premise was waiting for a story with Thomas Andrey to appear have high hopes for the story. Please don't drop.
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I'd like to begin this review by saying you have a good idea here. With that said, let's begin. Writing quality is fairly decent. However, there are too many mistakes. Multiple cases of repeated words or sentences that dont make sense. Use grammerly or an AI to proofread a sentence, but dont use it for every sentence. There's also the issue with originality. I know that's weird to say for a fanfic, but the first two chapters are from another story. At least edit them a bit. Story development and background are my big issues. Events feel rushed and glossed over. Tony's time in the cave was at least 3 months. you had him there for a week, and he had somehow made his first suit. This is just one example. I get that this is an AU, but use the synopsis to tell us. Don't just drop a short description with no info as to what's going on and leave us out to dry.
ネタバレを明かす I haven't seen a web novel with so much potential in a long time, I love your novel, I love Tomas Andre!!!!...................................................... .
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So far, im loving this. There are some pitfalls i hope dont happen. Like more of the solo verse coming to this world. Him losing his powers. u know lame stuff. This really seems like a good fic, and im hopeful about its future.
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Read the first three chapters and I can already tell it’s going be a great fanfic
This refreshing 🤩😄. I love it. The author really shows Thomas's personality correctly
Love how the author portrays him in this fanfic. Some people don't know that Andre even though he seems to look arrogant he still a hero who protects society just like in the manhwa.
Sounds like a great premise was waiting for a story with Thomas Andrey to appear have high hopes for the story. Please don't drop.
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