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レビューを書くSomething that I have always wondered is if the Valyrians conquered the continent of Essos because all the noble families of Valyria died? It just doesn't make sense, who ruled the big cities in Essos? the slaves? Weren't there dragon lords ruling those cities? Didn't the families of Valyria have their own territories?
This fanfic can be summarized as follows: Someone offends robert* Robert: bhahahaha Someone: "My God he is so dangerous, he laughed at the offense I made, I must be careful" Robet: bhahaha Someone: "My god he's so dangerous, the way he laughs is so calculating"
The main problem is the upload rate. At least give us an update if you are going to continue writing, and if so, how frequent is it going to be.
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first there are no Ntr ... people is too fast to make a review in that sense ... is true that the way the things happened is a little bit confused and that is 1 star less but in general i think is good and interesting to read
Pretty good, the Grammar is splendid, not perfect, but splendid, the character has a personality and the history is original too, he's OP but not in a physical way (Yet) but a mental one.
37 chapters are out and the story is great! Until you get to the part where MC gets cucked by another character. Author is trying to play it off like the child could possibly be MC’s but it still explicitly states the other character touched MC’s woman many times and he even rubs it in the reader’s face talking about how “stimulating” it is to ravage the prideful mc’s woman…..
At the beginning, the fic was incredible with how the MC being easy-going and not too OP on some occasion and the comedy added in was a plus to me. But somehow along the line, it feels abit too rushed and messy to actually follow up with the storyplots, especially which romantic partner that MC going to have if this isnt a harem genre. But overall, not bad but not good fic.
Love the story so far And hoping we get more for the other stores. You've got why lion l johnson story
35 chapters have gone by and absolutely nothing is happening. The author gives his Hanma bloodline and smart atoms and says he does not want the MC to be OP…. And the worst part is the NTR….
I really liked this novel at the start but with the way plot isngoing its become convulted. Mc is a contrary to what you'd expect from a king (he chose a king essence). He's more suited for schemes, very contrary to the cover of this book lol. It also feels artificial cause his essence causes others to be loyal to him just by drinking his blood, and I haven't seen one character question how or why. Progress with characters also feels stale, old men who are players of the game fear him even as when he was just a child while women are attracted to him lol. He's a "king" who lets his treasure be used by others, slight hints of (#maybe/ntr). Characters also feel ooc at times and most times author doesn't follow the show not tell rule. He just writes that mc has a charismatic aura with "boisterous laughter" instantly able to befriend most people with most of the progress being cut. All in all you could find better asoiaf ff out there with way better mcs who became better kings even without an essence to aid them. I havent see any grammar/spelling mistakes and author has potential, I hope he keeps writing
Overall, it's fine. The powers given are a bit too OP. The MC is a bit too much of a Gary Stu without faults, and people keep basking in his glory. A lot of chapters are just long ego boosts. What got me to drop it was the NTR. If you're fine with it and can move on from it, then that's great. But it's not for me.
I'll start with the things I like, I always enjoy interesting world building as well as the resource management trope, much more so if it means the development of a world in the medieval era whit modern knowledge. From there things go downhill, there is much more focus on the secondary characters describing the main character's good qualities than actually showing those qualities. Power, strength, wisdom and all the things that many of us want to obtain in one way or another is quite good, the problem is when to make these qualities shine you have to overshadow that of others, you are not the smartest person in a room because others are stupid, you are the "smartest" because you have more knowledge. Lastly, and the reason why I will unfortunately stop reading what in my opinion could have been something much more interesting to follow is the whole bloodline excuse, I say excuse because it seems that there is no other way in which the author can manage making his character shine so he decided to make it extremely powerful basically for free, in my opinion the most interesting thing about a story where a character develops is the development itself, from the age of 10+ the protagonist already has a super developed body almost better than some adults and now at 16 he will have (apart from the already superior advantages it had) even more advantages, there is nothing more to read, will the mad king do something stupid that will endanger something? It doesn't matter, the protagonist will solve it without a problem after all he have a lot of charisma and now almost super powers. Thanks for your efforts, good luck with your story.
I wish i could rate more. Wonderful writing and story development. I like Robert's personality. Ideal hero. Thanks author. Please do write more. Cheers.
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I haven't watched Game of Thrones, so I only know about it from other fanfics. This one is well-written and interesting. There are a few things I'm not clear on, and some parts I don't agree with, but I'm still intrigued and want to read more. Overall, it's pretty good.
Yep, so far so good! I'm on chapter 19 and I gotta say, this story is promising! Do you have patreon with advance chapters or is what's posted here the latest?
Something that I have always wondered is if the Valyrians conquered the continent of Essos because all the noble families of Valyria died? It just doesn't make sense, who ruled the big cities in Essos? the slaves? Weren't there dragon lords ruling those cities? Didn't the families of Valyria have their own territories?
This fanfic can be summarized as follows: Someone offends robert* Robert: bhahahaha Someone: "My God he is so dangerous, he laughed at the offense I made, I must be careful" Robet: bhahaha Someone: "My god he's so dangerous, the way he laughs is so calculating"
The main problem is the upload rate. At least give us an update if you are going to continue writing, and if so, how frequent is it going to be.
Keep it up man[img=Loving it][img=Loving it][img=Loving it][img=Loving it][img=Loving it][img=Loving it][img=Loving it][img=Loving it][img=Loving it]
first there are no Ntr ... people is too fast to make a review in that sense ... is true that the way the things happened is a little bit confused and that is 1 star less but in general i think is good and interesting to read
Pretty good, the Grammar is splendid, not perfect, but splendid, the character has a personality and the history is original too, he's OP but not in a physical way (Yet) but a mental one.
37 chapters are out and the story is great! Until you get to the part where MC gets cucked by another character. Author is trying to play it off like the child could possibly be MC’s but it still explicitly states the other character touched MC’s woman many times and he even rubs it in the reader’s face talking about how “stimulating” it is to ravage the prideful mc’s woman…..
At the beginning, the fic was incredible with how the MC being easy-going and not too OP on some occasion and the comedy added in was a plus to me. But somehow along the line, it feels abit too rushed and messy to actually follow up with the storyplots, especially which romantic partner that MC going to have if this isnt a harem genre. But overall, not bad but not good fic.
Love the story so far And hoping we get more for the other stores. You've got why lion l johnson story
35 chapters have gone by and absolutely nothing is happening. The author gives his Hanma bloodline and smart atoms and says he does not want the MC to be OP…. And the worst part is the NTR….
I really liked this novel at the start but with the way plot isngoing its become convulted. Mc is a contrary to what you'd expect from a king (he chose a king essence). He's more suited for schemes, very contrary to the cover of this book lol. It also feels artificial cause his essence causes others to be loyal to him just by drinking his blood, and I haven't seen one character question how or why. Progress with characters also feels stale, old men who are players of the game fear him even as when he was just a child while women are attracted to him lol. He's a "king" who lets his treasure be used by others, slight hints of (#maybe/ntr). Characters also feel ooc at times and most times author doesn't follow the show not tell rule. He just writes that mc has a charismatic aura with "boisterous laughter" instantly able to befriend most people with most of the progress being cut. All in all you could find better asoiaf ff out there with way better mcs who became better kings even without an essence to aid them. I havent see any grammar/spelling mistakes and author has potential, I hope he keeps writing
Overall, it's fine. The powers given are a bit too OP. The MC is a bit too much of a Gary Stu without faults, and people keep basking in his glory. A lot of chapters are just long ego boosts. What got me to drop it was the NTR. If you're fine with it and can move on from it, then that's great. But it's not for me.
I'll start with the things I like, I always enjoy interesting world building as well as the resource management trope, much more so if it means the development of a world in the medieval era whit modern knowledge. From there things go downhill, there is much more focus on the secondary characters describing the main character's good qualities than actually showing those qualities. Power, strength, wisdom and all the things that many of us want to obtain in one way or another is quite good, the problem is when to make these qualities shine you have to overshadow that of others, you are not the smartest person in a room because others are stupid, you are the "smartest" because you have more knowledge. Lastly, and the reason why I will unfortunately stop reading what in my opinion could have been something much more interesting to follow is the whole bloodline excuse, I say excuse because it seems that there is no other way in which the author can manage making his character shine so he decided to make it extremely powerful basically for free, in my opinion the most interesting thing about a story where a character develops is the development itself, from the age of 10+ the protagonist already has a super developed body almost better than some adults and now at 16 he will have (apart from the already superior advantages it had) even more advantages, there is nothing more to read, will the mad king do something stupid that will endanger something? It doesn't matter, the protagonist will solve it without a problem after all he have a lot of charisma and now almost super powers. Thanks for your efforts, good luck with your story.
I wish i could rate more. Wonderful writing and story development. I like Robert's personality. Ideal hero. Thanks author. Please do write more. Cheers.
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I haven't watched Game of Thrones, so I only know about it from other fanfics. This one is well-written and interesting. There are a few things I'm not clear on, and some parts I don't agree with, but I'm still intrigued and want to read more. Overall, it's pretty good.
Yep, so far so good! I'm on chapter 19 and I gotta say, this story is promising! Do you have patreon with advance chapters or is what's posted here the latest?
Keep writing, cool story need to know where it goes…