Reborn in the Mist

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Tim_Saian

A shameless 5star as once again I am writing what I can't read anywhere else. I'll use this opportunity to describe in some detail what curious readers can expect from this fiction. Political Drama with a whole lot of power struggle and a bit of face slapping here and there will be front and center especially after the first 20chapters. An Mc with a split personality that once fused will make him stronger, I don't want to go too much into detail about this plot point but when reading you'll notice I refer to the Mc both as Yagura and Jason up until a chapter that has yet to be uploaded. A slow but split progression. I don't expect this to be a spoiler but Mc will end up becoming Mizukage and as the story is set 13-16yrs before the start of the OG series Kages are not active combatants and rarely leave the village. As such Mc will see limited opportunity to display his skills but rest assured, I've made it so that action is not left behind. Multiple OCs. Don't panic, these OCs are here to fill in and enrich the rather mysterious atmosphere of the setting; Kirigakure. The story will be affected by their actions and they will help move the plot when its getting slow. Multiple POVs. Like I said, Mc becomes Mizukage and his orders will need to be carried out someway or another, thus these povs will be necessary to sprinkle some of that combat action, political intrigue and other character developing arcs that will always come full circle but run in the background while Mc goes about running a village. You'll get povs from known characters like Mei, Genma, Danzo, Minato and more including OCs. There will be extremely limited opportunity for romance/smut. Even as I write this there hasn't truly been a romantic chapter or a smut chapter. If there happens to be one in the future understand that it exists to further the plot or character development. Expansion of the timeline. What I mean by this is that MC as Mizukage 13yrs prior to start of Naruto timeline will have to essentially Kingdom Build Kirigakure, we don't know much of what the actual Yagura was doing during his reign asides being ruthless and so I'll try to fill a lot of that in with Mc's attempts to pre-empt the akatsuki and such, but that will not be his only duty or responsibility as Kage. As you read you'll come to see that being is some true busy work as I attempt to give some context to the constant paperwork we often see Kages working with. Strong to Stronger. Mc by being split personality has access to meta knowledge as well as Yagura's already garnered Kage-level skills. There will come a time for his training arc amongst all his busy work as Mizukage. He will attempt to get strong enough to survive characters like Obito as the synopsis eludes to but also match up to his fellow Kages during the timeline(Ay, Ohnoki, Minato/Hiruzen and Rasa) and lets not forget Pein either. I think this is all I can all myself to say for now, I hope you enjoy the story, leave a review and engage actively. Thank you!

LV 4

Zer0reZ

I don't usually make Reviews, but I felt like I owed it to you since I didn't make any comments. for the past 5 days, I have had no WiFi. and seeing as how my one and only hobby is reading I was suffering. But this fanfic singlehandedly helped me power through. As thanks, I solemnly swear to always be an earnest reader. Also, loved the Aoto dynamic with Yagura.

LV 4

Ray54715893

It seems like MC still refuses to accept the situation, interesting concept but making MC's plans becomes difficult. it's hard to read this without feeling annoyed and also there are so many names introduced in just 30 ch it's hard to remember most of them

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constantine15

the idea isn't bad, the writing is alright the story development is meh it isn't really interesting but at least the mc has taken the first step toward accepting who he is. though that idea of mc splitting himself from Yagura isn't something that I would do it seems like a bad plot. as for the romance it is meh. Firstly romance isn't fitted for anime like One Piece Dragon Ball naruto etc because that isn't the focus instead makes the story bad and distorts the flow. Also, you could go for a female character that already exists instead of making an oc these were all the reasons I gave the story development such a low rating. as for the character design, it is understandable you haven't described even once one character. That's all I had to say, if you want to know what could be done better that's easy. Continue writing and not only will you improve but you will learn from your mistakes through trial and error. that's why I gave it a 3 out of 5 I could be harsher with my words but that's not the point.

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Arcanemissile

A great story! Yagura is a character that canonically is op af yet a mystery, plus Kiri has The best wifu in their generation. Can't wait to see the story progress,

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Amzar_Gonji

hands down one of the most boring ff i ever read.

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Left_Nut_Of_Madara

It feels....Drama filled and for someone who has to much in their life already its an absolutely terrible fic but at the same time its incredibly well written and thought out so far so if you can take some tense/drama filled content then give it a read.

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Valadonchik

I read up to chapter 59. the world is well described. but the main character sucks, the split personality is infuriating. For those who don’t like the main character’s drama from the first chapters, don’t read further. at the time of chapter 58 there are no improvements. ehh. unpleasant aftertaste

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Di_Scipline

As far as I'm concerned the writing is good, so does the character interactions. I have reading many reborn in konoha fics so a change of pace and settings is refreshing. I like the world building, same reason. Hopefully we get more chapters !

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Shub_Niggurath

A story with good potential although the beginning is very rough on the edges, the MC can be some what annoying with his over eagerness and stupid decisions, but I guess that's normal? Other than that, the grammar is pretty good although some plot points seem just weird, like Kaguya attack, we don't get the consequences of that one on said clan, but whatever. The chapters are also too short for my liking and for the average in Webnovel in general, I would day it would've been better to fuse every 2 chapters, but that's just personal opinion. Overall good story with potential if you can just get over the beginning.

LV 4

Randomdude42

This is a very good Naruto story and I like a lot, but he was some of my concerns and praises for the author. The character designs are amazing. You did a great job of fusion yagura and Jason together. The dialogue between characters is also very good. The characters feel like they’re actually talking and not just robots. The only complaint I have for the story development is that it’s taken somewhat too long just to reach a certain point in the timeline, but also the counteract on what I just said I really like how you are controlling his strength and making the development of his strength reasonable. A side concern I have is that with how he is devolving his strength I don’t see how he’s going to be able to get to super kage level or have enough strength to somewhat fight back madara in his reanimation form. You’ve done a good job on describing and planing out scenes for the background development of the hidden mist, especially cause most of the time other authors just rushed through it and just say the policies and the effect they will have in short term and long term. But you actually show the reactions to the policies. This is all I’m going to say for now. I’m gonna continue reading and if what I am saying sounds like gibberish it’s because I am currently awake at 11:59 PM and I need to go to bed oh, it just turn midnight as I was saying this that’s cool.

LV 4

dahippopo

Stories about villages other than Konoha will always have my interest,but this one is well and truly exceptional👌🏻

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Tsukuyomi777

Absolute masterclass of a story everything is well done I look forward to the interaction between Minato and Yagura But I have a question? Is Mei Terumi going to be a Love interest please say yes And I have a suggestion for you use tags of Adventure Action and Naruto they will give you more exposure

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_DEKIM_

Meh.😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑

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Antymoonek

5 stars simply for an unused trope . .

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Romance_guy

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LV 4

Skramsa

hi, this is my review of this fanfic for those interested. Writing quality 4/5: the writing is very good, but there are parts where isn't described the situations very good or use too much pharagraph, but isn't very noticeable. Stability of Updates 4/5: is good, 2 chapters a week, i put 4 stars just because i expected the chapter on fridays but he uploaded monday morning, (it made me reload the library page a lot waiting the new chapter XD). Story Development 5/5: Here is where i may not agree with the lot of users of webnovel, they seems to like that things get as fast as a car without brakes, i read reviews expecting the MC control the 3tails like if was a puppy, or that somehow he learn shadow clone (he lives in the mist), don't they know the shadow clones is from konoha? are their brains fryed with oversaturated stories of OP MC where they can whip the hokages and bijuu while scraching their b411$?. The story develops in a seemingly slow pace, but i think thats because the chapters are very large, they aren't too short but you can't call them large either (thats what she said XD), in my opinion the development is well planed and it feels very realistic, the MC isn't a genius and because the split personality (not the kind of at morning im rick and at afternoon im mr hyde) wich it get a lot better when trying to communicate with three tails, in my opinion, the real pace of the story should be interpreted as 1chapter = 0.5 chapter. Character Design 5/5: what can i say appart that the characters are very well designed, they feel real, and with their own thoughts process that can benefit or obstruct the MC actions, in case of the MC design i may again not agree with the lot of webnovel's user but i like it, he isn't a gennius, he don't have the Omnicient reader's point of view that we as readers have and those users for some reason expect he have, and that is what i like, he feels more real this way. World Background 5/5: i give it 5 stars because this fanfic gives a background to the land of water, it gives a political scenery to the land of water and kirigakure, it adapts to what i more or less know about kirigakure's political, culture and society panorama and expand in that, it remainds me as another fic i was following that expands in kumogakure panorama, but in this case it feels more realistic. And this is without counting when the plot start to de-rail with the mizukage/MC decisions, wich for those in a hurry, is when Madara/Obito start to notice the changes in kirigakure and "intervention" in amegakure, wich is, for some reference, before the nine-tails attack. Resume: is a very good fanfic, with realistic characters, decisions and scenery, the MC is strong, but isn't OP as a lot of readers of webnovels like, so if you came to this fanfic expecting a OP MC with a harem of mindless muppets, and a MC genius in quantum physics and 40years of experience being a ruler before the reincarnation, then this isn't your story. But, if you are like me who is tired of those kind of MC, whom seems like they use their plot armor to bend the wills of the characters and even bend the reality (like expecting that to use the kagebushin you just needs to make that cross), then this is one of few fanfic that you would encounter like that in this platform.

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matthew_hawker

started this recently and have enjoyed every chapter so so much thanks author for the amazing story

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Blitzo

Very niiiice. Hopefully the pace picks up and some time skips but other than that a good read :)

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Saurfangs

Trash a good writer would have done a better job