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Ok I absolutely love this story, the only downside I can think of is that it needs more updates however I understand that the author has their own life to live but please update this book soon.
At first I was about to give this a low star rating but my decision change when I read a certain chapter man even though the as people hating o nthis I surely believe this fanfiction is probably one of the Best Ive read sofar the creativity is on whoel new level Writing Quality 4.5Story development 5.0Character Design 4.5Updating stability 4.5World background 5.0thats all I can say in this honest review
The main character’s personality was quite irritating. As for the love interest part i was hoping for Nero/Secre but when you revealed the whole her being in love with Lemiel situation i was like never mind so now I’m on team Mimosa i guess? I don’t know who to root for anymore though from what I’m seeing the love interest seems very likely to be Fana.
The MC character is a momma’s boy that gets angry at noise and can’t control his emotions.
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You got mommy issues, little guy? Don’t worry, I’m sure her boyfriend she abandoned you to be with is taking care of her.
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Enjoying it so far just a few minor things I don't like. First is that the author goes little into what we have already seen in cannon a little to much. This is fine but I prefer when authors skim quickly through this or give a summary. Basically I want the author to focus more on the MC then on Yuno and Asta. One thing I am confused about is how the MC knows Asta has anti-magic? I get that he watched him use it but I don't believe it's that obvious is it? Anyways the novel is fun. I like the way the MC acts and that it's a non harem. I support Nero being the love interest. Hope you don't drop this novel anytime soon Author!
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Good so far. Nothing bad. Just more interested in seeing how MC would fare in a big fight, which is coming soon I think. [img=recommend][img=recommend]
I really enjoy the story. Hope to read more...................................................................................
Even though it’s only 13 chapters in, it’s really good. I’m enjoying the story, I don’t have anything to criticize. The grammar is really good, so is the spelling and word choice. It has plenty of detail on what is happening in any part of the story, so the author takes no short cuts in explains things. Can’t wait for more, keep up the great work.
Not much to say honestly since its only been few chapters might change opinion later but for now its good as it is. Progression wise is kinda rushed but not to the point you would notice. Though little problem i had during readin this is the unusuall attachment and connection he has with the 2 main cast asta and yuno. But i wont argue further with it as both as important figures and it’s understandable for him to connect with them. Its not to the point it would get annoying so im fine with it. For now i give it 5 stars
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Don't waste your time on this bs fic cuz it feels like it's prolly written by a 14yo with a mommy kink who wants to babysit asta and he's the same height as asta with no impact on the story...
So far good I hope you continue to be this good but the Yuno is kinda weird In this one And ya I like it so far
Eh book is good, makes the OC likable but with it being abandoned don’t get your hopes up for it, had good potential but was killed by being left for dead meat
Ok I absolutely love this story, the only downside I can think of is that it needs more updates however I understand that the author has their own life to live but please update this book soon.
At first I was about to give this a low star rating but my decision change when I read a certain chapter man even though the as people hating o nthis I surely believe this fanfiction is probably one of the Best Ive read sofar the creativity is on whoel new level Writing Quality 4.5Story development 5.0Character Design 4.5Updating stability 4.5World background 5.0thats all I can say in this honest review
The main character’s personality was quite irritating. As for the love interest part i was hoping for Nero/Secre but when you revealed the whole her being in love with Lemiel situation i was like never mind so now I’m on team Mimosa i guess? I don’t know who to root for anymore though from what I’m seeing the love interest seems very likely to be Fana.
The MC character is a momma’s boy that gets angry at noise and can’t control his emotions.
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You got mommy issues, little guy? Don’t worry, I’m sure her boyfriend she abandoned you to be with is taking care of her.
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Enjoying it so far just a few minor things I don't like. First is that the author goes little into what we have already seen in cannon a little to much. This is fine but I prefer when authors skim quickly through this or give a summary. Basically I want the author to focus more on the MC then on Yuno and Asta. One thing I am confused about is how the MC knows Asta has anti-magic? I get that he watched him use it but I don't believe it's that obvious is it? Anyways the novel is fun. I like the way the MC acts and that it's a non harem. I support Nero being the love interest. Hope you don't drop this novel anytime soon Author!
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Good so far. Nothing bad. Just more interested in seeing how MC would fare in a big fight, which is coming soon I think. [img=recommend][img=recommend]
I really enjoy the story. Hope to read more...................................................................................
Even though it’s only 13 chapters in, it’s really good. I’m enjoying the story, I don’t have anything to criticize. The grammar is really good, so is the spelling and word choice. It has plenty of detail on what is happening in any part of the story, so the author takes no short cuts in explains things. Can’t wait for more, keep up the great work.
Not much to say honestly since its only been few chapters might change opinion later but for now its good as it is. Progression wise is kinda rushed but not to the point you would notice. Though little problem i had during readin this is the unusuall attachment and connection he has with the 2 main cast asta and yuno. But i wont argue further with it as both as important figures and it’s understandable for him to connect with them. Its not to the point it would get annoying so im fine with it. For now i give it 5 stars
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Don't waste your time on this bs fic cuz it feels like it's prolly written by a 14yo with a mommy kink who wants to babysit asta and he's the same height as asta with no impact on the story...
So far good I hope you continue to be this good but the Yuno is kinda weird In this one And ya I like it so far
Eh book is good, makes the OC likable but with it being abandoned don’t get your hopes up for it, had good potential but was killed by being left for dead meat