War On Man

LV 4

Aurelius_Imperator

an excellent novel written on descriptive style and the story is very detailed which makes you engrossed in the story

LV 13

Xerzxes

Writing quality : could use some improve but it’s over all good. Updating : you should probably update more than just 2 chap a week but you may be busy irl so it’ fine I guess Story : The story develops really smoothly Character : the characters seem hard to visualize maybe add some of like their characteristics external features include a character's height, weight, body type, and general appearance The world background is good

LV 12

Sinbau

Something I’d continue reading, The story has a promising premise, at first glance the sypnosis is what caught my eye. I’d advise the author to find a cover that might represent a character in the story or just the story in general rather than just the title. Since the cover is your way of clickbait and to gain attraction. A good place to find some is on Pinterest, I would advise to adress that cover is not owned by you in case you do go down this route. But back to the story, some things I did enjoy was the writing style for the characters, it didn’t seem flat and the personality showed in the dialogue- which didn’t feel dragged but relatable/realistic. The same goes for the narration. Critiques I had was the need to break up long paragraphs and work on scenery building, letting readers in on the MC’s environment in small moments as well not just the peak of a conflict. Other than that it was a good read! Looking forward to seeing more.

LV 3

LanumKing

Hope yall like my story. It was inspired by a lot of shows and surprisingly a game. I wanted to be realistic and different from the real world. So hopefully you all enjoy it and give it a good review and OfCourse add it to your library.

LV 3

ChiseledMystic

Just for its unique concept, it's a 5/5 from me. The story is good, very unique, and a little fast-paced. There is a mystery about the world, which means the author has a good plan for revealing it bit by bit in further chapters. It might be a little confusing regarding the power system, but as the novel progresses, you will come to understand it.

LV 1

Tifala

Well-constructed dialogues, the plot captures from the first chapter, a beautiful description of both the places and the clothes of the characters. But there are dialogues that do not display who is speaking to whom and with what intonation, and this knocks the reading out of the process. If you like a beautiful and elaborate plot, you will love this novel.

LV 3

faye_ri

Absolutely adores the amount of details and descriptions this book has. It helps you picture out the scenes in your head clearly. Good job, author!

LV 3

Kaede_Zy

I honestly enjoy and like the mystery surrounding the world, the theatom and Turnner. The flow of the coversation was smooth, the description of the scene was superb and the pacing was great. I only got problem in the fighting scenes cause I can vaguely imagined it and the paragraphs were too long for me. This book has potential to be one of the best, it just needs a little work. Keep writing author!

LV 2

Tsleem_shk

Alright, it's crazy how the author wrote the movements of a character. I can actually visualize them in my head. The writing quality is great and I'm yet to familiarize with some aspects of the story, So I gave this rating. [img=recommend]

LV 4

TheOtherNoble

The grammar is improving even within the first few chapters. I admire the author’s dedication to making the work great, the imagination behind the plot, and the characters being built. I have confidence that it will only keep getting better! There’s a fine line between adding detail that gives depth to a story and getting bogged down in it, and although this comes close to crossing it sometimes, I think there is potential in this story.

LV 1

Mesarik

Very descriptive, I like Michale's confidence along with his easy-mindedness. While the updating schedule is not the best, I think that can be easily fixed, I like the sense of mystery in the beginning and not waiting around and throwing us straight into the action.

LV 3

Kaylon

I only gave it a 4.8 just because I’ not really familiar with immortal novels but the beginning of the story is very awesome so keep it up 😋

LV 3

Rainism_11

Great book. I loved the beginning. More ink to the pen

I like the kind of story where it is of correlation to our world but there are alternations to things such as a different timeline with similar to real life events.

LV 2

TalesCreative

The story is very intriguing, it take from the built up each chapters, the level of description on characters made it easy to imagine them. Look forward to this novel

LV 1

Eldritch_Umbra_2710

This is a very interesting novel. The story starts slowly, but it takes quite the turn by the time the second chapter rolls around, which should inspire readers to continue reading. The only thing to really hit the story on is the writing quality. While the plot itself is easy to follow, the actual flow and penmanship is where things fall through. Descriptions are much too abrupt, and as always, (inside joke of mine), Numbers aren't letters, and they shouldn't be used when the number described is less than one hundred. Overall, an excellent and intriguing story that suffers from penmanship that requires some optimization is all. I recommend this story, and wholeheartedly congratulate the author on making something special.

LV 2

Lee_AD

The plot is pretty good and the way you show us the scene was so good, like the grammar is very impressive. I'll be waiting for the next update.

LV 3

Darz

This story has an interesting beginning that I don't usually see in a lot of Webnovels. I'd like to see how things would look like in the future for this book and the author.The way he represented the events in the book really makes sense and I hope others will give this book a try as well.

LV 11

pyritenemo000

An interesting story with good writing and a lot of key details. A few things made me laugh a bit and though I only read the first chapter I look forward to reading the rest

LV 1

The_ALmighty2o

The beginning is very unique and different, although a bit more explaining would be nice at the beginning, you soon find out the rest through the story