Douluo Dalu: 1st Cycle: Dancing Panda

LV 4

Octovicious

Update for me everyday Slave. just joking Hehehe

LV 1

Getsucced

I really expected a good story,not many dd3 fics out there especially with good writing but it had to have one of the worst tropes i hate in a story, an annoying female character (who obviously knows stuff) and the mc who lets her push him around, i mean no means no right and suddenly why does he think just because she refused his refusal once he suddenly has to compromise to her. Im sry, the story could actually get better but it actually ticked me off enough to drop it here.

LV 4

AzKoPo

Apperently tradition for the author to support the author so I'm doing just that. Hope you enjoy the story, while it started out as mostly a self insert it quickly developed in a way where I can't in good faith call it that anymore so it's become a character of his own. If the fanfic actually pics some traction I might consider updating it more regularly after I catch up with editing to recent chapters, until then, enjoy! And I don't mind conststructive criticism, as the story was started so I could learn to write better, I think I've come quite far, first chapter has been rewritten quite a few times. And yet even after the final edit and publishing it, I notice missing commas, this is gonna be fun!

LV 14

Lazren_Inkheart

The story is well written, but the actual plot is not good. Writing this after halfway through ch11. First off, the MC's name is not good, Carnival really or Val Karni just terrible. Idk where the MC is supposed to be from, and maybe karni is a normal name there, but this would be a lot better with a name that fits the setting or one that fits the language this is posted in. The troupes used and reveals have not been good. First mysterious voice during reincarnation that doesn't explain anything. Then probably one of my most hated things to see, 'the character didn't know this, but this decision will affect the future'. I don't care if the outcome is good or bad for the MC it's just a terrible writing troupe to hamfist that information that doesn't need it. I think it's one of the worst ways possible to convey information to the reader. A second reincarnator is something I don't actually mind depending on how it's implemented. This is one of the worst ways. Willing to give information to the MC, but the MC is restricted from hearing is so annoying that it's ridiculous. I literally couldn't finish the chapter after that. This is more minor because it is explained that the MC is being affected by the body of a 6-year-old. But he could have easily kept on walking away from what he believed at the time was another 6-year-old. This is a man in his early 20's even with the effect of being in a child's body, it doesn't really excuse even when not wanting to, still complying with a child's peer pressure. Look, the writing itself is quite good, and that is why I decided to keep reading this story for a little bit, but I really dislike the plot at this point. I might try and read again later and change my mind, but it's not for me right now. I do think the writer is good and has potential, and I'm going to check if they have any other work that I might like better.

LV 11

Shivam_Thakur_1883

It's good and totally worth reading.. Although few things I don't like about this but overall it's better than many other ff out there..................

LV 1

Demons_Ki

[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

LV 4

1lazy_loner

childish idiot

LV 14

Thanatos18

Original name or chinese Pls????

LV 1

Akaflip

Good and pretty ...................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................

LV 4

Azathoth2

........................................

LV 1

Darkiling

[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

LV 15

Willie_Clark_0639

This is my favorite story on this app and I hope to see this till it finishes.

LV 4

dlrow_aZ

A very good story. Very well done and coherently with the base material. Waiting for more ! (Sorry, English is not my main language) .....................

LV 14

Lazy_owl

The is no issues with writing quality but i did not particularly like the start. Still a good read.

LV 14

dragondon89

great story so far hope you can keep it up.😊

Just bcs there’s no cheat i believe this will have great potential!!

LV 4

God_Monke_king

Writing quality:⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ The author has very good writing skills and the grammar is perfectStory Development:⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐Till chap 21 the story is going good and it does not just follow wulin everywhereCharacter Design:⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐Many characters haven't been introduced yet but the one that have been have a soul in it.Update stability:⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐It has been going nice till now 😁World background:⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐Well it is Douluo Dalu III so u can expect a good world backgroundOverall a very good story.I will at least give it a try

LV 1

Darkiling

[img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

LV 4

DestroyingPaper

ㅤ