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The writing style is hard to read. It's emotionless and the words used make it seem like the author was beaten with a dictionary until they could only write in a ridiculously formal/robotic way. POV changes do nothing for the sense of the person we are reading from and don't match their character at all. If I wasn't directly shown the POV change I wouldn't know that it had changed. I ended up skimming most of the story b/c it was so boring and repetitive. I won't be continuing this.
Great work, keep it up. Maybe try to build a body like the DBZ android and give some mutant power OR make take some inspiration from the Sentinels. Ant-Man armor is cool. What if - infinity Ultron. Robot 🤖🤖🤖 Army 🪖🪖🪖is coooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooool
Well its just starting but it seems like a good approach so I encourage others to read it as well.so yh READDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD
I actually hoped Mc would be a lil bit more ruthless but well, it's still realy good.
The writing style is hard to read. It's emotionless and the words used make it seem like the author was beaten with a dictionary until they could only write in a ridiculously formal/robotic way. POV changes do nothing for the sense of the person we are reading from and don't match their character at all. If I wasn't directly shown the POV change I wouldn't know that it had changed. I ended up skimming most of the story b/c it was so boring and repetitive. I won't be continuing this.
Great work, keep it up. Maybe try to build a body like the DBZ android and give some mutant power OR make take some inspiration from the Sentinels. Ant-Man armor is cool. What if - infinity Ultron. Robot 🤖🤖🤖 Army 🪖🪖🪖is coooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooool
Well its just starting but it seems like a good approach so I encourage others to read it as well.so yh READDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD
I actually hoped Mc would be a lil bit more ruthless but well, it's still realy good.