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Hey so I was having difficulty reading this as it needs to be edited for some flow issues. You need to fix some of the grammar, the sentences tend to flow together. The quotations are confusing the way they are written too.
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nice story I'm already seeing alot of potential male leads 😅😅but the problem I noticed is the conversation I wish they were like this "my name is" than this, my name isand there are little grammatical errors with little to no punctuation but you're trying
Your book has such a cute cover, and the plot is truly intriguing! I enjoyed how smoothly it flowed into the story. Your creativity and storytelling skills are commendable! Just a little attention to punctuations and paragraphing, and your writing will shine even brighter! Keep going, and keep writing with passion! Looking forward to more chapters and witnessing your talent grow.
Everyone's already mentioned grammar, so I won't hammer on about how awfully ineligible it is. A few other things stood out to me. 1. Your chapters should be between 1200 to 1500 words on lower average if you ever want to land a contract. It's also what people are used to reading here. Yours are a bit too short. 2. There is too much dialogue for the amount of action you have going on, and it's too cluttered amidst descriptions and narration. 3. Chapter naming: you need to only use the actual name for your chapters, currently they read as Chapter 6: Chapter Six. 'Tis no good. I also recommended some tools that might help you with proofreading. Also, check out the writer's academy on inkstone. It has some very solid guides. Good luck, and don't give up.
The novel has a lot of problems, the lack of dialogue highlighting, the plot immediately throws into the thick of events, without explaining anything about the world or the main character. The characters are not particularly worked out, they are not interesting to watch.
Awesome work Author! Great plot with good writing. Up your updates a little and there you go, you'll be well off 🌚
This is a very captivating novel I love the story line and the character design. The author has done a great job with the story. I encourage everyone to read this.
It could use some copyediting, it's a little rough to track in spots but otherwise it's an incredibly solid story. Definitely going to follow-up with this one.
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"I've heard some complains about the issue of punctuation marks" making it hard for novelist to read and a little grammatical error from some kind Authors who complained and pin point out my mistakes. Which is of course for the better of my book. So for the mean time am not updating chapters till am done rectify all mistakes.[img=Loving it][img=Loving it][img=Loving it]Please do read and help me mention the chapters
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I have never read a book as mind blowing and engaging as this. Every new chapter is a new and different and amazing adventure. I have to give it to you author, kudos.
Overall the story is very good and it is also very easy and understandable.There are some little writing error which need to be corrected but your story has the opportunity to grow big. Don't give up and keep it on [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=strong]
The novel is commendable, with one particular aspect that stands out to me: the author's seamless introduction of the characters' traits and the well-maintained pacing. However, there is still potential for improvement. Firstly, the author should focus on rectifying grammatical errors present in certain chapters. Additionally, at times, the characters lack emotional impact, which could benefit from further development. These suggestions are intended to help the author enhance their writing. LIKED IT . I RECOMMEND THOSE WHO KNOWS HOW TO BE PATIENCE.
Another great book I've stumbled across. Author, Keep up your good work. I see no complaints as of now, other than you releasing less. Rest is good and I love it.
This is a great work that I found myself not wanting to drop it. The author has good aptitude and I love this work so much. great greatgreat
Hi there! I love your story, it has a lot of potential and could be better in terms of writing style. However, I would like to point out that your work is rather difficult to read because of the lack of "" when characters talk. You can improve your writing with the help of grammar-checking tools like Grammarly. Once you use such tools, I believe your writing will improve a lot!
This book is awesome. I love the story development, the world setting is great. I couldn't ask for more. Nice one, author.
I would have given this book a five-star rating, were it not for a few minor setbacks that I feel compelled to address.Firstly, the brevity of the chapters leaves me yearning for more substance. It appears that the author has omitted crucial details, resulting in a sense of haste and incompleteness.Secondly, I have noticed a handful of grammatical errors throughout the narrative. While they are not overly pervasive, I believe the author should take the time to rectify these issues.Aside from these concerns, I must admit that the book holds promise. However, I reserve further judgment until I have delved deeper into subsequent chapters.
the author should proofread again and I suggest to fix the chapters since there are so many lacking, especially the punctuation marks that wasn't there
Pretty good overall, the only negatives are sometimes the dialogue is a bit clunky and there are a few grammatical errors but it’s nothing major, the story is interesting and the romance is a bit over exaggerated but it’s a good read. And author don’t feel bad about slow chapter updates, don’t compromise the quality of your novel because you feel obligated to put out daily chapters. So many good novels I used to read ruined themselves because of this
A good story that tells a lot about our MC. This story is worth the read. Keep writing and don't stop. You will surely find success.
The novel is good, the thing I liked in this novel is as how the author fluently introduces the characteristics of the characters he introduces and the pacing is also quite good, but there is still room for improvement as first of all author should try to improve the grammatical mistakes he makes in the ch's and sometimes there is a lack of emotional impact from the characters and also this is for the Author --> You have made the paragraphs too long it actually makes confusion when they are together this much so as how I felt it would good if you make them of at least 3 lines and then space, then continue. That's all I wanted to say still you have made a good one
Interesting story, i like the character Edhi a lot just wish you provided the character design for Edhi. However so far so good. You also have very small chapters ( not sure why ) oh forgot to mention her language caught me off guard a few times like the fact she just says whatever is on her mind i love it a lot hahah lol. Great novel keep it up.
Very well written, the story has great character and plot development. I didn't notice much in grammatical or spelling errors. I love the romance in the story. All in all I highly recommend this series to all book lovers.
Highly Recommend this novel to book lovers. The character development and pacing is very well written, as well is the plot. Keep up the great work. 😊
I felt excited while reading this book. I will keep checking in for more chapters.
Good writing good mc it's keeping me interested and there's a lot of content to digest what else do need to ask for
.,..............,............................................................................ Great novle ............................ Carry on.......................................................................................... Writing skills will improve with time..................... ..................
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Hey so I was having difficulty reading this as it needs to be edited for some flow issues. You need to fix some of the grammar, the sentences tend to flow together. The quotations are confusing the way they are written too.
ネタバレを明かす nice story I'm already seeing alot of potential male leads 😅😅but the problem I noticed is the conversation I wish they were like this "my name is" than this, my name isand there are little grammatical errors with little to no punctuation but you're trying
Your book has such a cute cover, and the plot is truly intriguing! I enjoyed how smoothly it flowed into the story. Your creativity and storytelling skills are commendable! Just a little attention to punctuations and paragraphing, and your writing will shine even brighter! Keep going, and keep writing with passion! Looking forward to more chapters and witnessing your talent grow.
Everyone's already mentioned grammar, so I won't hammer on about how awfully ineligible it is. A few other things stood out to me. 1. Your chapters should be between 1200 to 1500 words on lower average if you ever want to land a contract. It's also what people are used to reading here. Yours are a bit too short. 2. There is too much dialogue for the amount of action you have going on, and it's too cluttered amidst descriptions and narration. 3. Chapter naming: you need to only use the actual name for your chapters, currently they read as Chapter 6: Chapter Six. 'Tis no good. I also recommended some tools that might help you with proofreading. Also, check out the writer's academy on inkstone. It has some very solid guides. Good luck, and don't give up.
The novel has a lot of problems, the lack of dialogue highlighting, the plot immediately throws into the thick of events, without explaining anything about the world or the main character. The characters are not particularly worked out, they are not interesting to watch.
Awesome work Author! Great plot with good writing. Up your updates a little and there you go, you'll be well off 🌚
This is a very captivating novel I love the story line and the character design. The author has done a great job with the story. I encourage everyone to read this.
It could use some copyediting, it's a little rough to track in spots but otherwise it's an incredibly solid story. Definitely going to follow-up with this one.
Good. And author I really[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
"I've heard some complains about the issue of punctuation marks" making it hard for novelist to read and a little grammatical error from some kind Authors who complained and pin point out my mistakes. Which is of course for the better of my book. So for the mean time am not updating chapters till am done rectify all mistakes.[img=Loving it][img=Loving it][img=Loving it]Please do read and help me mention the chapters
ネタバレを明かす I have never read a book as mind blowing and engaging as this. Every new chapter is a new and different and amazing adventure. I have to give it to you author, kudos.
Overall the story is very good and it is also very easy and understandable.There are some little writing error which need to be corrected but your story has the opportunity to grow big. Don't give up and keep it on [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=strong]
The novel is commendable, with one particular aspect that stands out to me: the author's seamless introduction of the characters' traits and the well-maintained pacing. However, there is still potential for improvement. Firstly, the author should focus on rectifying grammatical errors present in certain chapters. Additionally, at times, the characters lack emotional impact, which could benefit from further development. These suggestions are intended to help the author enhance their writing. LIKED IT . I RECOMMEND THOSE WHO KNOWS HOW TO BE PATIENCE.
Another great book I've stumbled across. Author, Keep up your good work. I see no complaints as of now, other than you releasing less. Rest is good and I love it.
This is a great work that I found myself not wanting to drop it. The author has good aptitude and I love this work so much. great greatgreat
Hi there! I love your story, it has a lot of potential and could be better in terms of writing style. However, I would like to point out that your work is rather difficult to read because of the lack of "" when characters talk. You can improve your writing with the help of grammar-checking tools like Grammarly. Once you use such tools, I believe your writing will improve a lot!
This book is awesome. I love the story development, the world setting is great. I couldn't ask for more. Nice one, author.
I would have given this book a five-star rating, were it not for a few minor setbacks that I feel compelled to address.Firstly, the brevity of the chapters leaves me yearning for more substance. It appears that the author has omitted crucial details, resulting in a sense of haste and incompleteness.Secondly, I have noticed a handful of grammatical errors throughout the narrative. While they are not overly pervasive, I believe the author should take the time to rectify these issues.Aside from these concerns, I must admit that the book holds promise. However, I reserve further judgment until I have delved deeper into subsequent chapters.
the author should proofread again and I suggest to fix the chapters since there are so many lacking, especially the punctuation marks that wasn't there
Pretty good overall, the only negatives are sometimes the dialogue is a bit clunky and there are a few grammatical errors but it’s nothing major, the story is interesting and the romance is a bit over exaggerated but it’s a good read. And author don’t feel bad about slow chapter updates, don’t compromise the quality of your novel because you feel obligated to put out daily chapters. So many good novels I used to read ruined themselves because of this
A good story that tells a lot about our MC. This story is worth the read. Keep writing and don't stop. You will surely find success.
The novel is good, the thing I liked in this novel is as how the author fluently introduces the characteristics of the characters he introduces and the pacing is also quite good, but there is still room for improvement as first of all author should try to improve the grammatical mistakes he makes in the ch's and sometimes there is a lack of emotional impact from the characters and also this is for the Author --> You have made the paragraphs too long it actually makes confusion when they are together this much so as how I felt it would good if you make them of at least 3 lines and then space, then continue. That's all I wanted to say still you have made a good one
Interesting story, i like the character Edhi a lot just wish you provided the character design for Edhi. However so far so good. You also have very small chapters ( not sure why ) oh forgot to mention her language caught me off guard a few times like the fact she just says whatever is on her mind i love it a lot hahah lol. Great novel keep it up.
Very well written, the story has great character and plot development. I didn't notice much in grammatical or spelling errors. I love the romance in the story. All in all I highly recommend this series to all book lovers.
Highly Recommend this novel to book lovers. The character development and pacing is very well written, as well is the plot. Keep up the great work. 😊
I felt excited while reading this book. I will keep checking in for more chapters.
Good writing good mc it's keeping me interested and there's a lot of content to digest what else do need to ask for
.,..............,............................................................................ Great novle ............................ Carry on.......................................................................................... Writing skills will improve with time..................... ..................