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Muito boa essa história continue escrevendo autor! mais capítulos por favor, mais capítulos por favor, mais capítulos por favor, mais capítulos por favor, mais capítulos por favor, mais capítulos por favor, mais capítulos por favor, mais capítulos por favor, mais capítulos por favor, mais capítulos por favor
in short I read 16 chapters, in short it's ambiguous, frustrating and not at all like the tags present it the mc is stupid, weak and has a kind of complex that I can't put my finger on. in short the synopsis is great the first 5 chapters too then, nothing.
Unreadable without MASSIVE EDITING!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
It was kinda good at the start apart from the grammar but then the mc showed his true colours of a useless nobody
Story wise it's good and I love how author points out every time how creepy Edward and Bella are being in public. Only issue I have is that Mc seems a bit too weak and I mean not just weak when compared to vamps but even when compared to normal humans and the power he is controlling as of chapter 11 just seems more like a gimmick than anything can you tell author by which chapter he becomes stronger as you have put overpowered tag but mc is not even normal human strong? I think weak to strong would be better tag as I don't see him being overpowered anytime soon when he can't even fight with bunch of normal humans now.
la ponctuation , tu connais ? Alors ne mets pas des points d'exclamation a la fin de chaque phrase ! [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
It’s super slow it’s super cliche it’s super basic. There are so many parts that are so hard to read I just skip through them. The mom is such a horrible character it’s absurd. Read if you want it’s not horrible I just mentioned the bad factors
I really wanted him to be with Jessica it would’ve been great if he went with both but it was good overall I just can’ read no more knowing Jessica not a Love interest
Bom ..........................................................................................Bom.........................................................Bom.........
I like that there is development of both the character and the world. I took a break because I was a little bored, but it turned out that I simply did not read up to the most interesting part, the development of forces. Now it's really interesting to read.
It’s good but the author really needs to improve his grammar or it’s going to be unbearable
Very good story the truth, it just develops too slowly for my liking. How many approximate chapters do you plan to create? since I don't want you to end up abandoning it bro for giving it too much drama or many twists to the plot anyway I hope you don't abandon it and keep posting periodically.
I currently made it 15 chapters in and I have been enjoying the novel at the moment but, the background is very slim. Also, I didn't mind at the beginning of the novel where the author calls the MC a he and vice versa towards the female characters. I assumed it's a mistake and will get fixed later on in the novel. But, the grammar just gets worse. Besides that, the story is pretty good and has some potential but it has to be fixed very badly. If it's fixed I will rate it higher probably.
The grammar is not perfect but it is readable. The development of the story is not going very well, the fact that the MC does not have the memories of the body is a little disturbing because the ex body owner was a genius, i really hope the muscle memory stayed otherwise it will become du grand n'importe quoi.I am a son of Hades, le fils d'un des Big tree, even if it happened at the moment he took over the body, he should have been stronger, Physically, this means that he woke up too soon after his transmigration, he would have had to stay sick in the struggle, the time that his body adapts to these powers of demi God, he agreed to call the mother of the corps "mom" too quickly , it's like he rejected all his past without thinking and is already close to school and everything,It's not realistic enough. The author should really look up the powers of Hades and see the technical data sheets of the demigod son of Hades in Percy Jackson , The MC should have been more OP. The development of the relationship with Alice is extremely forced ,Alice is too OCC inside, it's not our lovely Alice , The MC is not yet stable enough in this new life to notice Alice, He doesn't even know what his birthday is, that of his mother, In short, his identity is precarious at this moment. In short, I hope I didn't insult the author with my remarks, I just wanted to help with the huge holes in the plot.
IT's good so far. Is this going to be Polygyny relationship. I don't mind it will be interesting. mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooorrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
nice work, give me more chapter bro, '-'. if you have someone for read the chapters and search for the problems, this can become five star, keep the good work and you can create of the best fanfiction of twilight. thanks for read. give more chapters please.
The people giving this high reviews must read a ton of MTL because to me this is unreadable. There are constant issues with tenses, mistranslations, and cultural nonsense. When I mean cultural nonsense I mean the MC panicking about how not answering one math question the teacher asks him right might somehow “ruin” his reputation. Anyway, between the poor grammar and weird Chinese style cultural nonsense I cannot suggest this novel. I would rate it at most a 3.7/10 which is unfortunate because maybe if it were readable it would be a good story.
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A very good fanfic 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍 👍👍👍👍 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍 👍👍👍👍 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍 👍👍👍👍 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
please don't stop, please don't stop, please don't stop, please don't stop, please don't stop, please don't stop, please don't stop, please don't stop, please don't stop, please don't stop, please don't stop, please don't stop, please don't stop, please don't stop, please don't stop,
The translation isn't perfect, but it doesn't bother me. I'm addicted to the story xxxxxxxxxDDDDDDDDD 10/10 140c140c140c140c140c140c140c140c140c140c140c140c
I won't deny that I was a little irritated by the MC's love interest at first, but the story had me hooked enough to rethink that. I'm starting to like where this is going.
Keep writing! It's really interesting and engaging, but it's different from conventional twilight fan fiction, so read it with an open mind. I'm really enjoying it.
Bastante buena sigue así!!!! Aunque creo que lo de Alice se debe llevar más como una vidente que no cree el futuro que vio pero Ethan llega y cambia los echos que ella vio haciendo que se interese por el más y más o bueno algo así jajajaja Me agrada en concepto en general 9.5/10 🌟 🌟 🌟 🌟
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Hey, Toru here! I hired an editor and the chapters are being updated little by little (1 old and 1 new). If you want to support me, so I can keep the editor, you can read the Patre on advance chapters! :D
Muito boa essa história continue escrevendo autor! mais capítulos por favor, mais capítulos por favor, mais capítulos por favor, mais capítulos por favor, mais capítulos por favor, mais capítulos por favor, mais capítulos por favor, mais capítulos por favor, mais capítulos por favor, mais capítulos por favor
in short I read 16 chapters, in short it's ambiguous, frustrating and not at all like the tags present it the mc is stupid, weak and has a kind of complex that I can't put my finger on. in short the synopsis is great the first 5 chapters too then, nothing.
Unreadable without MASSIVE EDITING!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
It was kinda good at the start apart from the grammar but then the mc showed his true colours of a useless nobody
Story wise it's good and I love how author points out every time how creepy Edward and Bella are being in public. Only issue I have is that Mc seems a bit too weak and I mean not just weak when compared to vamps but even when compared to normal humans and the power he is controlling as of chapter 11 just seems more like a gimmick than anything can you tell author by which chapter he becomes stronger as you have put overpowered tag but mc is not even normal human strong? I think weak to strong would be better tag as I don't see him being overpowered anytime soon when he can't even fight with bunch of normal humans now.
la ponctuation , tu connais ? Alors ne mets pas des points d'exclamation a la fin de chaque phrase ! [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
It’s super slow it’s super cliche it’s super basic. There are so many parts that are so hard to read I just skip through them. The mom is such a horrible character it’s absurd. Read if you want it’s not horrible I just mentioned the bad factors
I really wanted him to be with Jessica it would’ve been great if he went with both but it was good overall I just can’ read no more knowing Jessica not a Love interest
Bom ..........................................................................................Bom.........................................................Bom.........
I like that there is development of both the character and the world. I took a break because I was a little bored, but it turned out that I simply did not read up to the most interesting part, the development of forces. Now it's really interesting to read.
It’s good but the author really needs to improve his grammar or it’s going to be unbearable
Very good story the truth, it just develops too slowly for my liking. How many approximate chapters do you plan to create? since I don't want you to end up abandoning it bro for giving it too much drama or many twists to the plot anyway I hope you don't abandon it and keep posting periodically.
I currently made it 15 chapters in and I have been enjoying the novel at the moment but, the background is very slim. Also, I didn't mind at the beginning of the novel where the author calls the MC a he and vice versa towards the female characters. I assumed it's a mistake and will get fixed later on in the novel. But, the grammar just gets worse. Besides that, the story is pretty good and has some potential but it has to be fixed very badly. If it's fixed I will rate it higher probably.
The grammar is not perfect but it is readable. The development of the story is not going very well, the fact that the MC does not have the memories of the body is a little disturbing because the ex body owner was a genius, i really hope the muscle memory stayed otherwise it will become du grand n'importe quoi.I am a son of Hades, le fils d'un des Big tree, even if it happened at the moment he took over the body, he should have been stronger, Physically, this means that he woke up too soon after his transmigration, he would have had to stay sick in the struggle, the time that his body adapts to these powers of demi God, he agreed to call the mother of the corps "mom" too quickly , it's like he rejected all his past without thinking and is already close to school and everything,It's not realistic enough. The author should really look up the powers of Hades and see the technical data sheets of the demigod son of Hades in Percy Jackson , The MC should have been more OP. The development of the relationship with Alice is extremely forced ,Alice is too OCC inside, it's not our lovely Alice , The MC is not yet stable enough in this new life to notice Alice, He doesn't even know what his birthday is, that of his mother, In short, his identity is precarious at this moment. In short, I hope I didn't insult the author with my remarks, I just wanted to help with the huge holes in the plot.
IT's good so far. Is this going to be Polygyny relationship. I don't mind it will be interesting. mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooorrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
nice work, give me more chapter bro, '-'. if you have someone for read the chapters and search for the problems, this can become five star, keep the good work and you can create of the best fanfiction of twilight. thanks for read. give more chapters please.
The people giving this high reviews must read a ton of MTL because to me this is unreadable. There are constant issues with tenses, mistranslations, and cultural nonsense. When I mean cultural nonsense I mean the MC panicking about how not answering one math question the teacher asks him right might somehow “ruin” his reputation. Anyway, between the poor grammar and weird Chinese style cultural nonsense I cannot suggest this novel. I would rate it at most a 3.7/10 which is unfortunate because maybe if it were readable it would be a good story.
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A very good fanfic 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍 👍👍👍👍 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍 👍👍👍👍 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍 👍👍👍👍 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
please don't stop, please don't stop, please don't stop, please don't stop, please don't stop, please don't stop, please don't stop, please don't stop, please don't stop, please don't stop, please don't stop, please don't stop, please don't stop, please don't stop, please don't stop,
The translation isn't perfect, but it doesn't bother me. I'm addicted to the story xxxxxxxxxDDDDDDDDD 10/10 140c140c140c140c140c140c140c140c140c140c140c140c
I won't deny that I was a little irritated by the MC's love interest at first, but the story had me hooked enough to rethink that. I'm starting to like where this is going.
Keep writing! It's really interesting and engaging, but it's different from conventional twilight fan fiction, so read it with an open mind. I'm really enjoying it.
Bastante buena sigue así!!!! Aunque creo que lo de Alice se debe llevar más como una vidente que no cree el futuro que vio pero Ethan llega y cambia los echos que ella vio haciendo que se interese por el más y más o bueno algo así jajajaja Me agrada en concepto en general 9.5/10 🌟 🌟 🌟 🌟
Author Shamless Review!! Author Shamless Review!! Author Shamless Review!! Author Shamless Review!! Author Shamless Review!! Author Shamless Review!!
Hey, Toru here! I hired an editor and the chapters are being updated little by little (1 old and 1 new). If you want to support me, so I can keep the editor, you can read the Patre on advance chapters! :D