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The story has a very interesting and unique premise with a twist on the inner demon troupe where the MC is the inner demon. I can get a good of the character’s personality and motivations due to it being stated so bluntly, but often the characters actions don’t end up following the description like the MC being described ad emotionless and uncaring but still using polite language and the insanity is also not shown very well. Certain characters also act completely against the atmosphere set up which breaks immersion like when a certain character feels jelous of another character when they should be overwhelmed by dread of being in the presence of an entity leagues above them. The writing style is very much one where the audience is told what to feel and think instead of building the climax and tention and emotion using the characters and interactions to build an atmosphere. Dialoge of multiple characters is put into one paragraph with too much description of the implications (stating that a character is cautious in the middle of the conversation and that point not being a part of the conversation whatsoever as well as being contradicted in the very same chapter). Flow between character dialogue is akward and stiff as well with all the characters using the same vocabulary (a old character using the same words and having the same way of speaking as a teenager where they should have vastly different styles). C This story has a the blocks need to build a great story, it just needs plenty of polishing of multiple chapters to the point where I think rewriting would be easier than fixing all the inconsistencies. Pro tip, I would suggest creating character cards to help keep track of the characteristics and personality of your characters when writing to prevent inconsistency and constantly asking yourself what that character would do considering the personality given. MC’s inner emotional struggle has been brought up but is not given the care and attention I think it deserves and has a lot of potential to be fleshed out similarly to the striggle of Saitama of One Punch Man. Would suggest on focusing on that since mc is comparble to the strongest in his world right out of the gate.
The premise behind the story with angels, demons, gods and everything else in between especially with how they interact with each other. How Lucifer had seals to prevent him from becoming stronger then his creator due to him being a hybrid of the creator and darkness was an interesting take on the hybrid continuity with the strengths & weaknesses of both species instead it is calculated of both species potential. I especially liked the brutality of each character and how the “2nd main character” Thomas was brutally killed many times in different ways (I didn’t really like him so I savoured in each of his deaths). One of my favourite moments in the story was when Lucifer grabbed Thor’s hammer Mjolnir and Thor was gobsmacked then Thors head was exploded by Lucifer due to him throwing Mjolnir at the speed of sound exploding his arrogant head. There are many different highlights throughout the book like when Charles (Mc) takes over Thomas’s body for less the an hour and blows up Washington. Well this is getting a bit long, I recommend you read this book (finished reading at the current chapter 74)
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I found this was a pretty neat boom at first. Tried reading it, grammar isn't the best but it's understandable most of the time, not all the time. The plot seems to be extremely vague, MC's personality change between his death and reincarnation get glossed over, the interactions feel forced, fake, drawn out. the characters are pretty forgettable, and the 'emotional' moments just aren't. made it to chapter 26 until the story was completely lost on me. Stuff that seems like it should've been a big deal happened like it wasn't.
Reading this novel feels like swallowing a rock without chewing it. Confusing? I say so. This is like a rip off Jujutsu Kaisen with Sakuna being an anti hero.And Itadori being 10 times more stupid than he originally is. Imagine being a god who would do anything he can for Thomas, even without something in return! he literally said he's apathetic 💀
Definitely one of the best books that I have read! The way the author slowly opens your eyes to the extent of the story is surreal! The character development is great too, and how everything fits together is like perfect. How they do all the perspectives is great too, and I'm hanging on chapter 74 and I sooo want to see how the new characters will come into play. The only thing I wish they would do is a quick read-through and fix all the capitalization errors and the grammar errors that are like 3 in number. But that's minor and doesn't take away anything at all. So all in all, 9.9/5. PS: The title doesn't do this book justice.
Great story! Mc isn’t too overpowered and has to actually plan in order to get more powerful without getting the attention of other beings. Mc is also not stupid, has ambition and isn’t a full psychopath either. The story also focuses on the world building, character backstory’s, and motives of every character. None of the characters are dumb or too powerless and the author makes sure to keep a balance! Great story and you can see if you like it when you read up to chapter 35. Thanks you the author for creating such a masterpiece!❤️❤️❤️
Would have been better to have more world building and character development. There wasn't really much anything from the novel that he got reincarnated on. There will be some "Author Note" here and there in a middle of a chapter trying to explain some things, better if it was integrated in the story rather than posting it.
The premise of the story is something I quite liked. Ofc there were some minor grammar error but those can be overlooked. The pacing and the way different perspective were written were fast and weird. Scenarios were shifting around rapidly without much context. But overall I really liked it quite a lot. Would love a bigger worldbuilding but it a short novel read and I enjoyed it really much.
The novels pretty good for not having good world development. I especially like the concept. 👍
One Word«MESSY» im totally confused about the plot ..MC isekai trap in darkness for(1+billion years) then he basically become primordial god(same as Universal creator) ...Then change of MC from MC(Charles«Darkness»)—New MC (Thomas Junior«Like A Jinchūriki») of darkness . .. .Then there are not clear power system there's Rank#F–S and Rank#City–God So Which One Is true. ...there's also not clear goal of novel. . But it's good novel because of good grammar. .I'm content in this. .[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
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literally one of the best novels i have read (and i am quite an avid reader). go read it now
At start i felt this was really good but why did you cipy it from Supernatural afterwards? Its literally going episode by episode with your story characters added as bonus...
Wow just wow. its been long since I read anything except fanfics but this is a nice change of pace
i havent read this yet it seem that it has potential but is held back by bad grammar really hope that gets fixed .............................
Guys, you need to relax and cut the author more slack on his first good novel. I love the concept of this world, and the world background building is utterly astounding. I also love the characters and actual story arcs with them. It doesn't make sense you guys don't care about the characters since there is honestly no guarantee darkness will spare them. Now for the criticism, this story gets 3.8 stars. I feel like the stability of updates should be a little better, maybe like a stable chapter every 2 days. Also, the novel's pacing is a little too fast and in the beginning, Thomas feels more like the main character than darkness. The romance between Darkness and Darkness simply doesn't make sense and feels extremely forced. There was no development to explain how she's there, It's also explained multiple times it's not in Darkness' nature to feel the romance. Yet, for some reason with absolutely no development, Mc meets the 'previous Darkness' and she loves him to bits as soon as she comes in. Also, the grammar is good but the punctuations and commas need to be more focused. Also, the wording in the sentences could use a bit more work in my opinion.
Bruh let me just put it in a way you'll understand..... if you haven't read this then you don't enjoy life. One of the BEST nove on this app. 1) no Bullsh#t like weak to strong mc 2) not a beta 3) not a pervert whose goal is to capture women like Pokemon 4) well developed plot to the point HE SHOULD BE WORKING ON COMICS!!! 5) a PERFECT story for those who don't like op mc form the start-- Though I seriously still don't understand why people don't like a op mc-- but regardless a PERFECT reason why he can't so readily destroy the universe ### I won't spoil the reason but I SWEAR TO GOD it is perfection#####
Look, I have no words for the main character. But why does the world that mc sees into must be so bad? did you do this on purpose? How could mc like such a stupidly ridiculous book? A world where all Asgard and other MCU gods are intertwined, where Adam and Eve are warriors. I would leave the novel in which mc is in the first 2 chapters. also how can mc still be imprisoned in such a stupid world. nonsense.
dreadful wrighting, grammer, and everything inbetween. intresting premise, but its painfull to read.
This is my first review, so here we go. I really like the idea of the story, but there are quite a few grammatical mistakes. I advise you to rewrite the chapters because your book has a lot of potential. By the way, the character of Thomas is quite annoying, literally, so I'd really like to see him eliminated or help find a new body for charles to get in upcoming chapters. p.s this review is purely based on the first few chapter
this novel has tons of potential just executed wrong it has my favorite novel setting and trope which is to be reborn in a novel as a extra but this time the mc is born a god which is very unique and the grammar was poor but you can understand it but their are tons of bad things for example the charcters dont feel real to me like i have no emotional connection to them the mc can destroy the whole world and bring it back 2 seconds later so i dont have to care about them and the teachers and students are allowing the mc's host to go to school like he doesnt have the strongest god in his body they just treat him normally i think the Arthur should rewrite this but instead charles should have his old personality instead of this new cold one and he slowly unlocks his full power instead of having all of it in his own body this time too where he can go to the academy and help brian and get close to the other charcters
The novel deserves nothing absolutely nothing I would give it a 1 star but some of the writing was good but I don’t understand is the MC Tomas or Charles? Also is MC a Female or male also this novel is a Walmart version of the name ju jutsu kaisin
Primeiramente, fico feliz que seja um brasileiro escrevendo um romance ( que está ficando ótimo, aliás). Por fim, continue com o trabalho, o romance tem futuro caso você continue investindo tempo nele.
He visto muchas obras de autores novatos que usan la matanza como entretenimiento, pero no abordan bien esto. No generan emociones, no hay lastima, no hay simpatía, es una obra sin emocion. Un mero cadáver funcionando por el mero hecho del autor. Hasta aquí llegó yo, la premisa es buena, pero el autor carece de las habilidades para construir un mundo, un carácter, trasfondo y aprovechar cada personaje que aparece en la historia. Incluso, le da el carácter a Dark de "sin emociones" de tal manera que no conoce el concepto de alguien que no tiene emociones. Él mismo no debería tener algún interés en el mundo o en él mismo, así lo planteaste, pero en busca de entretener, desechaste tu propio carácter. Mi sincera opinión, hay que reescribí la obra de manera dónde puedas crean un buen mundo, los personajes muestren las clara madurez para verlos como criaturas vivas y así, nosotros como lectores generemos apegos. Usas la muerte de manera tan diferente que no aprovechas lo que puedes conseguir con el propio valor de esa indiferencia. La muerte están fácil, pero la vida no debe ser trata de tal manera, crea vida, personalidad, emociones, complejo y destruye al lector con la facilidad de la muerte, eso es lo que deberías hacer si quieres abordar este tipo de temática. Pero como la mayoría de autores novatos en esta cosmovisión equivoca de indiferencia y sin emociones, generan un basurero de contenido absurdo e infantil. Tratan su propia escritura como un chiste.
The story has a very interesting and unique premise with a twist on the inner demon troupe where the MC is the inner demon. I can get a good of the character’s personality and motivations due to it being stated so bluntly, but often the characters actions don’t end up following the description like the MC being described ad emotionless and uncaring but still using polite language and the insanity is also not shown very well. Certain characters also act completely against the atmosphere set up which breaks immersion like when a certain character feels jelous of another character when they should be overwhelmed by dread of being in the presence of an entity leagues above them. The writing style is very much one where the audience is told what to feel and think instead of building the climax and tention and emotion using the characters and interactions to build an atmosphere. Dialoge of multiple characters is put into one paragraph with too much description of the implications (stating that a character is cautious in the middle of the conversation and that point not being a part of the conversation whatsoever as well as being contradicted in the very same chapter). Flow between character dialogue is akward and stiff as well with all the characters using the same vocabulary (a old character using the same words and having the same way of speaking as a teenager where they should have vastly different styles). C This story has a the blocks need to build a great story, it just needs plenty of polishing of multiple chapters to the point where I think rewriting would be easier than fixing all the inconsistencies. Pro tip, I would suggest creating character cards to help keep track of the characteristics and personality of your characters when writing to prevent inconsistency and constantly asking yourself what that character would do considering the personality given. MC’s inner emotional struggle has been brought up but is not given the care and attention I think it deserves and has a lot of potential to be fleshed out similarly to the striggle of Saitama of One Punch Man. Would suggest on focusing on that since mc is comparble to the strongest in his world right out of the gate.
The premise behind the story with angels, demons, gods and everything else in between especially with how they interact with each other. How Lucifer had seals to prevent him from becoming stronger then his creator due to him being a hybrid of the creator and darkness was an interesting take on the hybrid continuity with the strengths & weaknesses of both species instead it is calculated of both species potential. I especially liked the brutality of each character and how the “2nd main character” Thomas was brutally killed many times in different ways (I didn’t really like him so I savoured in each of his deaths). One of my favourite moments in the story was when Lucifer grabbed Thor’s hammer Mjolnir and Thor was gobsmacked then Thors head was exploded by Lucifer due to him throwing Mjolnir at the speed of sound exploding his arrogant head. There are many different highlights throughout the book like when Charles (Mc) takes over Thomas’s body for less the an hour and blows up Washington. Well this is getting a bit long, I recommend you read this book (finished reading at the current chapter 74)
ネタバレを明かす I found this was a pretty neat boom at first. Tried reading it, grammar isn't the best but it's understandable most of the time, not all the time. The plot seems to be extremely vague, MC's personality change between his death and reincarnation get glossed over, the interactions feel forced, fake, drawn out. the characters are pretty forgettable, and the 'emotional' moments just aren't. made it to chapter 26 until the story was completely lost on me. Stuff that seems like it should've been a big deal happened like it wasn't.
Reading this novel feels like swallowing a rock without chewing it. Confusing? I say so. This is like a rip off Jujutsu Kaisen with Sakuna being an anti hero.And Itadori being 10 times more stupid than he originally is. Imagine being a god who would do anything he can for Thomas, even without something in return! he literally said he's apathetic 💀
Definitely one of the best books that I have read! The way the author slowly opens your eyes to the extent of the story is surreal! The character development is great too, and how everything fits together is like perfect. How they do all the perspectives is great too, and I'm hanging on chapter 74 and I sooo want to see how the new characters will come into play. The only thing I wish they would do is a quick read-through and fix all the capitalization errors and the grammar errors that are like 3 in number. But that's minor and doesn't take away anything at all. So all in all, 9.9/5. PS: The title doesn't do this book justice.
Great story! Mc isn’t too overpowered and has to actually plan in order to get more powerful without getting the attention of other beings. Mc is also not stupid, has ambition and isn’t a full psychopath either. The story also focuses on the world building, character backstory’s, and motives of every character. None of the characters are dumb or too powerless and the author makes sure to keep a balance! Great story and you can see if you like it when you read up to chapter 35. Thanks you the author for creating such a masterpiece!❤️❤️❤️
Would have been better to have more world building and character development. There wasn't really much anything from the novel that he got reincarnated on. There will be some "Author Note" here and there in a middle of a chapter trying to explain some things, better if it was integrated in the story rather than posting it.
The premise of the story is something I quite liked. Ofc there were some minor grammar error but those can be overlooked. The pacing and the way different perspective were written were fast and weird. Scenarios were shifting around rapidly without much context. But overall I really liked it quite a lot. Would love a bigger worldbuilding but it a short novel read and I enjoyed it really much.
The novels pretty good for not having good world development. I especially like the concept. 👍
One Word«MESSY» im totally confused about the plot ..MC isekai trap in darkness for(1+billion years) then he basically become primordial god(same as Universal creator) ...Then change of MC from MC(Charles«Darkness»)—New MC (Thomas Junior«Like A Jinchūriki») of darkness . .. .Then there are not clear power system there's Rank#F–S and Rank#City–God So Which One Is true. ...there's also not clear goal of novel. . But it's good novel because of good grammar. .I'm content in this. .[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
ネタバレを明かす literally one of the best novels i have read (and i am quite an avid reader). go read it now
At start i felt this was really good but why did you cipy it from Supernatural afterwards? Its literally going episode by episode with your story characters added as bonus...
Wow just wow. its been long since I read anything except fanfics but this is a nice change of pace
i havent read this yet it seem that it has potential but is held back by bad grammar really hope that gets fixed .............................
Guys, you need to relax and cut the author more slack on his first good novel. I love the concept of this world, and the world background building is utterly astounding. I also love the characters and actual story arcs with them. It doesn't make sense you guys don't care about the characters since there is honestly no guarantee darkness will spare them. Now for the criticism, this story gets 3.8 stars. I feel like the stability of updates should be a little better, maybe like a stable chapter every 2 days. Also, the novel's pacing is a little too fast and in the beginning, Thomas feels more like the main character than darkness. The romance between Darkness and Darkness simply doesn't make sense and feels extremely forced. There was no development to explain how she's there, It's also explained multiple times it's not in Darkness' nature to feel the romance. Yet, for some reason with absolutely no development, Mc meets the 'previous Darkness' and she loves him to bits as soon as she comes in. Also, the grammar is good but the punctuations and commas need to be more focused. Also, the wording in the sentences could use a bit more work in my opinion.
Bruh let me just put it in a way you'll understand..... if you haven't read this then you don't enjoy life. One of the BEST nove on this app. 1) no Bullsh#t like weak to strong mc 2) not a beta 3) not a pervert whose goal is to capture women like Pokemon 4) well developed plot to the point HE SHOULD BE WORKING ON COMICS!!! 5) a PERFECT story for those who don't like op mc form the start-- Though I seriously still don't understand why people don't like a op mc-- but regardless a PERFECT reason why he can't so readily destroy the universe ### I won't spoil the reason but I SWEAR TO GOD it is perfection#####
Look, I have no words for the main character. But why does the world that mc sees into must be so bad? did you do this on purpose? How could mc like such a stupidly ridiculous book? A world where all Asgard and other MCU gods are intertwined, where Adam and Eve are warriors. I would leave the novel in which mc is in the first 2 chapters. also how can mc still be imprisoned in such a stupid world. nonsense.
dreadful wrighting, grammer, and everything inbetween. intresting premise, but its painfull to read.
This is my first review, so here we go. I really like the idea of the story, but there are quite a few grammatical mistakes. I advise you to rewrite the chapters because your book has a lot of potential. By the way, the character of Thomas is quite annoying, literally, so I'd really like to see him eliminated or help find a new body for charles to get in upcoming chapters. p.s this review is purely based on the first few chapter
this novel has tons of potential just executed wrong it has my favorite novel setting and trope which is to be reborn in a novel as a extra but this time the mc is born a god which is very unique and the grammar was poor but you can understand it but their are tons of bad things for example the charcters dont feel real to me like i have no emotional connection to them the mc can destroy the whole world and bring it back 2 seconds later so i dont have to care about them and the teachers and students are allowing the mc's host to go to school like he doesnt have the strongest god in his body they just treat him normally i think the Arthur should rewrite this but instead charles should have his old personality instead of this new cold one and he slowly unlocks his full power instead of having all of it in his own body this time too where he can go to the academy and help brian and get close to the other charcters
The novel deserves nothing absolutely nothing I would give it a 1 star but some of the writing was good but I don’t understand is the MC Tomas or Charles? Also is MC a Female or male also this novel is a Walmart version of the name ju jutsu kaisin
Primeiramente, fico feliz que seja um brasileiro escrevendo um romance ( que está ficando ótimo, aliás). Por fim, continue com o trabalho, o romance tem futuro caso você continue investindo tempo nele.
He visto muchas obras de autores novatos que usan la matanza como entretenimiento, pero no abordan bien esto. No generan emociones, no hay lastima, no hay simpatía, es una obra sin emocion. Un mero cadáver funcionando por el mero hecho del autor. Hasta aquí llegó yo, la premisa es buena, pero el autor carece de las habilidades para construir un mundo, un carácter, trasfondo y aprovechar cada personaje que aparece en la historia. Incluso, le da el carácter a Dark de "sin emociones" de tal manera que no conoce el concepto de alguien que no tiene emociones. Él mismo no debería tener algún interés en el mundo o en él mismo, así lo planteaste, pero en busca de entretener, desechaste tu propio carácter. Mi sincera opinión, hay que reescribí la obra de manera dónde puedas crean un buen mundo, los personajes muestren las clara madurez para verlos como criaturas vivas y así, nosotros como lectores generemos apegos. Usas la muerte de manera tan diferente que no aprovechas lo que puedes conseguir con el propio valor de esa indiferencia. La muerte están fácil, pero la vida no debe ser trata de tal manera, crea vida, personalidad, emociones, complejo y destruye al lector con la facilidad de la muerte, eso es lo que deberías hacer si quieres abordar este tipo de temática. Pero como la mayoría de autores novatos en esta cosmovisión equivoca de indiferencia y sin emociones, generan un basurero de contenido absurdo e infantil. Tratan su propia escritura como un chiste.