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Dear Author, I tried out your first 4 chapter you have uploaded so far. As I read I found put that I say, she says, she does, he does, has put after a dialogue. putting it everywhere makes me feel like I am in a loop. change it for sometimes. As for the story line, I sorry. I still didn't get it. Anyways, Iam here to support this author... Keep going. Make your mistakes a new step to do better. Because I am also in the same situation as u.. Keep gping author...👍
Put it in third person, don't you think it'll be more interesting? The story was slow-paced, and there's a lot of dialogue, but that's okay. This is just the beginning.
The story is fine. It just has a lot of dialogue, some badly placed. Another thing is that Mateo's POV wasn't that great. It shows too little to open a POV for him. And not enough interesting events, there's a lot of filler.
Your story is quite good, if it would be 3rd person POV, it would be much better. The plot setting is really good. Keep up your hard work. And I think you can get a contract if apply for it. Good luck with your work!
Quite an interesting book to read, very intriguing plot but would be need a little bit of editing to the book a good writing quality. Keep it going dear Author 👌👌👌
Dear Author, I tried out your first 4 chapter you have uploaded so far. As I read I found put that I say, she says, she does, he does, has put after a dialogue. putting it everywhere makes me feel like I am in a loop. change it for sometimes. As for the story line, I sorry. I still didn't get it. Anyways, Iam here to support this author... Keep going. Make your mistakes a new step to do better. Because I am also in the same situation as u.. Keep gping author...👍
Put it in third person, don't you think it'll be more interesting? The story was slow-paced, and there's a lot of dialogue, but that's okay. This is just the beginning.
The story is fine. It just has a lot of dialogue, some badly placed. Another thing is that Mateo's POV wasn't that great. It shows too little to open a POV for him. And not enough interesting events, there's a lot of filler.
Your story is quite good, if it would be 3rd person POV, it would be much better. The plot setting is really good. Keep up your hard work. And I think you can get a contract if apply for it. Good luck with your work!
Quite an interesting book to read, very intriguing plot but would be need a little bit of editing to the book a good writing quality. Keep it going dear Author 👌👌👌