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Ich like the story but not the writing style. Thou I just started it may get better.
This story focuses outside of Orario, and more on exorcism, fate, karma, etc. The overall concept behind the story is good, but i disliked how the system behind falna, especially, magic, were thrown out the roof. Also, the explanation of how her skill functions felt lacking.
I like the story but it can be difficult to read. The pace for reading is very slow due to how much repetition fills the paragraphs between dialogue. Events that should feel intense or at least interesting fade to the background of half a dozen paragraphs of repeating what could be said in a few sentences until the events resume
It's a fresh read from all the things here in WN. Do hope you continue the great work Author-san.
It's a great fanfic, the story so far is not in orario and focuses on the investigation of cases that have been happening in the protagonist's city and it may not matter that you're only here for the dungeon dives but it's still a very interesting read that I recommend giving a chance. The release schedule is not the best, but the fic is written by a reliable author who, despite having a problem with starting new stories before finishing the old ones, does not abandon any of them and this is something incredibly rare in fanfics and must be valued. The only problem with this fic is that the author took liberties with the fake system and didn't mention that he would do that or mark the fic as AU so it seems more like a mistake than something intentional, but it's just a detail that bothered me a little though not be something that detracts from the story
Writing is pretty solid and you can underatand what the author wants to convey without feeling cranky or awkward. Story development is quite interesting as well, with a unique idea for the mc's abilities. The same goes for character design. The author updates regularly and though the update rate isn't very fast, at least it's stable. Finally, world background is also quite nice but there are some details that doesn't match with canon. Overall 3.6 rating.
Great writing by an Amazing Author. Please do continue for this one shall also do their best to shower Author-san with stones.
It's pretty entertaining. An interesting premise and an accurate story development that makes sense. Instead of jumping straight into Orario and joining the Loki/Freya/Hestia/Hepheastus familia. You actually thought out of the box and went with something different. The only fault I can find is the lack of energy/hype in some parts. Fights and important events are described without intensity so I just feel like "meh" by the end despite being able to perfectly imagine them. Though maybe that's to do with how strong they are at the current chapter?
I just read up to chapter 5 (the latest) but it has a good development and from how I see it will have a different development from others fanfics.
The author probably knows who I am since I helped with his discord, Anyways it's a 5 stars from me since I hope they'll continue this if I help out and promote dancematdan's discord also I like the start so far.
Shameless self review, this is another novel which I came up with on a whim after bingeing Danmachi. While it was intended to be a one off book with only three chapters, I have continued it and will release a chapter every five days if I can keep up with the releases. I have other novels with different releases per week so I cannot afford the time to proofread and edit them so those that are critical on grammer, spelling or minor mistakes, please be patient and give the story a chance. Kan-Gar-Chu (one piece fanfic) - 1 chapter everyday in the week and 1 extra on a sunday so 8 a week. Pi-Gar-Chu (one piece fanfic) - 3 chapters a week Bombyx: Return of the Vengeful First Daughter (Original) - 1+ chapters a week depending on my motivation Dr who is where again? (dragon ball fanfic) - 2 chapters a week Renegade Jenny (Pokémon fanfic) - 1 chapter every 4 days Although I am working on many different projects, I still believe that I can make time and not fall behind but you can always be updated on any changes on my discord.
Ich like the story but not the writing style. Thou I just started it may get better.
This story focuses outside of Orario, and more on exorcism, fate, karma, etc. The overall concept behind the story is good, but i disliked how the system behind falna, especially, magic, were thrown out the roof. Also, the explanation of how her skill functions felt lacking.
I like the story but it can be difficult to read. The pace for reading is very slow due to how much repetition fills the paragraphs between dialogue. Events that should feel intense or at least interesting fade to the background of half a dozen paragraphs of repeating what could be said in a few sentences until the events resume
It's a fresh read from all the things here in WN. Do hope you continue the great work Author-san.
It's a great fanfic, the story so far is not in orario and focuses on the investigation of cases that have been happening in the protagonist's city and it may not matter that you're only here for the dungeon dives but it's still a very interesting read that I recommend giving a chance. The release schedule is not the best, but the fic is written by a reliable author who, despite having a problem with starting new stories before finishing the old ones, does not abandon any of them and this is something incredibly rare in fanfics and must be valued. The only problem with this fic is that the author took liberties with the fake system and didn't mention that he would do that or mark the fic as AU so it seems more like a mistake than something intentional, but it's just a detail that bothered me a little though not be something that detracts from the story
Writing is pretty solid and you can underatand what the author wants to convey without feeling cranky or awkward. Story development is quite interesting as well, with a unique idea for the mc's abilities. The same goes for character design. The author updates regularly and though the update rate isn't very fast, at least it's stable. Finally, world background is also quite nice but there are some details that doesn't match with canon. Overall 3.6 rating.
Great writing by an Amazing Author. Please do continue for this one shall also do their best to shower Author-san with stones.
It's pretty entertaining. An interesting premise and an accurate story development that makes sense. Instead of jumping straight into Orario and joining the Loki/Freya/Hestia/Hepheastus familia. You actually thought out of the box and went with something different. The only fault I can find is the lack of energy/hype in some parts. Fights and important events are described without intensity so I just feel like "meh" by the end despite being able to perfectly imagine them. Though maybe that's to do with how strong they are at the current chapter?
I just read up to chapter 5 (the latest) but it has a good development and from how I see it will have a different development from others fanfics.
The author probably knows who I am since I helped with his discord, Anyways it's a 5 stars from me since I hope they'll continue this if I help out and promote dancematdan's discord also I like the start so far.
Shameless self review, this is another novel which I came up with on a whim after bingeing Danmachi. While it was intended to be a one off book with only three chapters, I have continued it and will release a chapter every five days if I can keep up with the releases. I have other novels with different releases per week so I cannot afford the time to proofread and edit them so those that are critical on grammer, spelling or minor mistakes, please be patient and give the story a chance. Kan-Gar-Chu (one piece fanfic) - 1 chapter everyday in the week and 1 extra on a sunday so 8 a week. Pi-Gar-Chu (one piece fanfic) - 3 chapters a week Bombyx: Return of the Vengeful First Daughter (Original) - 1+ chapters a week depending on my motivation Dr who is where again? (dragon ball fanfic) - 2 chapters a week Renegade Jenny (Pokémon fanfic) - 1 chapter every 4 days Although I am working on many different projects, I still believe that I can make time and not fall behind but you can always be updated on any changes on my discord.