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Okay, frankly you have a great, unique idea going on. But honestly, this feels like a cross between an academic paper and a contract to get myself a virtual avatar built not a novel. 🙃 First of all, I suggest you do away with the repeated use of the phrase "the said this and that" its disturbing, and it gives a very mechanical and legal outlook to your text. Like it's a user term from some software that you'll just scroll to the end and hit I accept without reading a single word. Secondly, the second chapter feels like some friend of mine saw an amazing movie and is briefing me about it. Not that I'm reading it for myself. You are telling me word to what what is happening, who is feeling what etc. Things that should be shown, should be subtly conveyed through dialogue and other creative means are flatly thrown at my face. Paragraphs are too long and too full of text. This chapter screams for more dialogue and conversation. Make your sentences short, snappy and try to keep too much scientifically jargon out. Or provide a glossary at the end of the chapter. All in all, I truly appreciate the uniqueness of your idea, but to be a novel, it has a long way to go. Good luck.
I really like this book and I must say the idea of multiverse just made it better, Kudos to the great author 😊 cause it really worth reading
To be honest, this is my first time reading other sci-fi books since I'm also writing one. Your idea itself is amazing although the marks you used confusing me a bit. There's so many "..." quotation marks and I already gave you a suggestion in the comment. Cheers!🍹
Great storytelling. I love the idea of multiverses and can't wait to read more and learn about the characters and different worlds created in this book.
This book shows how much the author is experienced in the science field. I love science and technology related stuffs so this book really peaked my interest.
This is a whole new kind of system book for me definitely haven’t read more like this before Eric got to create a world and all thst stuff, it was a pretty interesting read[img=recommend]
It’s pretty nice, not too complex and books like these are really my favorite genre to sit down and read. They’re right on par with fantasy novels! I love it.
I like it and that is why I am giving It a five-star rating. One thing I encountered is that in the first few chapters of this book, you have to read each line carefully and then think over it before you can understand it and then move on but in the later part of this book it was much easier for me to understand and I liked that. It is all about science and technology, which brings you to a whole new world. Eric got to create his world with his laws full of magic. I love it, keep up the good work author.
An interesting idea, and a strange plot so far. I think the paragraphs need short sentences and one can use the word (one) instead of he/she. Maybe you can add a bit of emotion to the characters in their time of crisis or when making hard choices. But so far, it's great on the science side, just try to put it in shorter sentences so the concept becomes clearer for your everyday readers. Go on!👍🏻😃
I'm sort of confused by some parts since I don't really read sci-fi books but it's a nice book overall. Nice work author. It's going in my collection. 👍👍👍👍
Okay, frankly you have a great, unique idea going on. But honestly, this feels like a cross between an academic paper and a contract to get myself a virtual avatar built not a novel. 🙃 First of all, I suggest you do away with the repeated use of the phrase "the said this and that" its disturbing, and it gives a very mechanical and legal outlook to your text. Like it's a user term from some software that you'll just scroll to the end and hit I accept without reading a single word. Secondly, the second chapter feels like some friend of mine saw an amazing movie and is briefing me about it. Not that I'm reading it for myself. You are telling me word to what what is happening, who is feeling what etc. Things that should be shown, should be subtly conveyed through dialogue and other creative means are flatly thrown at my face. Paragraphs are too long and too full of text. This chapter screams for more dialogue and conversation. Make your sentences short, snappy and try to keep too much scientifically jargon out. Or provide a glossary at the end of the chapter. All in all, I truly appreciate the uniqueness of your idea, but to be a novel, it has a long way to go. Good luck.
I really like this book and I must say the idea of multiverse just made it better, Kudos to the great author 😊 cause it really worth reading
To be honest, this is my first time reading other sci-fi books since I'm also writing one. Your idea itself is amazing although the marks you used confusing me a bit. There's so many "..." quotation marks and I already gave you a suggestion in the comment. Cheers!🍹
Great storytelling. I love the idea of multiverses and can't wait to read more and learn about the characters and different worlds created in this book.
This book shows how much the author is experienced in the science field. I love science and technology related stuffs so this book really peaked my interest.
This is a whole new kind of system book for me definitely haven’t read more like this before Eric got to create a world and all thst stuff, it was a pretty interesting read[img=recommend]
It’s pretty nice, not too complex and books like these are really my favorite genre to sit down and read. They’re right on par with fantasy novels! I love it.
I like it and that is why I am giving It a five-star rating. One thing I encountered is that in the first few chapters of this book, you have to read each line carefully and then think over it before you can understand it and then move on but in the later part of this book it was much easier for me to understand and I liked that. It is all about science and technology, which brings you to a whole new world. Eric got to create his world with his laws full of magic. I love it, keep up the good work author.
An interesting idea, and a strange plot so far. I think the paragraphs need short sentences and one can use the word (one) instead of he/she. Maybe you can add a bit of emotion to the characters in their time of crisis or when making hard choices. But so far, it's great on the science side, just try to put it in shorter sentences so the concept becomes clearer for your everyday readers. Go on!👍🏻😃
I'm sort of confused by some parts since I don't really read sci-fi books but it's a nice book overall. Nice work author. It's going in my collection. 👍👍👍👍