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the conversations are done in play format and it's so jarring what's going on -son nothing son -father the why is there screaming -son it's fucking retarded I'm supposed to be reading a story not a fucking play. the Grammer is good but the way you do ANY conversation is just retarded. great job fucking up an otherwise great story by making it unreadable. maybe next time look at any other story that's not a fucking play, and try to emulate that.
The training arc killed me, I couldn't bear to continue reading even though it was already in the canon, it was exaggeratedly extended and included things so foreign to me that it felt super out of place
More and more OCs are involved and the storyline seems too forced until various supporting aspects seem to fall from the sky, dirty trash. I don't understand how you can maintain ratings
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Mira bro me gusta tu historia tiene un buen desarrollo trama y trabajo de los personajes, también me gusta que no sigas tonta mente la trama del anime y el manga si no que desarrollo tu personalidad se ese mundo por eso te pido que no pares de subir está novela por favor
this isn't even a fan fiction anymore dude just took characters from other series and inserted them into mha. it literally took 25 chapters just to begin the story and then right after that we get this hidden serial killer who apparently has some game dimension based powers????? yeah I'm just done it was going pretty well but the further it went the further the quality dropped
novel is ok it's Just MC is so childish and week. not week week I mean he is not in that level he is spouse to be specialy after having the power of gora gora no mi.
Isso e lixo o autor consegui o grande feito de fazer uma história que estaria 8.5/10 pra 01/10 de um capítulo para o outro, com um clichê orroroso do sequestro da mãe do Mc, e o Mc ficando completamente estúpido simplesmente burro, o autor nerfou ele de todas as maneiras possíveis so pro protagonista desbloquear uma abilidade, tinhas infinitas maneiras disso ser diferentes mas parece que o autor teve morte cerebral de um momento pro outro e ficou burro junto do Mc, simplesmente decepcionante.
I started months ago and came back after more chapters were written. The quality of weighting isn’t that good, lots of obvious errors but it dosnt really matter. Ive completly quit in the middle of the author ark. This ark reveals two things. One pro, one con. The pro is a pretty cool original perspective on the world and building it into something cool. I wouldn’t know how well it has been incorporated into the story, due to leaving early. But it has good potential, though I do NOT trust that the author will take advantage of it. The CON slash reason I’m quitting this story. Is the protagonist submitting to somebody else’s will with out question basically becoming a slave. Now the Author villain concept in of itself isn’t bad. It’s just the submission of the protagonist. Even though the protagonist could very well step up for himself. And if it eludes you, I can and will explain… Firstly the protagonist just trusts the villains word and dosnt question anything. When he can very well use the leverage the villian has over him to leverage the villian back. Because the villian wants something, and by holding something precious of the protagonist, the protagonist also wants something. Their basically on equal terms. So the protagonist can very well negotiate with the villain to garentee his intrest, in exchange for the intrest the villian is intrested in.
Honestly this is a work of art and the only fanfic I truly support, hope the author won't stop halfway through this fanfic, every power stone i get goes directly to this
Honestly, I felt the author nerfed his MC too much. Also, who receive three wishes and ask for such stupid things? It would have been better if God gave him three random powers instead.... Since for me the first five chapters weren't logical I decided to stop reading.
É um clichê doloroso. É uma pena, pois o potencial da história é grande. No demais, a gramática é legal, legível (uso tradutor), tem um plano de fundo até que bacana. Mas os clichês...
Enjoyed the story,keep up the good work[img=update][img=update][img=recommend][img=recommend]
Not much to say besides it's a good story and I'm excited for it to continue. It has a great OC (I think?) rival and great personalities for the supporting characters. The story is a bit like getting to know a bunch of people and then getting to follow their stories. Sure the canon pathway is somewhat there, but it's a step above the usual. Hopefully you know what I mean. I suggest trying it out.
Good story writing, but kind of stupid MC. Unlike most novel where side character got their IQ lower, in this one, the MC IQ got lower instead to get the side character some shine. The reincarnated trope kind of not work correctly, since the MC IQ reverse back into a kid, and also act like a kid. It would have been better if the MC start off as a kid instead, and just have some idea that he in an anime work, or die while he still a kid or in sick bed and never experience childhood. Since that way, it feel okay to be a naive. Another kind of hateful point is similar to other fanfic where the MC train very hard, with his own training arc and stuff, but got BALANCE when fighting real battle. In this fanfic, it not too bad, but we can still feel the nerve a bit. Another point is, the story is too bland, since it mostly the MC slice of life moment, and it poorly made, since it all build up to a fighting fanfic. Another point is the sign of something bad happening, it done poorly, those sign should be miss by the MC, but author made the MC aware of it and do nothing about his suspicions . It very frustrating when novel done that, it only make reader complain. It make the MC look dumb/careless. It made the reader feel that the mc should have done better. Also, I got a feeling that in this fanfic, the MC is not gonna have control over his own destiny, he will always be blackmail or have something holding him back wasting his potential etc type of cliche. The type of cliche where we are given a very promising start, but MC will always face setback that always take something from him for character development. That why mc shouldn't be a reincarnation in the first place, because reincarnation itself is the biggest setback, and develop the character already. That why reincarnation trope always push out perfect MC which rarely change character, and never naive, at most, they don't have enough information to do much, or else, they will try their best in most case.
Writing quality 3/5 there where more mistakes then I thought there would be. Updating stability 1/5 trash. Story development 3/5 its was going good but then the author nerfed the main character. character design 5/5 love the main character. world background 3/5 its ok. Overall the main character was nerfed so I'm not reading this.
Unstable updates, MC is good, but the plot is thin as water, nothing new. Chapters are too short to be called a chapter. Kinda, meh. Try revamping with tiny changes.
What's wrong with everyone, because they love the idea of being killed by a god so much? Second, why do you want a god in person to grant your wishes? Do they have any need to feel chosen? And finally, they realize the tremendous narrative hole that is the idea of God and desires.
The story development character world powers mc getting stronger like other fanfics autom atically make me a god the main big problem only problem is that u make such a good story but keep us waiting weeks to get a update I ain’t gonna lie this a secret everyday I log on to see if they even got one new chapter
just finished reading last published chapter up to date : chapter 59.Very good fan fiction, the flow was neither too fast or too slow to my licking, the power level is at the same time the focus of the story and isn't at the same time : the mc doesn't struggle that much while we are not sure exactly how strong he is however it wasn't a problem till now. Little foreshadowing of romance here and there. The writing quality is a tad lacking but that is absolutly more than readable.An enjoyable read overall
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i absolutely love this book ten out of ten but the reason I am dropping is because of the love interest I have literally not read a single ff where the love interest isn't momo i am f####ing sick of it sorry not sorry
One chapter a week is criminal. Everything about this novel is good except sometimes you use the wrong words in sentences mixing them up with others (could just be auto correct) and sometimes the conversations feel weird, like how you actually right them with their name afterwards.
the conversations are done in play format and it's so jarring what's going on -son nothing son -father the why is there screaming -son it's fucking retarded I'm supposed to be reading a story not a fucking play. the Grammer is good but the way you do ANY conversation is just retarded. great job fucking up an otherwise great story by making it unreadable. maybe next time look at any other story that's not a fucking play, and try to emulate that.
The training arc killed me, I couldn't bear to continue reading even though it was already in the canon, it was exaggeratedly extended and included things so foreign to me that it felt super out of place
More and more OCs are involved and the storyline seems too forced until various supporting aspects seem to fall from the sky, dirty trash. I don't understand how you can maintain ratings
ネタバレを明かす Mira bro me gusta tu historia tiene un buen desarrollo trama y trabajo de los personajes, también me gusta que no sigas tonta mente la trama del anime y el manga si no que desarrollo tu personalidad se ese mundo por eso te pido que no pares de subir está novela por favor
this isn't even a fan fiction anymore dude just took characters from other series and inserted them into mha. it literally took 25 chapters just to begin the story and then right after that we get this hidden serial killer who apparently has some game dimension based powers????? yeah I'm just done it was going pretty well but the further it went the further the quality dropped
novel is ok it's Just MC is so childish and week. not week week I mean he is not in that level he is spouse to be specialy after having the power of gora gora no mi.
Isso e lixo o autor consegui o grande feito de fazer uma história que estaria 8.5/10 pra 01/10 de um capítulo para o outro, com um clichê orroroso do sequestro da mãe do Mc, e o Mc ficando completamente estúpido simplesmente burro, o autor nerfou ele de todas as maneiras possíveis so pro protagonista desbloquear uma abilidade, tinhas infinitas maneiras disso ser diferentes mas parece que o autor teve morte cerebral de um momento pro outro e ficou burro junto do Mc, simplesmente decepcionante.
I started months ago and came back after more chapters were written. The quality of weighting isn’t that good, lots of obvious errors but it dosnt really matter. Ive completly quit in the middle of the author ark. This ark reveals two things. One pro, one con. The pro is a pretty cool original perspective on the world and building it into something cool. I wouldn’t know how well it has been incorporated into the story, due to leaving early. But it has good potential, though I do NOT trust that the author will take advantage of it. The CON slash reason I’m quitting this story. Is the protagonist submitting to somebody else’s will with out question basically becoming a slave. Now the Author villain concept in of itself isn’t bad. It’s just the submission of the protagonist. Even though the protagonist could very well step up for himself. And if it eludes you, I can and will explain… Firstly the protagonist just trusts the villains word and dosnt question anything. When he can very well use the leverage the villian has over him to leverage the villian back. Because the villian wants something, and by holding something precious of the protagonist, the protagonist also wants something. Their basically on equal terms. So the protagonist can very well negotiate with the villain to garentee his intrest, in exchange for the intrest the villian is intrested in.
Honestly this is a work of art and the only fanfic I truly support, hope the author won't stop halfway through this fanfic, every power stone i get goes directly to this
Honestly, I felt the author nerfed his MC too much. Also, who receive three wishes and ask for such stupid things? It would have been better if God gave him three random powers instead.... Since for me the first five chapters weren't logical I decided to stop reading.
É um clichê doloroso. É uma pena, pois o potencial da história é grande. No demais, a gramática é legal, legível (uso tradutor), tem um plano de fundo até que bacana. Mas os clichês...
Enjoyed the story,keep up the good work[img=update][img=update][img=recommend][img=recommend]
Not much to say besides it's a good story and I'm excited for it to continue. It has a great OC (I think?) rival and great personalities for the supporting characters. The story is a bit like getting to know a bunch of people and then getting to follow their stories. Sure the canon pathway is somewhat there, but it's a step above the usual. Hopefully you know what I mean. I suggest trying it out.
Good story writing, but kind of stupid MC. Unlike most novel where side character got their IQ lower, in this one, the MC IQ got lower instead to get the side character some shine. The reincarnated trope kind of not work correctly, since the MC IQ reverse back into a kid, and also act like a kid. It would have been better if the MC start off as a kid instead, and just have some idea that he in an anime work, or die while he still a kid or in sick bed and never experience childhood. Since that way, it feel okay to be a naive. Another kind of hateful point is similar to other fanfic where the MC train very hard, with his own training arc and stuff, but got BALANCE when fighting real battle. In this fanfic, it not too bad, but we can still feel the nerve a bit. Another point is, the story is too bland, since it mostly the MC slice of life moment, and it poorly made, since it all build up to a fighting fanfic. Another point is the sign of something bad happening, it done poorly, those sign should be miss by the MC, but author made the MC aware of it and do nothing about his suspicions . It very frustrating when novel done that, it only make reader complain. It make the MC look dumb/careless. It made the reader feel that the mc should have done better. Also, I got a feeling that in this fanfic, the MC is not gonna have control over his own destiny, he will always be blackmail or have something holding him back wasting his potential etc type of cliche. The type of cliche where we are given a very promising start, but MC will always face setback that always take something from him for character development. That why mc shouldn't be a reincarnation in the first place, because reincarnation itself is the biggest setback, and develop the character already. That why reincarnation trope always push out perfect MC which rarely change character, and never naive, at most, they don't have enough information to do much, or else, they will try their best in most case.
Writing quality 3/5 there where more mistakes then I thought there would be. Updating stability 1/5 trash. Story development 3/5 its was going good but then the author nerfed the main character. character design 5/5 love the main character. world background 3/5 its ok. Overall the main character was nerfed so I'm not reading this.
Unstable updates, MC is good, but the plot is thin as water, nothing new. Chapters are too short to be called a chapter. Kinda, meh. Try revamping with tiny changes.
What's wrong with everyone, because they love the idea of being killed by a god so much? Second, why do you want a god in person to grant your wishes? Do they have any need to feel chosen? And finally, they realize the tremendous narrative hole that is the idea of God and desires.
The story development character world powers mc getting stronger like other fanfics autom atically make me a god the main big problem only problem is that u make such a good story but keep us waiting weeks to get a update I ain’t gonna lie this a secret everyday I log on to see if they even got one new chapter
just finished reading last published chapter up to date : chapter 59.Very good fan fiction, the flow was neither too fast or too slow to my licking, the power level is at the same time the focus of the story and isn't at the same time : the mc doesn't struggle that much while we are not sure exactly how strong he is however it wasn't a problem till now. Little foreshadowing of romance here and there. The writing quality is a tad lacking but that is absolutly more than readable.An enjoyable read overall
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i absolutely love this book ten out of ten but the reason I am dropping is because of the love interest I have literally not read a single ff where the love interest isn't momo i am f####ing sick of it sorry not sorry
One chapter a week is criminal. Everything about this novel is good except sometimes you use the wrong words in sentences mixing them up with others (could just be auto correct) and sometimes the conversations feel weird, like how you actually right them with their name afterwards.
this was a great story wish it would get updated again