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レビューを書くI don't know.. This just felt like a second Kayden. Mixed with arrogance and some og plots. The intelligence perk doesn't get used often so i felt that was a waste.
This is a terrible story, the mc went from a normal to someone that thinks he’s above everyone. And the author has a habbit of just pulling shi out their ah. Don’t really this if you want a good story, it’s a waste of time.
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ネタバレを明かすWriting quality has many mistakes but overall its not too bad. I would say its a pretty good book for those who just want a chill book and not just instant op mc although there are a lot of timeskips
I like eleceed, this fanfic is decent, I have an issue with the Reed Richard iq when the mc keeps doing dumb stuff. Its also very inconsistent that is all I can say Iv read until chapter 10 and that is what I've noticed so far.
10/10, Frankly, everything is perfect For me it's the best Eleceed fan fiction at the moment. Be careful not to get too close to the original scenario because people will find its boring. Looking forward to reading the next chapters, continue like this, you're doing a great job😃 I hope you will pass your exams👍🏽.
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have potential but character design and story development didnt work well but still real story plot is starting so I will read and change my review in future. .currently you are writing most chapter which is same as mahwa so please dont do it in future because it can make readers who have already readed manhwa bored.
The grammar isn't great and the author pulls things out nowhere from time to time. However, its a fun read if you're craving for Eleceed fanfics. You might find harsh comments of mine in the fic, but I still enjoyed reading the fic. And enjoying is the important thing, 5☆s
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The story is amazing, I can't wait for the next chapters! I have a suggestion: Don't let rebecca act too lightheartedly attacking canon members, even though she's baekdu. It makes me have a feeling that she does what she wants because of her "support" Ares.
I LOVE your story. Eleceed is a personal favourite of mine. There's not many fanfics around, and the one's I used to read have gone on hiatus. I found this gem before the rewrite and I absolutely loved it. I highly recommend this story. Ares as a character is quite arrogant and flamboyant, quite a cliche mc, but that's not a bad thing if the writer can capitalize on it. Which, this author manages to do perfectly. The reaction of awakened ones to Ares's power is very accurate, the story continues to improve and transitions between canon and non-canon is seamless. Author, I really hope you keep writing man, I love this story. Please keep writing and have faster updates. I love the premise of the story. As long as you don't make Ares too op and ruin the balance of the story, it will literally be perfect.
Interesting read, basic but interesting character, the grammar isn’t bad it’s just small things like she and he and I and a few small mistakes in the verb tense and if that’s cleaned up I think I would enjoy the story more
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ネタバレを明かすHello my friend, try to make this character reach the top ten before starting the plot Hello my friend, try to make this character reach the top ten before starting the plot
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It's a good fanfic, it's unique since mc does what he want and he is the original mc's twin so that's a plus and being kayden's disciple is another plus but i Don't get it he supposed to have 200+ iq but he is just average when it comes to being smart he literally forgot to ask the assassins who wanted him dead and other stupid actions like missing up 2 associations at the same time and not expecting that the other guy will ambush him while he is fighting the other guy
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ネタバレを明かすa very good read I would like you to continue it. don't drop it like other people do. the rest is just nonsense from here ok. hshdhdhxizjsjzjxejskksn
I hope you like the story of Ares in the world of Eleceed it is my first fanfict with the advice they gave me in these weeks I have tried to improve the writing as much as I can[img=recomendar][img=recomendar][img=recomendar][img=recomendar]
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Realmente uma boa história, parabéns eu gostei bastante e estou viciado Espero que você sacie meu vício com lançamentos constantes 😂 AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAABBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBB
I really love this story. It is one of the rare novel/fanfic that I'm always impatient to read the rest. Can't wait to see where it's going to go. Pls never drop this piece of art,
nice eleceed fanfic. since there are only a few can't really complain to much. other than it being facepaced and bzztttt bzutttt it's a decent read. thanks author sama for making it
Well, the overall story is fine. But I would work on how you write the fanfiction. For example: you are currently writing it like this Kayden: What kayden says (what happens for example he evades an explosion) But what I whould do is Kayden: “something that kayden says” and then say things that happen between just without the () and if he says something in the same paragraph just begin again with the”” I would also work on the sound effects that you use. There are a lot of BOOOMSS BZZZT etc. I think it would be more readable to minimalize the sound effects, and replace them with just text. For exaple you just write the number 98 fires an explosion at kayden and he evades to the right an immediatky tries to electocute him with an electric spear or someting like that. The last thing I would like to say is that I think it would nice if you can gice the characters names instead of Top 98. I understand that you want to keep some characters secret with the question marks but I don’t think it will be a problem to name the other characters. You can even use a random name generator or something. Well that was all I hope the advice is usefull.
the story is very good, the downside is maybe it has a lot of artificial characters but there aren't many pictures of them, just a few, so it's hard to imagine it, but if the author makes a new fanfic,it will definitely be very good, where in the comic there are already many characters that appear, even in the top 10, so we can imagine it, I hope the author makes another new fanfic🙏,with the current comic storyline it certainly won't be difficult because the storyline is already far in the comic
I don't know.. This just felt like a second Kayden. Mixed with arrogance and some og plots. The intelligence perk doesn't get used often so i felt that was a waste.
This is a terrible story, the mc went from a normal to someone that thinks he’s above everyone. And the author has a habbit of just pulling shi out their ah. Don’t really this if you want a good story, it’s a waste of time.
Gooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooood GoooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooodGooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooood
ネタバレを明かすWriting quality has many mistakes but overall its not too bad. I would say its a pretty good book for those who just want a chill book and not just instant op mc although there are a lot of timeskips
I like eleceed, this fanfic is decent, I have an issue with the Reed Richard iq when the mc keeps doing dumb stuff. Its also very inconsistent that is all I can say Iv read until chapter 10 and that is what I've noticed so far.
10/10, Frankly, everything is perfect For me it's the best Eleceed fan fiction at the moment. Be careful not to get too close to the original scenario because people will find its boring. Looking forward to reading the next chapters, continue like this, you're doing a great job😃 I hope you will pass your exams👍🏽.
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have potential but character design and story development didnt work well but still real story plot is starting so I will read and change my review in future. .currently you are writing most chapter which is same as mahwa so please dont do it in future because it can make readers who have already readed manhwa bored.
The grammar isn't great and the author pulls things out nowhere from time to time. However, its a fun read if you're craving for Eleceed fanfics. You might find harsh comments of mine in the fic, but I still enjoyed reading the fic. And enjoying is the important thing, 5☆s
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The story is amazing, I can't wait for the next chapters! I have a suggestion: Don't let rebecca act too lightheartedly attacking canon members, even though she's baekdu. It makes me have a feeling that she does what she wants because of her "support" Ares.
I LOVE your story. Eleceed is a personal favourite of mine. There's not many fanfics around, and the one's I used to read have gone on hiatus. I found this gem before the rewrite and I absolutely loved it. I highly recommend this story. Ares as a character is quite arrogant and flamboyant, quite a cliche mc, but that's not a bad thing if the writer can capitalize on it. Which, this author manages to do perfectly. The reaction of awakened ones to Ares's power is very accurate, the story continues to improve and transitions between canon and non-canon is seamless. Author, I really hope you keep writing man, I love this story. Please keep writing and have faster updates. I love the premise of the story. As long as you don't make Ares too op and ruin the balance of the story, it will literally be perfect.
Interesting read, basic but interesting character, the grammar isn’t bad it’s just small things like she and he and I and a few small mistakes in the verb tense and if that’s cleaned up I think I would enjoy the story more
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ネタバレを明かすHello my friend, try to make this character reach the top ten before starting the plot Hello my friend, try to make this character reach the top ten before starting the plot
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It's a good fanfic, it's unique since mc does what he want and he is the original mc's twin so that's a plus and being kayden's disciple is another plus but i Don't get it he supposed to have 200+ iq but he is just average when it comes to being smart he literally forgot to ask the assassins who wanted him dead and other stupid actions like missing up 2 associations at the same time and not expecting that the other guy will ambush him while he is fighting the other guy
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ネタバレを明かすa very good read I would like you to continue it. don't drop it like other people do. the rest is just nonsense from here ok. hshdhdhxizjsjzjxejskksn
I hope you like the story of Ares in the world of Eleceed it is my first fanfict with the advice they gave me in these weeks I have tried to improve the writing as much as I can[img=recomendar][img=recomendar][img=recomendar][img=recomendar]
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Realmente uma boa história, parabéns eu gostei bastante e estou viciado Espero que você sacie meu vício com lançamentos constantes 😂 AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAABBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBB
I really love this story. It is one of the rare novel/fanfic that I'm always impatient to read the rest. Can't wait to see where it's going to go. Pls never drop this piece of art,
nice eleceed fanfic. since there are only a few can't really complain to much. other than it being facepaced and bzztttt bzutttt it's a decent read. thanks author sama for making it
Well, the overall story is fine. But I would work on how you write the fanfiction. For example: you are currently writing it like this Kayden: What kayden says (what happens for example he evades an explosion) But what I whould do is Kayden: “something that kayden says” and then say things that happen between just without the () and if he says something in the same paragraph just begin again with the”” I would also work on the sound effects that you use. There are a lot of BOOOMSS BZZZT etc. I think it would be more readable to minimalize the sound effects, and replace them with just text. For exaple you just write the number 98 fires an explosion at kayden and he evades to the right an immediatky tries to electocute him with an electric spear or someting like that. The last thing I would like to say is that I think it would nice if you can gice the characters names instead of Top 98. I understand that you want to keep some characters secret with the question marks but I don’t think it will be a problem to name the other characters. You can even use a random name generator or something. Well that was all I hope the advice is usefull.
the story is very good, the downside is maybe it has a lot of artificial characters but there aren't many pictures of them, just a few, so it's hard to imagine it, but if the author makes a new fanfic,it will definitely be very good, where in the comic there are already many characters that appear, even in the top 10, so we can imagine it, I hope the author makes another new fanfic🙏,with the current comic storyline it certainly won't be difficult because the storyline is already far in the comic