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This work is a rare case of "promise nothing, deliver everything", no need to underestimate yourself author, I laughed at your jokes, I have a lot of fun reading and it's very satisfying to see your growth, and evolution of the story. This story came at the right time for me, I found it as soon as I reached the releases of "the conquerors path", but now I'll have to find another work, to read until you come back with the releases, really sad that, but don't be discouraged, the story has a lot of potential.(sorry if don't is possible undstand me, i am using the translator) Thankyou so much for the work
seems pretty good but before reading further I would like to know if there will be some kind of r*pe in the future. I don't like it so I would like to know before traumatizing myself XD
I like the story ....................................................................................................................................
Been thinking I should update my review for a while, and in light of Author getting contracted, I thought now might be a good time. Too bad WN doesn't allow edits, so a new review it is. ~~~ Writing Quality: 5/5. Honestly, I have no complaints. Author is one of the few who actually cares to deliver good quality chapters that doesn't have tons of mistakes. You don't lose your brain cells reading the chapters. On the contrary, there's rarely any mistakes and it's 'very readable', (as he claimed in his Synopsis A/N.) ~~~ Story Development: 4.5/5 (~5/5) The start of the story was very similar to TFC, but Author changed a lot of things and didn't just copy paste stuff from there to his novel. I appreciate that. This story feels original (not as much in the concept, but in the way the story progresses and characters and relations develop). It's nothing ground breaking as far as stories goes, but I've had a TON of fun reading it. I enjoy it. For the genre of story this is, I was not expecting this good of a story. Also, I like how things are progressing. The change from initial SOL style to more adventure and mystery is nice. ~~~ Character Design: 4/5 MC: Again, as I said in my old review, MC isn't some crazy guy. He's your average 22 year old male with a hot blood. He initially comes off as a bit too hørñy, but the character development is noticeable. I have no complains there. Side Characters: I actually like how Author gives the POVs of side characters and we get to see how they feel about things. About MC's change initially to his [SPOILER ALERT!!!!] sudden disappearance(let's just say). His mother, sisters and even the maids seem to have a lively personality and aren't just mute background characters. I like reading their POVs. ~~~ Updating Stability: 5/5 You've been a bit slacking lately, Author. But I'll give you a break, since from the time I've started reading this novel(which was very early) your updates have been pretty frequent. I prefer daily updates, but it's okay if you can't make it for a day or two due to personal reasons. At least you don't stop for weeks or something. ~~~ World Background: 4/5 We're still in the early phases and the world is still pretty much a mystery. But I have liked the little tid tids you've shown us so far. I'm really hyped for that Adventure Arc. Let's go and explore the world and the various babes around the world! XD ~~~ BONUS: Lemon: 5/5. My, that first lemon was a treat! After two ç0$ç-bløçks, it was starting to get annoying, but you didn't disappoint me on the third one. Well done, Author. I'll give you a 5/5 for that juicy lemon. Enjoyment: 5/5. I do love reading this story. Even with its minor flaws and issues(that I can easily overlook), it's still somehow a really fun to read story for me. I am real interested in what kind of world you'll build. This is why I'll be generous and give you a 5-star and not 4 point whatever that I should be giving you. This isn't an objective review. It's a subjective one. ~~~ To author: You might be new to writing, but you're not bad at all. You're actually pretty decent as far as WN writers go. And I know you'll improve as you continue to write. So, keep it up. I'm supporting you wholeheartedly. (Until you decide it's okay to have NTR in the story. That's how you'll lose my support completely. BUT! Luckily, you said there will be no much thing here, so we're good. :) Keep up the good work, Author!) ~End of Essay~
I dont understand why there so many unnecessary flashbacks, there is also so many monologues which can be used as conversation to make it more readable. Also we are reading an Eroge game with RPG novel but all he does is stay at home and talk to himself or system( most of the time). well there are other conversation but and other POV which is good but too much make it odd.
Awesome story, keep up the good work. Also hoping for some good Romance/Harem development in the near future lol. will update the review as the story progresses tho right now it's going in a good direction.
Good book author san. Even though the starting was similar to" TCP" it's completely unique in its own way like you said and don't get disheartened by the low reviews every now and then . overall it's a fking good novel with a lot of potential and so far loving it ☺️☺️☺️. so don't drop it👍👍👍
story is a waste. Characters are 2D, the hypocritical waffling of the MC is beyond annoying and the supposed lemons are less explicit then stuff I can see on TV. all in all this story is a complete waste of time.
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First of all, this novel is good grammar-wise plus story-wise if taken individually but the author had compared it to a novel like TCP so I find it rather lacking. Most of the characters are from the TCP and only their names are different. I find the character of MC rather displeasing. He is very goofy and sometimes annoying. I like manipulative MC more than someone goofy. Writing quality is top tier. Maybe 5× better than The conquers path. Lastly, there's a lack of objective in this story it's just like a light read where MC is free to do anything and he chooses to form a harem of course😅 There are too many authors' notes that spoil the story so there is no suspension in the story. The author calls TCP cringe but this story is way more cringe than TCP and conversations between characters are somewhat awkward. Hopefully, the Author won't delete this because I gave my honest opinion on this story if the author hadn't mentioned anything about TCP this story would have been way better. [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
This novel honestly has very big potential. Regarding the novel till now, it is honestly very good. Since it is still in the beginning, not much can be said. I like the MC personality, being firm when he needs to be no weak-willed type that passively accepts girl's action. I would like him to be more smart and more scheming as if competing with a more intelligent foe, that's just a wishful request. Maybe the holy sword protagonist will be the scheming villain that would be a major plot twist idk. Author keep up with the good work, and do you, it is your novel after all. In case of bad review do not yield, take it in a good light and shake it off. You're writing it because you want to, do not let them shake your confidence. P.S: I'm writing this encouragement so that you don't drop the novel since I'm very invested in it. HAHAHAHA.
writing quality good story hasn't developed yet so 3 character design eh quite average and sometimes excessive the update is good world background is for the lack of a better word also average but it's a good novel so if you have free time or bored you should read it if your a guy who hates mc hiding talent novels not for you if you hate a lot of 4th wall break then this novel is also not for you if you hate a bit of cringe well another not for you moment
One of the best novels I've read 10/10.please continue also, don't listen to people who baseless hate, and we need more lemon[img=recommend]
I am at chapter 26 and I love this book, please continue and don’t drop this amazing novel. I also hope there will be some seggs scenes with his entire family in the future, and the oldest sister didn’t get any screen time till now, even though two years passed in the novel. Overall a great novel, please con tinue[img=update][img=update][img=update]
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So far this novel have been really good. One of my top favorites so far. 100% worth a read. It has better grammar than most of the other novels on Webnovel. As thanks, here’s a picture of Master Chief
Mood lifting review. Ignore it. Author was down due to some møröñ talking nonsense and giving it an unfair 1 star review. So, this is a counter for that. Read my indepth review at the top instead. You're doing a good job Author! You're doing a good job Author! You're doing a good job Author! You're doing a good job Author! You're doing a good job Author! You're doing a good job Author! You're doing a good job Author!
There is a lot of potential here, lets see how it develops. And just adding, might be my 3rd favorite web novel here, haven't read much but I like this a lot.
Although mc is not exactly a 'beta mc', he may have some stupidity. He hasn't experienced character development yet. All I can hope for is the potential of this novel. If it weren't for the potential I saw, I would have quit long ago, but I don't want to put pressure on the author, but I have an expectation. the characters are well presented and the general functioning of the world is not fully known. The current strength of mc is unknown. The story didn't go too far. I'm writing this to support the author and for newcomers. But there is one small problem that caught my attention. Although important characters were introduced for the first adventure mc will go, there has not been much development in mc's attitude. This will have a huge impact on future relationships. Personally, I like tyrannical MCs who are brutal, cruel, cold-blooded, killing anyone who gets in their way. (Harem <3). While writing the review, let's watch a (cliche) adventure where mc falls into a dungeon-like place and gets stronger. Then when mc comes back to his family, it's going to be an extremely embarrassing, ridiculous, and most likely scenario that I'll go straight to because of their current relationship status. This pisses me off. The real problem is that it is irreversible. Anyway, I hope it's a good story. Thanks
Im not much for reviews but this book is really good the characters are really thought out and the mc don’t capture women in stupid nonsense ways and actually uses his brain. It’s not rushed at all and the author really puts in the time to make the book great to read.
Until know i loved this story, good potential, interesting development and lovable characters. I not good with describe things, so, the message i wish to pass is, give it a chance and you won't repent yourself. Novel 10/10.
The novel takes heavy insperation from “The Conquerors Path” novel. The MC is meh. He is a dumb downed version of Austin and more immature. The System is one of those overly talking systems that has to much personality. The side characters have been okay so far.
very enjoyable to read your story 😁. The conqueror's path is also good, but it seriously lacks the proper grammar throughout the book, which makes it more or less annoying to read at times. keep it up 🙏
To fix the pacing of the story you will have to introduce more characters from other noble house also visit them. Also you need a vilian. Some issues with your proganist is that he is growing physically but not mentally. Also you have you have to give more foreshadowing of the main protagonists of the eroge. Also you need a foundation building time skip were he tries to gain foot hold in this new word.Also I see your not trying to make home to overpowered so you nerfing him.To fixed this give him potential skill which alone help build him into the character you want him to be. I enjoyed reading 👍👍👍
This Novel has very little spelling mistakes which I hope the author can keep up, as I see that most novels start degrading at a certain point, but I have faith in the author. Keep up the good work 👍
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the story is starting and the characters are meant to develop little by little, personally I like the story and I hope it improves and that the world background develops more
I really like the story so far I hope it will continue this way Keep up the good work author 😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀
Hello THE_POZ, I've written the review from seeing your auxilliary chapters. And I must say... you are like Izekiel, the author of Monarch of Gluttony: System of Sin. His idea was a bit of my idea too in the story I was planning to create but stopped since I am not sure in consistent updates for it... I've created many unpublished webnovels that I haven't continued, "Only the World background, Story, Plot and characters" But just like Izekiel, yours too... I've thought of a story like that too but in a much more different way. Which I will not say here cuz other peep might use it :V Anyways, do you want to me to become your editor? For free that is. I am Izekiel's Editor too although I am not consistent in updates just like on the webnovels i'm creating since I am still an SHS student who is very busy... but loves writing and creating stories. If you accept for me to become your editor, then send a request to me on Discord ( Revontheus#7699 ) I will help you edit your story chapters and so I can also learn on how you write a story just as how I do it for sir Izekiel. (For possible future story ideas~ since I've just started webnovels and lightnovels a couple of months ago, and is in need of more words for story writing X_X)
This work is a rare case of "promise nothing, deliver everything", no need to underestimate yourself author, I laughed at your jokes, I have a lot of fun reading and it's very satisfying to see your growth, and evolution of the story. This story came at the right time for me, I found it as soon as I reached the releases of "the conquerors path", but now I'll have to find another work, to read until you come back with the releases, really sad that, but don't be discouraged, the story has a lot of potential.(sorry if don't is possible undstand me, i am using the translator) Thankyou so much for the work
seems pretty good but before reading further I would like to know if there will be some kind of r*pe in the future. I don't like it so I would like to know before traumatizing myself XD
I like the story ....................................................................................................................................
Been thinking I should update my review for a while, and in light of Author getting contracted, I thought now might be a good time. Too bad WN doesn't allow edits, so a new review it is. ~~~ Writing Quality: 5/5. Honestly, I have no complaints. Author is one of the few who actually cares to deliver good quality chapters that doesn't have tons of mistakes. You don't lose your brain cells reading the chapters. On the contrary, there's rarely any mistakes and it's 'very readable', (as he claimed in his Synopsis A/N.) ~~~ Story Development: 4.5/5 (~5/5) The start of the story was very similar to TFC, but Author changed a lot of things and didn't just copy paste stuff from there to his novel. I appreciate that. This story feels original (not as much in the concept, but in the way the story progresses and characters and relations develop). It's nothing ground breaking as far as stories goes, but I've had a TON of fun reading it. I enjoy it. For the genre of story this is, I was not expecting this good of a story. Also, I like how things are progressing. The change from initial SOL style to more adventure and mystery is nice. ~~~ Character Design: 4/5 MC: Again, as I said in my old review, MC isn't some crazy guy. He's your average 22 year old male with a hot blood. He initially comes off as a bit too hørñy, but the character development is noticeable. I have no complains there. Side Characters: I actually like how Author gives the POVs of side characters and we get to see how they feel about things. About MC's change initially to his [SPOILER ALERT!!!!] sudden disappearance(let's just say). His mother, sisters and even the maids seem to have a lively personality and aren't just mute background characters. I like reading their POVs. ~~~ Updating Stability: 5/5 You've been a bit slacking lately, Author. But I'll give you a break, since from the time I've started reading this novel(which was very early) your updates have been pretty frequent. I prefer daily updates, but it's okay if you can't make it for a day or two due to personal reasons. At least you don't stop for weeks or something. ~~~ World Background: 4/5 We're still in the early phases and the world is still pretty much a mystery. But I have liked the little tid tids you've shown us so far. I'm really hyped for that Adventure Arc. Let's go and explore the world and the various babes around the world! XD ~~~ BONUS: Lemon: 5/5. My, that first lemon was a treat! After two ç0$ç-bløçks, it was starting to get annoying, but you didn't disappoint me on the third one. Well done, Author. I'll give you a 5/5 for that juicy lemon. Enjoyment: 5/5. I do love reading this story. Even with its minor flaws and issues(that I can easily overlook), it's still somehow a really fun to read story for me. I am real interested in what kind of world you'll build. This is why I'll be generous and give you a 5-star and not 4 point whatever that I should be giving you. This isn't an objective review. It's a subjective one. ~~~ To author: You might be new to writing, but you're not bad at all. You're actually pretty decent as far as WN writers go. And I know you'll improve as you continue to write. So, keep it up. I'm supporting you wholeheartedly. (Until you decide it's okay to have NTR in the story. That's how you'll lose my support completely. BUT! Luckily, you said there will be no much thing here, so we're good. :) Keep up the good work, Author!) ~End of Essay~
I dont understand why there so many unnecessary flashbacks, there is also so many monologues which can be used as conversation to make it more readable. Also we are reading an Eroge game with RPG novel but all he does is stay at home and talk to himself or system( most of the time). well there are other conversation but and other POV which is good but too much make it odd.
Awesome story, keep up the good work. Also hoping for some good Romance/Harem development in the near future lol. will update the review as the story progresses tho right now it's going in a good direction.
Good book author san. Even though the starting was similar to" TCP" it's completely unique in its own way like you said and don't get disheartened by the low reviews every now and then . overall it's a fking good novel with a lot of potential and so far loving it ☺️☺️☺️. so don't drop it👍👍👍
story is a waste. Characters are 2D, the hypocritical waffling of the MC is beyond annoying and the supposed lemons are less explicit then stuff I can see on TV. all in all this story is a complete waste of time.
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First of all, this novel is good grammar-wise plus story-wise if taken individually but the author had compared it to a novel like TCP so I find it rather lacking. Most of the characters are from the TCP and only their names are different. I find the character of MC rather displeasing. He is very goofy and sometimes annoying. I like manipulative MC more than someone goofy. Writing quality is top tier. Maybe 5× better than The conquers path. Lastly, there's a lack of objective in this story it's just like a light read where MC is free to do anything and he chooses to form a harem of course😅 There are too many authors' notes that spoil the story so there is no suspension in the story. The author calls TCP cringe but this story is way more cringe than TCP and conversations between characters are somewhat awkward. Hopefully, the Author won't delete this because I gave my honest opinion on this story if the author hadn't mentioned anything about TCP this story would have been way better. [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
This novel honestly has very big potential. Regarding the novel till now, it is honestly very good. Since it is still in the beginning, not much can be said. I like the MC personality, being firm when he needs to be no weak-willed type that passively accepts girl's action. I would like him to be more smart and more scheming as if competing with a more intelligent foe, that's just a wishful request. Maybe the holy sword protagonist will be the scheming villain that would be a major plot twist idk. Author keep up with the good work, and do you, it is your novel after all. In case of bad review do not yield, take it in a good light and shake it off. You're writing it because you want to, do not let them shake your confidence. P.S: I'm writing this encouragement so that you don't drop the novel since I'm very invested in it. HAHAHAHA.
writing quality good story hasn't developed yet so 3 character design eh quite average and sometimes excessive the update is good world background is for the lack of a better word also average but it's a good novel so if you have free time or bored you should read it if your a guy who hates mc hiding talent novels not for you if you hate a lot of 4th wall break then this novel is also not for you if you hate a bit of cringe well another not for you moment
One of the best novels I've read 10/10.please continue also, don't listen to people who baseless hate, and we need more lemon[img=recommend]
I am at chapter 26 and I love this book, please continue and don’t drop this amazing novel. I also hope there will be some seggs scenes with his entire family in the future, and the oldest sister didn’t get any screen time till now, even though two years passed in the novel. Overall a great novel, please con tinue[img=update][img=update][img=update]
ネタバレを明かす So far this novel have been really good. One of my top favorites so far. 100% worth a read. It has better grammar than most of the other novels on Webnovel. As thanks, here’s a picture of Master Chief
Mood lifting review. Ignore it. Author was down due to some møröñ talking nonsense and giving it an unfair 1 star review. So, this is a counter for that. Read my indepth review at the top instead. You're doing a good job Author! You're doing a good job Author! You're doing a good job Author! You're doing a good job Author! You're doing a good job Author! You're doing a good job Author! You're doing a good job Author!
There is a lot of potential here, lets see how it develops. And just adding, might be my 3rd favorite web novel here, haven't read much but I like this a lot.
Although mc is not exactly a 'beta mc', he may have some stupidity. He hasn't experienced character development yet. All I can hope for is the potential of this novel. If it weren't for the potential I saw, I would have quit long ago, but I don't want to put pressure on the author, but I have an expectation. the characters are well presented and the general functioning of the world is not fully known. The current strength of mc is unknown. The story didn't go too far. I'm writing this to support the author and for newcomers. But there is one small problem that caught my attention. Although important characters were introduced for the first adventure mc will go, there has not been much development in mc's attitude. This will have a huge impact on future relationships. Personally, I like tyrannical MCs who are brutal, cruel, cold-blooded, killing anyone who gets in their way. (Harem <3). While writing the review, let's watch a (cliche) adventure where mc falls into a dungeon-like place and gets stronger. Then when mc comes back to his family, it's going to be an extremely embarrassing, ridiculous, and most likely scenario that I'll go straight to because of their current relationship status. This pisses me off. The real problem is that it is irreversible. Anyway, I hope it's a good story. Thanks
Im not much for reviews but this book is really good the characters are really thought out and the mc don’t capture women in stupid nonsense ways and actually uses his brain. It’s not rushed at all and the author really puts in the time to make the book great to read.
Until know i loved this story, good potential, interesting development and lovable characters. I not good with describe things, so, the message i wish to pass is, give it a chance and you won't repent yourself. Novel 10/10.
The novel takes heavy insperation from “The Conquerors Path” novel. The MC is meh. He is a dumb downed version of Austin and more immature. The System is one of those overly talking systems that has to much personality. The side characters have been okay so far.
very enjoyable to read your story 😁. The conqueror's path is also good, but it seriously lacks the proper grammar throughout the book, which makes it more or less annoying to read at times. keep it up 🙏
To fix the pacing of the story you will have to introduce more characters from other noble house also visit them. Also you need a vilian. Some issues with your proganist is that he is growing physically but not mentally. Also you have you have to give more foreshadowing of the main protagonists of the eroge. Also you need a foundation building time skip were he tries to gain foot hold in this new word.Also I see your not trying to make home to overpowered so you nerfing him.To fixed this give him potential skill which alone help build him into the character you want him to be. I enjoyed reading 👍👍👍
This Novel has very little spelling mistakes which I hope the author can keep up, as I see that most novels start degrading at a certain point, but I have faith in the author. Keep up the good work 👍
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the story is starting and the characters are meant to develop little by little, personally I like the story and I hope it improves and that the world background develops more
I really like the story so far I hope it will continue this way Keep up the good work author 😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀
Hello THE_POZ, I've written the review from seeing your auxilliary chapters. And I must say... you are like Izekiel, the author of Monarch of Gluttony: System of Sin. His idea was a bit of my idea too in the story I was planning to create but stopped since I am not sure in consistent updates for it... I've created many unpublished webnovels that I haven't continued, "Only the World background, Story, Plot and characters" But just like Izekiel, yours too... I've thought of a story like that too but in a much more different way. Which I will not say here cuz other peep might use it :V Anyways, do you want to me to become your editor? For free that is. I am Izekiel's Editor too although I am not consistent in updates just like on the webnovels i'm creating since I am still an SHS student who is very busy... but loves writing and creating stories. If you accept for me to become your editor, then send a request to me on Discord ( Revontheus#7699 ) I will help you edit your story chapters and so I can also learn on how you write a story just as how I do it for sir Izekiel. (For possible future story ideas~ since I've just started webnovels and lightnovels a couple of months ago, and is in need of more words for story writing X_X)