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It's interesting story, beutiful plot and well defined character and some cute stuff. Author needs to works on English more and add more sophistication than detailed. It's makes story little boring. keep it up good work ❤️✨❤️
There's a lot to improve, the novel is great, the author has an amazing plot. this novel deserves more. the character definitions require more detail but that is easy to correct. good luck author
You ask me for heart, so I gave you one, and there is the bonus in from of a review. Your book can be said to be quite.. Interesting and the development of the story can also be said.. Pretty good? Well, that's how it is :3
A great read for me amazing characters and a perfect write up keep more chapters coming author!!![img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
The story is good, nice and captivating. However the English or should I say grammar keeps pulling me in and out of the story. It could do with editing. With a good editing you could achieve one of the best I have read.
The story has a pleasant and steady pacing as a cultivator novel. The world is fresh and fun to read. The thing i like about the story is the authors creativity of the world creation. I especially enjoyed the character interactions between each other. What i do like to see more of is a bit more showing then telling format, but overall this is a nice story to read. I recommend it a try for cultivator fans out there. Keep up the great work!
This book is a mixed bag for me. Starting with the strong points. The plot is clear in its direction, the author has good pacing skills(hindered by something I'll mention later), and the world has had work put into its creation. Therefore, the exoskeleton of the novel is functional, and in theory, the novel should be quite good. However, one element puts an obstacle to this. The writing. - The paragraphs are too long and mess up the pacing. They're hard to read on mobile. - The sentences should be linked more prominently, not separate clauses that make the reading stiff. - The metaphors and similes used should be reviewed by the author, as they break realism. - One tense should be consistent. I've seen present, past perfect and simple past used in one paragraph. - The grammar is good. While the author is not a native English speaker(nor am I), I think they shouldn't take this as an opportunity to slack, and instead, work hard to improve their skills, which they clearly have, seeing as the latest chapter shows immense improvement. Good luck, author, keep writing :)
It's interesting story, beutiful plot and well defined character and some cute stuff. Author needs to works on English more and add more sophistication than detailed. It's makes story little boring. keep it up good work ❤️✨❤️
There's a lot to improve, the novel is great, the author has an amazing plot. this novel deserves more. the character definitions require more detail but that is easy to correct. good luck author
You ask me for heart, so I gave you one, and there is the bonus in from of a review. Your book can be said to be quite.. Interesting and the development of the story can also be said.. Pretty good? Well, that's how it is :3
A great read for me amazing characters and a perfect write up keep more chapters coming author!!![img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
The story is good, nice and captivating. However the English or should I say grammar keeps pulling me in and out of the story. It could do with editing. With a good editing you could achieve one of the best I have read.
The story has a pleasant and steady pacing as a cultivator novel. The world is fresh and fun to read. The thing i like about the story is the authors creativity of the world creation. I especially enjoyed the character interactions between each other. What i do like to see more of is a bit more showing then telling format, but overall this is a nice story to read. I recommend it a try for cultivator fans out there. Keep up the great work!
This book is a mixed bag for me. Starting with the strong points. The plot is clear in its direction, the author has good pacing skills(hindered by something I'll mention later), and the world has had work put into its creation. Therefore, the exoskeleton of the novel is functional, and in theory, the novel should be quite good. However, one element puts an obstacle to this. The writing. - The paragraphs are too long and mess up the pacing. They're hard to read on mobile. - The sentences should be linked more prominently, not separate clauses that make the reading stiff. - The metaphors and similes used should be reviewed by the author, as they break realism. - One tense should be consistent. I've seen present, past perfect and simple past used in one paragraph. - The grammar is good. While the author is not a native English speaker(nor am I), I think they shouldn't take this as an opportunity to slack, and instead, work hard to improve their skills, which they clearly have, seeing as the latest chapter shows immense improvement. Good luck, author, keep writing :)