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- ストーリー展開
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All right. I'm going to be blunt and straight. The grammar is bad. The plot moves too fast. And simply knowing martial arts doesn't make you any stronger. I've read until chapter four and I'm still not sure if it gets any better. The story itself is too confusing. Dialogues are the same as most isekais. (I've heard it more than I'd like to.) While this book might not have been the best, I hope that you will continue to improve. We all start at the lowest point, but we make our way to the top. Out of the mountain of despair, a stone of hope. Best wishes to the author; don't stop until you're proud.
It's a good book! It deserves its own manga and anime adaptation! As long as Netflix doesn't take it HAHA Just kidding. It's super cool and amazing to read! Would recommend to my otaku friends! :D
Hi Everyone, this is your humble Author who wanted to ask for your reviews it will help me a lot as a newbie author whose goal is to improve my skills and make you guys a good novel to read hehe. Thank You.
Writing quality is good. Very good. Barely any mistakes from what I can see. Updates are constant. The story though... 3rd or 4th chapter, 1st wife. 9th or 10th chapter, 2nd wife... 11th chapter, adopted daughter/wife to be. That must be a world record. 1st wife is understandable. She lost everything and found a pillar. 2nd wife... Need more background. maybe oppressed due to having one attribute. adopted phoenix... feels too forced I just quit. The world is too shallow, 11th chapter and all we know is another kingdom where 1st wife is and another neighboring kingdom (fafnir) which I assume has friendly ties with the kingdom they are in for them to send troops to defend it where the 2nd wife came from. The world building is very little. It focuses too much in the characters. Perhaps it's just me but oh well. This is my opinion. Aight that's all. good luck have fun writing.
ネタバレを明かす All right. I'm going to be blunt and straight. The grammar is bad. The plot moves too fast. And simply knowing martial arts doesn't make you any stronger. I've read until chapter four and I'm still not sure if it gets any better. The story itself is too confusing. Dialogues are the same as most isekais. (I've heard it more than I'd like to.) While this book might not have been the best, I hope that you will continue to improve. We all start at the lowest point, but we make our way to the top. Out of the mountain of despair, a stone of hope. Best wishes to the author; don't stop until you're proud.
It's a good book! It deserves its own manga and anime adaptation! As long as Netflix doesn't take it HAHA Just kidding. It's super cool and amazing to read! Would recommend to my otaku friends! :D
Hi Everyone, this is your humble Author who wanted to ask for your reviews it will help me a lot as a newbie author whose goal is to improve my skills and make you guys a good novel to read hehe. Thank You.
Writing quality is good. Very good. Barely any mistakes from what I can see. Updates are constant. The story though... 3rd or 4th chapter, 1st wife. 9th or 10th chapter, 2nd wife... 11th chapter, adopted daughter/wife to be. That must be a world record. 1st wife is understandable. She lost everything and found a pillar. 2nd wife... Need more background. maybe oppressed due to having one attribute. adopted phoenix... feels too forced I just quit. The world is too shallow, 11th chapter and all we know is another kingdom where 1st wife is and another neighboring kingdom (fafnir) which I assume has friendly ties with the kingdom they are in for them to send troops to defend it where the 2nd wife came from. The world building is very little. It focuses too much in the characters. Perhaps it's just me but oh well. This is my opinion. Aight that's all. good luck have fun writing.
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