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So, for now after just two chapters, I can't say I recommend it. I would rate it, after reading just two chapters (I will read more and update this review), at 1/1,5 stars. I can barely read it. Unnecessary information is one thing, because there are bits that feel like a filler to make chapters longer. Another one is bunch of unverified information that are base of the story. Like with amount of chakra being something you can't increase because it's innate. Basically bunch of things you could verify with Google. But that I can forgive on account of this being a fanfic. You can do everything with fanfic. But edit this before posting. It's not mtl site. You start sentences with upper case letters. You make some sentences sound more like proper English, not as gibberish. Then you have something that I could at least consider giving it more than 10 chapters before dropping. Because now I see it like author took mtl-ed content and pasted it to webnovel without even looking at it, not to mention editing it.
The grammar is ugh, BAD! Probably because this is a translation(?). The idea is kinda the same with the usual sign-in system that was popular in China some weeks/months ago, so I don't think this will be good at the long run. I just can't continue reading this so I will place this story on my [Not Really Good for Your Brain!] reading list!
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Grammar is terrible and confusing, very annoying and frustratingggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggg
only problem i see is that its in need of heavy editing. normally I won't write views but this is a piece of work. and a good one at that. just some mistakes and things that can be said better. keep up the almost okay work. and try finding a editor as it will help you out a ton.
so this is another system fic where mc is seemingly unaware pf his cercumstances where he gets the reward system and is awarded things like
Moaaaar chapters , not perfect translation but still my cup of tea , there is good plot , and well there is sharingan ! , now please upload moaaar ❤️❤️❤️
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Love it .............................................................................................................................................................................................................
So, for now after just two chapters, I can't say I recommend it. I would rate it, after reading just two chapters (I will read more and update this review), at 1/1,5 stars. I can barely read it. Unnecessary information is one thing, because there are bits that feel like a filler to make chapters longer. Another one is bunch of unverified information that are base of the story. Like with amount of chakra being something you can't increase because it's innate. Basically bunch of things you could verify with Google. But that I can forgive on account of this being a fanfic. You can do everything with fanfic. But edit this before posting. It's not mtl site. You start sentences with upper case letters. You make some sentences sound more like proper English, not as gibberish. Then you have something that I could at least consider giving it more than 10 chapters before dropping. Because now I see it like author took mtl-ed content and pasted it to webnovel without even looking at it, not to mention editing it.
The grammar is ugh, BAD! Probably because this is a translation(?). The idea is kinda the same with the usual sign-in system that was popular in China some weeks/months ago, so I don't think this will be good at the long run. I just can't continue reading this so I will place this story on my [Not Really Good for Your Brain!] reading list!
please update faster..........................................................................................................................
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ネタバレを明かす Grammar is terrible and confusing, very annoying and frustratingggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggg
only problem i see is that its in need of heavy editing. normally I won't write views but this is a piece of work. and a good one at that. just some mistakes and things that can be said better. keep up the almost okay work. and try finding a editor as it will help you out a ton.
so this is another system fic where mc is seemingly unaware pf his cercumstances where he gets the reward system and is awarded things like
Moaaaar chapters , not perfect translation but still my cup of tea , there is good plot , and well there is sharingan ! , now please upload moaaar ❤️❤️❤️
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More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More More
Eu ja li isso em algum lugar _______________________________________⁶__------------------------‐----------------------______ -------------hdhdhddjjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjfjfjfjfjfjdjdjdjdjdjfjdu
[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend] i hope this good immm putrin alot of faith in this
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I hope this thing doesn't disappointed me --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
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