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レビューを書くStory is so poorly written it makes it almost impossible to understand. I still don't know if Loki is the MCU Loki or just an assassin named Loki. This is like if i had took all my good idea for this story and tossed them down a flight of stairs. Then I wrote what i found a the bottom. Just a jumble of interesting ideas with little to no direction or thought.
Awful writing to the point of being unreadable... While the premise might be of some interest there's in its current state it's a waste of time.
I believe this story to be one of the best out there and I don’t care for the mistakes. I hope you continue with this but slow down a little It will be great if you make him king of game of thrones world then move to middle earth start this great empire
ok beginning but the story felt so rushed. not enough time to develop the characters. it just felt like it was a fantasy to stroking the authors ego. one the the author was finish stroking his ego the story felt flat, and didn't even finish properly.
Author has only 1.6 hours of reading and it shows. it's ineligible, badly formatted and doesent make any sense. I wouldn't recommend reading if simple words spelt wrong annoys you.
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it looks like the writing of a child who obviously hasn't read any other novels or fanfics, both from the lines and from the thoughts, really... I'm losing brains reading this (but the background is good, so the author is a kid with a good one imagination. if he could study his language better it would be a very good story)
The story is good. I like the idea, and all the progress. Character picture not bad either. The main issue is dialog structure. It's like every paragraph made different way. Sometimes dialog starts with - John: blah blah... Sometimes John: " blah blah". And you can't say when people ar talking and when they are thinking. It's sad. I think if you could fix this issue, then story would have high quality based on other fanfics
If you can look past the grammer then its a great story. And also some people might think that he is weak because his only power is to summon soldiers, but he is very good at fighting already (way better than anyone in westeros)
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До 20 главы хорошее построение сюжета а дальше все пошло на спад а последние главы вообще "детская неожиданность" Перестаю читать дальнейшие главы так как не затягивает
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Me encanta gracias x el trabajo que hacen en la traducción y corrección................................................. ........... ...... .... ..... ...... ............... ....
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This reminds me when I was young and couldn't write properly. I don't know why you write this in English when you could have written it in your language. it's Killing my brain cells.
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So it was my first time reading a story in this genre. I liked the introduction very much. This story was amazing. Keep it up, author! Good luck, with the next chapters! it was a marvellous web novel.👍
what kinda trash is this worthless aurthur u should take some english class first or just suicide just like ur worthless trash parents
Story is so poorly written it makes it almost impossible to understand. I still don't know if Loki is the MCU Loki or just an assassin named Loki. This is like if i had took all my good idea for this story and tossed them down a flight of stairs. Then I wrote what i found a the bottom. Just a jumble of interesting ideas with little to no direction or thought.
Awful writing to the point of being unreadable... While the premise might be of some interest there's in its current state it's a waste of time.
I believe this story to be one of the best out there and I don’t care for the mistakes. I hope you continue with this but slow down a little It will be great if you make him king of game of thrones world then move to middle earth start this great empire
ok beginning but the story felt so rushed. not enough time to develop the characters. it just felt like it was a fantasy to stroking the authors ego. one the the author was finish stroking his ego the story felt flat, and didn't even finish properly.
Author has only 1.6 hours of reading and it shows. it's ineligible, badly formatted and doesent make any sense. I wouldn't recommend reading if simple words spelt wrong annoys you.
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it looks like the writing of a child who obviously hasn't read any other novels or fanfics, both from the lines and from the thoughts, really... I'm losing brains reading this (but the background is good, so the author is a kid with a good one imagination. if he could study his language better it would be a very good story)
The story is good. I like the idea, and all the progress. Character picture not bad either. The main issue is dialog structure. It's like every paragraph made different way. Sometimes dialog starts with - John: blah blah... Sometimes John: " blah blah". And you can't say when people ar talking and when they are thinking. It's sad. I think if you could fix this issue, then story would have high quality based on other fanfics
If you can look past the grammer then its a great story. And also some people might think that he is weak because his only power is to summon soldiers, but he is very good at fighting already (way better than anyone in westeros)
continue oh creative A a a a a a. A aa. Qq. A a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a. A a a a a a aa a a. A a a a a a a a a s s. S x. W 2 1 1 2 2 2 2 3 3.4 3 4 4 4 4.5 5 5 5 5.55.5 5 5. Us. Us. 4. D d. D d d d e e e d d d e ss. E e s s ejekekdiirir e e d d x d e. R f x. S d. T f s. W a a a a a a a. A a a a a
give original link or name pls mjeui6yjeu3uejejthrnrtjtenhrnhryhnnhrhneuunte he5nenehtnhtet hbhentehntehnt3hnhnyejnenhenjyr juku.ntbh
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До 20 главы хорошее построение сюжета а дальше все пошло на спад а последние главы вообще "детская неожиданность" Перестаю читать дальнейшие главы так как не затягивает
Great story please dont drop . . . .. . . .. . .. . . . .. . . . nfjrirjfnnfn.fjcnc.ncncn n. . .. . . . . .. . . . . . .. . . . . .. .. . . . ..
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Me encanta gracias x el trabajo que hacen en la traducción y corrección................................................. ........... ...... .... ..... ...... ............... ....
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This reminds me when I was young and couldn't write properly. I don't know why you write this in English when you could have written it in your language. it's Killing my brain cells.
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So it was my first time reading a story in this genre. I liked the introduction very much. This story was amazing. Keep it up, author! Good luck, with the next chapters! it was a marvellous web novel.👍
what kinda trash is this worthless aurthur u should take some english class first or just suicide just like ur worthless trash parents