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The beginning is a bit illogical and seems absurd knowing the kingdom building was too fast and the age of him doing all of wonderous things was inappropriate. Well, what can I say, it's fantasy fanfic of course. But as soon as he grew up the plot compensate itself, it gets better but the thing was I can't seem to move on from the introduction and it affected me reading the rest of the chapters 😭. Great concept by the way, not many ASOIAF fanfic choose a pre-canon timeline. I say again, it's too fast, it might better if just started from his teenage years while having a bit of flashback of his childhood. Uh, one more, he seems born with no gifts or something but he just being godlike for the rest of the fic. Sorry, I hope that was only me who felt that or I might just skipped some things while reading it.
this is interesting. I binged this and it is good. I hope the mc becomes king. He should just kill varys after becoming king. Keeping him safe would be bad.
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Moaaarrrrrrr . .... I can only say simply magnificent , great background story and while his development is fast ,it doesn't really show him being too OP .
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Very good story, since he is the Moat Cailin maybe expand the channel from west to east? hhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
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I think he should become the King of Westeros with Stannis as Hand, Melisandre as Master of Whispers, Manderly for Coin and Tarly for Laws. Varys could be seen as a Blackfyre man who will work in Essos to get the blackfyres back on throne. Dont really care about the Targs.
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quick, well-written story that stays a lot in the important parts, in short so far I really liked it.
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The idea is good, but it's poorly written. basically it's shet 💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩
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Autor, você tem que parar de fica fazendo questionários, você cria a historia e escolhe o futuro dela, foda-se oque os leitores pensa, é sua e ponto final. 7 capítulos só de auxilia fazendo pergunta, que saco, pelo amor de deus! Tirando isso eu gostei da obra!😊
moreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeemoreeeeeeeee and thank you thank youthank youthank youthank youthank youthank youthank youthank youthank youthank youthank youthank you
Thank you thank you thank you thank you thank you thank you thank you thank you thank you thank you thank you thank you thank you thank you thank you thank you thank you thank you thank you
Hope you get better soon!!!!!Hope you get better soon!!!!!Hope you get better soon!!!!!Hope you get better soon!!!!!Hope you get better soon!!!!!Hope you get better soon!!!!!Hope you get better soon!!!!!Hope you get better soon!!!!!Hope you get better soon!!!!!Hope you get better soon!!!!!
The beginning is a bit illogical and seems absurd knowing the kingdom building was too fast and the age of him doing all of wonderous things was inappropriate. Well, what can I say, it's fantasy fanfic of course. But as soon as he grew up the plot compensate itself, it gets better but the thing was I can't seem to move on from the introduction and it affected me reading the rest of the chapters 😭. Great concept by the way, not many ASOIAF fanfic choose a pre-canon timeline. I say again, it's too fast, it might better if just started from his teenage years while having a bit of flashback of his childhood. Uh, one more, he seems born with no gifts or something but he just being godlike for the rest of the fic. Sorry, I hope that was only me who felt that or I might just skipped some things while reading it.
this is interesting. I binged this and it is good. I hope the mc becomes king. He should just kill varys after becoming king. Keeping him safe would be bad.
ネタバレを明かす Moaaarrrrrrr . .... I can only say simply magnificent , great background story and while his development is fast ,it doesn't really show him being too OP .
++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++
Very good story, since he is the Moat Cailin maybe expand the channel from west to east? hhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
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I think he should become the King of Westeros with Stannis as Hand, Melisandre as Master of Whispers, Manderly for Coin and Tarly for Laws. Varys could be seen as a Blackfyre man who will work in Essos to get the blackfyres back on throne. Dont really care about the Targs.
moreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeemoreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeemoreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
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quick, well-written story that stays a lot in the important parts, in short so far I really liked it.
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