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Un Mc 100% hipócrita se siente mal por qué en el primer capítulo esclaviza a pirra sin querer pero ya pasando 2 capítulo habla de esclavizar a las villanas y venderlas como si hablara del clima de la mañana, realmente estupido( en especial me enojo porque Neo es mí favorita y habla de vender como si fuera basura repugnante a los ojos del prota)
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Didn't like the story if I'm being honest, the MC giving power to the girls especially Weiss is what annoyed me the most honesty it's simply stupid to do so
The story seems abandoned, so I will only say things concerning the little I have seen, it is not so little but I did not read the whole story. Not there much to say, the MC is a slightly more serious/mature Jaune but still has 0 dignity, what I mean by dignity is that Jaune is openly insulted/mistreated by Weiss as the original and does nothing, he obviously doesn't love her but even though she insults him to his face he doesn't say or do anything, and even gives her strength by making her drink his dragon blood, what's the point of that? He says it's to have a level 7 team to conquer RWBY, but he can choose more people to give his blood to, use other characters and not have them in his Beacon team but for the future when he needs help instead of empowering the one who verbally abuses him. Another thing, the MC at the beginning doesn't like Yang because her explosive attitude is annoying, but he doesn't say anything about Ruby who is cute and all, but she's just as annoying in another way, like a hyperactive girl who has nothing better to do than annoy you, then convenience. And the MC's personality and actions are countered and changed several times that at one point she doesn't even seem to have a personality and it's like watching a puppet doing what the author wants.
My ratings should say enough. Story was interesting for the first 30-50 Chapters. But became alot worse the further I read this Story, would have finished the Story to if it would have been finished here. But the Paywall showed its ugly Head. So read this Story if you like SI with CYOA.
Some parts of this story are great to read but it’s certainly not perfect I would rate it as a 7/10 the mc is op which can be fun but does become boring at some points
MC is hypocritical and sells his girls. The powers don't get explained. He sells his "waifus" and treats them like objects. The auxiliary chaoters are very off-putting cause nothing is explained other than the fact that his powers are from some random CYOA.
this has been a great novel and i loved it since the beginning but my major point is will this be ever updated it would be really sad to see this novel go
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The story was pretty good then you started making all tbe girls bi for some reason and it ruined it I guess give it a shot if you like that stuff but they even do it when hes not there and that feels like ntr
Writing- 4 star Story D- 2 Character- 2 update- 4 background- 4 Mmm... Everything is decent, but everything goes downhill when the salem arc is approaching. grammar, plot, execution and characteristics. MC:Jaune is a naive, reckless and gullible man that convinces himself that he does this and that for the benefit of Remnant. as the chapters release, it was shown that he's slowly becoming Even more reckless, hypocritical. Double standards and all. He broke my expectations for the worst and cause a the death of most populations. also he brainwashed his waifus, and executed them poorly at that. ( Salem arc and the unexpected smex with Raven and Yang. and many more) the quality of plot declines and I stopped reading before he'd traveled in another world.
Story is good and had potential, good grammar too, but everything was ruined for me the moment he 'sold' waifus If you don't have a problem with something like that then go on and read Oh and MC is a HUGE hypocrite, be warned
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A good fanfic overall quite realistic in some place and even with system the MC didn't directly broke the world by being OP instantly. a bit sad that the system is just not my cup of tea.
Accept the fact that the moral meter of this MC is very odd and shifty and he is not the most emotionally strong character which I am hoping would change with the recent things he had to go through(at the end of RWBY arc, I don't want to give spoiler) this fic is amazing, just like the rest of the fics written by him. I am enjoying this and I just hope that you will finish this one.
Dude first of all you should give some kind of intro and atleast basic info about his powers before starting the story. Now the idea is a good one and the MC is not bad either but in trying to make it realistic you are just making him look angsty and emo brood as well sometimes. Though still quite a good read and will be waiting to see which worlds would he travel in the future.
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Very nicely done. Characters don’t immediately jump to have s*x but developes their feelings first. Though I’m slightly miffed that the cat girl is being sidelined but overall it’s very well done.
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It took me a minute to figure out what was going on and i kinda wasnt okay with it. then i clicked on the authors name.... I reconized every fanfic youve written cause i read them all. although there are somethings im not okay with we are different people and its your story. Youve got my support. On a side note. Is it too much to ask you to finish the HP game of thrones fic?
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a read "waifu" in the synopsis and its all i need to know, to know, that its not worth reading first time i had to fill in the required symbols to post.
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the mc was continually nerfed for no reason and then when he got a little power he was nerfed again
Un Mc 100% hipócrita se siente mal por qué en el primer capítulo esclaviza a pirra sin querer pero ya pasando 2 capítulo habla de esclavizar a las villanas y venderlas como si hablara del clima de la mañana, realmente estupido( en especial me enojo porque Neo es mí favorita y habla de vender como si fuera basura repugnante a los ojos del prota)
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Didn't like the story if I'm being honest, the MC giving power to the girls especially Weiss is what annoyed me the most honesty it's simply stupid to do so
The story seems abandoned, so I will only say things concerning the little I have seen, it is not so little but I did not read the whole story. Not there much to say, the MC is a slightly more serious/mature Jaune but still has 0 dignity, what I mean by dignity is that Jaune is openly insulted/mistreated by Weiss as the original and does nothing, he obviously doesn't love her but even though she insults him to his face he doesn't say or do anything, and even gives her strength by making her drink his dragon blood, what's the point of that? He says it's to have a level 7 team to conquer RWBY, but he can choose more people to give his blood to, use other characters and not have them in his Beacon team but for the future when he needs help instead of empowering the one who verbally abuses him. Another thing, the MC at the beginning doesn't like Yang because her explosive attitude is annoying, but he doesn't say anything about Ruby who is cute and all, but she's just as annoying in another way, like a hyperactive girl who has nothing better to do than annoy you, then convenience. And the MC's personality and actions are countered and changed several times that at one point she doesn't even seem to have a personality and it's like watching a puppet doing what the author wants.
My ratings should say enough. Story was interesting for the first 30-50 Chapters. But became alot worse the further I read this Story, would have finished the Story to if it would have been finished here. But the Paywall showed its ugly Head. So read this Story if you like SI with CYOA.
Some parts of this story are great to read but it’s certainly not perfect I would rate it as a 7/10 the mc is op which can be fun but does become boring at some points
MC is hypocritical and sells his girls. The powers don't get explained. He sells his "waifus" and treats them like objects. The auxiliary chaoters are very off-putting cause nothing is explained other than the fact that his powers are from some random CYOA.
this has been a great novel and i loved it since the beginning but my major point is will this be ever updated it would be really sad to see this novel go
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The story was pretty good then you started making all tbe girls bi for some reason and it ruined it I guess give it a shot if you like that stuff but they even do it when hes not there and that feels like ntr
Writing- 4 star Story D- 2 Character- 2 update- 4 background- 4 Mmm... Everything is decent, but everything goes downhill when the salem arc is approaching. grammar, plot, execution and characteristics. MC:Jaune is a naive, reckless and gullible man that convinces himself that he does this and that for the benefit of Remnant. as the chapters release, it was shown that he's slowly becoming Even more reckless, hypocritical. Double standards and all. He broke my expectations for the worst and cause a the death of most populations. also he brainwashed his waifus, and executed them poorly at that. ( Salem arc and the unexpected smex with Raven and Yang. and many more) the quality of plot declines and I stopped reading before he'd traveled in another world.
Story is good and had potential, good grammar too, but everything was ruined for me the moment he 'sold' waifus If you don't have a problem with something like that then go on and read Oh and MC is a HUGE hypocrite, be warned
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A good fanfic overall quite realistic in some place and even with system the MC didn't directly broke the world by being OP instantly. a bit sad that the system is just not my cup of tea.
Accept the fact that the moral meter of this MC is very odd and shifty and he is not the most emotionally strong character which I am hoping would change with the recent things he had to go through(at the end of RWBY arc, I don't want to give spoiler) this fic is amazing, just like the rest of the fics written by him. I am enjoying this and I just hope that you will finish this one.
Dude first of all you should give some kind of intro and atleast basic info about his powers before starting the story. Now the idea is a good one and the MC is not bad either but in trying to make it realistic you are just making him look angsty and emo brood as well sometimes. Though still quite a good read and will be waiting to see which worlds would he travel in the future.
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Very nicely done. Characters don’t immediately jump to have s*x but developes their feelings first. Though I’m slightly miffed that the cat girl is being sidelined but overall it’s very well done.
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It took me a minute to figure out what was going on and i kinda wasnt okay with it. then i clicked on the authors name.... I reconized every fanfic youve written cause i read them all. although there are somethings im not okay with we are different people and its your story. Youve got my support. On a side note. Is it too much to ask you to finish the HP game of thrones fic?
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a read "waifu" in the synopsis and its all i need to know, to know, that its not worth reading first time i had to fill in the required symbols to post.
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the mc was continually nerfed for no reason and then when he got a little power he was nerfed again