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Interesting very interesting this story is quite entertaining but I hope you continue to update soon. I find the story quite a delight so please continue on. I hope you continue to update and prosper in your writing.
Suma Sumarum - Good Novel but with minor hic ups I kinda feel there should be a redo of this novel. Its pretty well written but also incredibly fast paced. 11 chapters and already in hogwarts. 11 chapters and already a kind of "boss" in hogwarts while he is in his first year. Dont get me wrong i like op Main Characters and smart MC's but i also like to follow the road which leads to this point. Small tips: 1. Flesh the people in your story a bit more out 2. More interactions between characters 3. Change the Ages of the MC to a bit older more believeble age (You dont let your Son who is 5 on a world tour to dangerous places even though he is in company of Alestor Moody or whoever, he is also a Heir apparant so the parants wouldnt want him to get killed or kidnapped for a ransom) 4. There is literally no "Awe" from the MCs side of experincing Magic, like come on we flip out when some dude finds a coin behind our ears even in our world, and we kbiw that it is just a trick.
It one of best If not the Best Harry Potter fanfiction. there no stupid love story and the main character Is not nice. And does’t do thing for people Just because they ask he smart and cunning and powerful
i am fine with this Fanfic though?!!! <3<3<3<3<3<3 HEART2 i am fine with this Fanfic though?!!! <3<3<3<3<3<3 HEART2 i am fine with this Fanfic though?!!! <3<3<3<3<3<3 HEART2 i am fine with this Fanfic though?!!! <3<3<3<3<3<3 HEART2 i am fine with this Fanfic though?!!! <3<3<3<3<3<3 HEART2
1- fast pase story nothing wrong with that. 2- writing style no bad but I would love for more details, like how the MC look and dress, it just helps to imagine the plot while I read. 3- the plot main idea is great, the MC made choices that I couldn't guess where the story was going. Nice 👍! as a reader, it keep me on my toes. 4- the little stars is for the last 2 chapters I feel like the MC got too aggressive really quickly, like he just went into a tantrum and got bipolar. 5-I love a good fan- fiction, hope this one doesn't get drop
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This is my honest opinion as an author. I'm a very new writer and will make mistakes, i know that i occasionally misspell words, and forget to go into detail about the MC's surroundings. It's through your thoughts and comments that help me grow!
Great start. Just with minor grammar errors and typos. Developement was a bit rushed but over all a great fanfic. Hope you don’t drop it! 🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉
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Great story. Please don’t drop it. 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
MORE CHAPTERS! This book is Cool and GOOD but i am confused that why did Lucius Malfoy and Narcissa just said yes to him when he said he wants to travel? i mean sure this is ok i guess but please MORE CHAPTERS!
good fic keep going 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍💯👍👍💯💯💯💯💯💯💯
He got permission to travel the world at the age of five years old... What type of parent would even consider allowing their five year old run off to another continent, let alone even take a child's request seriously. The Malfoy's are incredibly rich they could of just as easily hired tutors for him yet they didn't and quite literally just allowed him to venture off into the world even if he did have body guards he is still only FIVE YEARS OLD.
First, Good Job, the start of the story eas not so wonderful but I love how you develop your story from being just a genius to a Experienced one through travelling, I would love to see his journey bug second point, his house, the way you manipulated the scene and chooses hufflepuff for their loyalty and also investing for future follower and Last his goal and execution of it starting from the bottom, befriending the minister, the threat to rita, to speaking with Gandalf with elegance and for showing his stance. Good Job And thank you
please new chapters.....................................................................................................................................
Interesting very interesting this story is quite entertaining but I hope you continue to update soon. I find the story quite a delight so please continue on. I hope you continue to update and prosper in your writing.
Suma Sumarum - Good Novel but with minor hic ups I kinda feel there should be a redo of this novel. Its pretty well written but also incredibly fast paced. 11 chapters and already in hogwarts. 11 chapters and already a kind of "boss" in hogwarts while he is in his first year. Dont get me wrong i like op Main Characters and smart MC's but i also like to follow the road which leads to this point. Small tips: 1. Flesh the people in your story a bit more out 2. More interactions between characters 3. Change the Ages of the MC to a bit older more believeble age (You dont let your Son who is 5 on a world tour to dangerous places even though he is in company of Alestor Moody or whoever, he is also a Heir apparant so the parants wouldnt want him to get killed or kidnapped for a ransom) 4. There is literally no "Awe" from the MCs side of experincing Magic, like come on we flip out when some dude finds a coin behind our ears even in our world, and we kbiw that it is just a trick.
It one of best If not the Best Harry Potter fanfiction. there no stupid love story and the main character Is not nice. And does’t do thing for people Just because they ask he smart and cunning and powerful
i am fine with this Fanfic though?!!! <3<3<3<3<3<3 HEART2 i am fine with this Fanfic though?!!! <3<3<3<3<3<3 HEART2 i am fine with this Fanfic though?!!! <3<3<3<3<3<3 HEART2 i am fine with this Fanfic though?!!! <3<3<3<3<3<3 HEART2 i am fine with this Fanfic though?!!! <3<3<3<3<3<3 HEART2
1- fast pase story nothing wrong with that. 2- writing style no bad but I would love for more details, like how the MC look and dress, it just helps to imagine the plot while I read. 3- the plot main idea is great, the MC made choices that I couldn't guess where the story was going. Nice 👍! as a reader, it keep me on my toes. 4- the little stars is for the last 2 chapters I feel like the MC got too aggressive really quickly, like he just went into a tantrum and got bipolar. 5-I love a good fan- fiction, hope this one doesn't get drop
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Mc goooooood goooooooooooooooood good l see great start 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
This is my honest opinion as an author. I'm a very new writer and will make mistakes, i know that i occasionally misspell words, and forget to go into detail about the MC's surroundings. It's through your thoughts and comments that help me grow!
Great start. Just with minor grammar errors and typos. Developement was a bit rushed but over all a great fanfic. Hope you don’t drop it! 🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉
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Great story. Please don’t drop it. 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
MORE CHAPTERS! This book is Cool and GOOD but i am confused that why did Lucius Malfoy and Narcissa just said yes to him when he said he wants to travel? i mean sure this is ok i guess but please MORE CHAPTERS!
good fic keep going 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍💯👍👍💯💯💯💯💯💯💯
He got permission to travel the world at the age of five years old... What type of parent would even consider allowing their five year old run off to another continent, let alone even take a child's request seriously. The Malfoy's are incredibly rich they could of just as easily hired tutors for him yet they didn't and quite literally just allowed him to venture off into the world even if he did have body guards he is still only FIVE YEARS OLD.
First, Good Job, the start of the story eas not so wonderful but I love how you develop your story from being just a genius to a Experienced one through travelling, I would love to see his journey bug second point, his house, the way you manipulated the scene and chooses hufflepuff for their loyalty and also investing for future follower and Last his goal and execution of it starting from the bottom, befriending the minister, the threat to rita, to speaking with Gandalf with elegance and for showing his stance. Good Job And thank you