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$115,500 for the Best Adventure Novels +Get Hardcover Publish Hey Writers! Come to check out this adventure novel writing competition, both new and published stories can participate! This competition is mainly looking for four genres: Fantasy, Urban, Game, and Sci-fi. You can either submit your published works, rewrite some previous ideas, or create a new story if any given examples or tips inspired you! Web-fiction or Light Novel writing experience is desired, so you might be the winner! For more information, you may visit: https://bit.ly/2ObQnRy or contact Email :Rebecca_661@outlook.com
Thrilling, so bloody thrilling. The way the author described every scene, every event in this book is just mind blowing. The mild fear i get reading this book is quite amazing. I will recommend this book to anyone interested in horror novel.
What a great novel The titles of the chapters are mysterious. Johan character development it is great. Lucifer is a hella good character And the Villagers... Are worse than Feminists combined with Gold Digger genes and have Karen lesbians wives. This a great story with a great development, King/Queen! It gave me some feelings about American Horror Story! Especially the main character!
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I was trying to start reading this story, But I'm not trying to make a pact, so I'm giving up to start reading ... why think with me, if the terms of the agreement are 1-you started reading this story means you are interested in the pact. 2-finished this story counts as a sealed pact, Your soul is mine. Totally giving up to start reading.
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Webnovel may have recremended it but I’ve already read-ed it. (Kinda sing-songy, no? LOL)... Anyways this is a really good book you have here. Keep it up!!
Ever since I read the synopsis I can say that this is indeed a hooking story. You're good with dragging attention. The Spanish setting is also very refreshing to see. It fits well the theme of the story. However, you tend to tell so much and show little in comparison. By reading the first chapter you can already know most of the struggles and motivations of the main character, something bad for a genre that relies on mystery and the unknown. There's also the fact that some of your sentences can become redundant. Sometimes after a dialogue, you put what the dialogue just said. You need to work on your grammar. If you're not an English native speaker you can get a grammar correcting app. Avoid these mistakes, try fixing some of the ones you've already made, and keep working on it. Even with all of this, the story flows goodly and has the hook element that makes you want to keep following it.
This story is quite interesting. I really like thriller and horror genre. And this story has kept my interest. Even though these are the beginning chapters I am already intrigued. Can't wait for the next chapters. Keep up the good work author!!!!
This is amazing, I love the way you write it. I'm not into this stuff but your story is incredible, I am rooting for you, dear author! you worked hard, great job!
The cover of the book is so cute! I'm obsessed with the plot and character. So unique and intricate. It's such a fresh and interesting idea. All I can suggest is make the paragraphs shorter. Overall, it's soooo cool. Please keep writing :)
I like the style of the story quite a lot, it gives a feeling of some classic books. The story is interesting and feels like a proper horror story with the narration.
If you are into horror/thriller, this is definitely the book for you! It is well-written, it brings out the reader's emotion. I, for one, unable to stop feeling sorry and continue to hope for Jonah's happiness and for that, it made me want to read more so well done author!!! 👏🏼👏🏼 you managed to capture your reader's attention! definitely worth it to put in your collection 😍
Okay, I'm impressed for sure, Kind of creep out in a way, but I'm loving the feeling, Love how you describe the scene and you said you aren't a native speaker? Well, I think you did better than some native speakers.
Amazing plot, characters and vocab. It has a really good potential, so the only thing I can tell you is that keep up the good work, because it's fantastic.
The writing quality and stability of updates is very good, I also like the character design and story development, but so far it has only been the story of how a kid is having the worst time of his life. I mean seriously, what did Jonah ever do to you. But as advice from another author, I'd like to tell you that the readers here don't really like to read too much heavy stuff. I understand how good it would feel, when the story actually gets to the point where Jonah gets a moment of peace, but it's a difficulty to get to that point, is what i'm trying to say. Add some hope and humor in it if you can. But, in the end it's your novel and I am curious of the outcome.
To be honest, I am not a fan horror genre exactly but I love the storyline and style. The start of the book has won my heart. I hope you update soon. Can't wait to see this book in my shelf as a bestseller.
I’m a sucky for horror. And I got to say I enjoy your story and how you describe the MC and what he is dealing with because of his appearance. It really keeps a reading hooked amd follow through with his inner turmoil. The problem I have is your grammar. It is not bad and does not throw off the story, but you keep forgetting to add an ending punctuation for some dialogue and forgetting to capitalize the word after the dialogue(only do it if the dialogue doesnt end in a comma). And your paragraphs are long, maybe you should put some spaces between them. Other than that, your story is really good and I enjoyed the chapters you have so far. Keep up the good work!
I loved your novel, the story completely absorbed me, and your character design is incredible, I was amazed since the first chapter, I felt so much empathy for Jonah. I had not read such a genre in a long time and I must say that I did not expect it. I'm already following you and waiting for more of your chapters. I should say that maybe the paragraphs are a little long but definitely enthralling. Please keep up with the good work author! Can't wait to read more chapters. [img=recommend] I guarantee this is totally worth reading.
This is a really good story. I don't know why but I got Caroline(stop motion animated movie) vibes from it. The story is just so well laid out. Am really surprised, writing quality is extremely good! The author is superb at describing the dread that Jonah is going through as well as building up the world around him. The grammar is excellent, minor mistakes In some parts but nothing to stress over. I just got to say this is one of the best horror's & thrillers I've read!! Best novels, I've read PERIOD!! (IDC if that makes me biased lol) Jonah and alma's story is really sad. He seems to bounce from one plight to another and the pacing is well organized. The internalization of the characters is really relatable. None of the characters are flat, the worm guy was the deal breaker for me... so sad Man lucifer!.......uhhh, i feel angry for jonah. its not even his fault Continue on author, you have something amazing here am going to be following to see where this goes!... P.S i shed one tear, while reading this.. it really gets you!
Hi! This is Molly, an editor from other platform. I believe your book has great potential, so I invited you to join in our platform. if you are interested in, Please reply to me. so I can discuss this with you in detail.
Hi! This is Molly, an editor of the international writing contest SWA II. I believe your book has great potential, so I invited you to join in 2 week ago. Please reply to me so I can discuss this with you in detail. This contest is free entry, and we can provide you a $50 advance by joining the contest.
$115,500 for the Best Adventure Novels +Get Hardcover Publish Hey Writers! Come to check out this adventure novel writing competition, both new and published stories can participate! This competition is mainly looking for four genres: Fantasy, Urban, Game, and Sci-fi. You can either submit your published works, rewrite some previous ideas, or create a new story if any given examples or tips inspired you! Web-fiction or Light Novel writing experience is desired, so you might be the winner! For more information, you may visit: https://bit.ly/2ObQnRy or contact Email :Rebecca_661@outlook.com
Thrilling, so bloody thrilling. The way the author described every scene, every event in this book is just mind blowing. The mild fear i get reading this book is quite amazing. I will recommend this book to anyone interested in horror novel.
What a great novel The titles of the chapters are mysterious. Johan character development it is great. Lucifer is a hella good character And the Villagers... Are worse than Feminists combined with Gold Digger genes and have Karen lesbians wives. This a great story with a great development, King/Queen! It gave me some feelings about American Horror Story! Especially the main character!
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I was trying to start reading this story, But I'm not trying to make a pact, so I'm giving up to start reading ... why think with me, if the terms of the agreement are 1-you started reading this story means you are interested in the pact. 2-finished this story counts as a sealed pact, Your soul is mine. Totally giving up to start reading.
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nice story. thank you for sharing. ............................................................................... ........................ .
Webnovel may have recremended it but I’ve already read-ed it. (Kinda sing-songy, no? LOL)... Anyways this is a really good book you have here. Keep it up!!
Ever since I read the synopsis I can say that this is indeed a hooking story. You're good with dragging attention. The Spanish setting is also very refreshing to see. It fits well the theme of the story. However, you tend to tell so much and show little in comparison. By reading the first chapter you can already know most of the struggles and motivations of the main character, something bad for a genre that relies on mystery and the unknown. There's also the fact that some of your sentences can become redundant. Sometimes after a dialogue, you put what the dialogue just said. You need to work on your grammar. If you're not an English native speaker you can get a grammar correcting app. Avoid these mistakes, try fixing some of the ones you've already made, and keep working on it. Even with all of this, the story flows goodly and has the hook element that makes you want to keep following it.
This story is quite interesting. I really like thriller and horror genre. And this story has kept my interest. Even though these are the beginning chapters I am already intrigued. Can't wait for the next chapters. Keep up the good work author!!!!
This is amazing, I love the way you write it. I'm not into this stuff but your story is incredible, I am rooting for you, dear author! you worked hard, great job!
The cover of the book is so cute! I'm obsessed with the plot and character. So unique and intricate. It's such a fresh and interesting idea. All I can suggest is make the paragraphs shorter. Overall, it's soooo cool. Please keep writing :)
I like the style of the story quite a lot, it gives a feeling of some classic books. The story is interesting and feels like a proper horror story with the narration.
If you are into horror/thriller, this is definitely the book for you! It is well-written, it brings out the reader's emotion. I, for one, unable to stop feeling sorry and continue to hope for Jonah's happiness and for that, it made me want to read more so well done author!!! 👏🏼👏🏼 you managed to capture your reader's attention! definitely worth it to put in your collection 😍
Okay, I'm impressed for sure, Kind of creep out in a way, but I'm loving the feeling, Love how you describe the scene and you said you aren't a native speaker? Well, I think you did better than some native speakers.
Amazing plot, characters and vocab. It has a really good potential, so the only thing I can tell you is that keep up the good work, because it's fantastic.
The writing quality and stability of updates is very good, I also like the character design and story development, but so far it has only been the story of how a kid is having the worst time of his life. I mean seriously, what did Jonah ever do to you. But as advice from another author, I'd like to tell you that the readers here don't really like to read too much heavy stuff. I understand how good it would feel, when the story actually gets to the point where Jonah gets a moment of peace, but it's a difficulty to get to that point, is what i'm trying to say. Add some hope and humor in it if you can. But, in the end it's your novel and I am curious of the outcome.
To be honest, I am not a fan horror genre exactly but I love the storyline and style. The start of the book has won my heart. I hope you update soon. Can't wait to see this book in my shelf as a bestseller.
I’m a sucky for horror. And I got to say I enjoy your story and how you describe the MC and what he is dealing with because of his appearance. It really keeps a reading hooked amd follow through with his inner turmoil. The problem I have is your grammar. It is not bad and does not throw off the story, but you keep forgetting to add an ending punctuation for some dialogue and forgetting to capitalize the word after the dialogue(only do it if the dialogue doesnt end in a comma). And your paragraphs are long, maybe you should put some spaces between them. Other than that, your story is really good and I enjoyed the chapters you have so far. Keep up the good work!
I loved your novel, the story completely absorbed me, and your character design is incredible, I was amazed since the first chapter, I felt so much empathy for Jonah. I had not read such a genre in a long time and I must say that I did not expect it. I'm already following you and waiting for more of your chapters. I should say that maybe the paragraphs are a little long but definitely enthralling. Please keep up with the good work author! Can't wait to read more chapters. [img=recommend] I guarantee this is totally worth reading.
This is a really good story. I don't know why but I got Caroline(stop motion animated movie) vibes from it. The story is just so well laid out. Am really surprised, writing quality is extremely good! The author is superb at describing the dread that Jonah is going through as well as building up the world around him. The grammar is excellent, minor mistakes In some parts but nothing to stress over. I just got to say this is one of the best horror's & thrillers I've read!! Best novels, I've read PERIOD!! (IDC if that makes me biased lol) Jonah and alma's story is really sad. He seems to bounce from one plight to another and the pacing is well organized. The internalization of the characters is really relatable. None of the characters are flat, the worm guy was the deal breaker for me... so sad Man lucifer!.......uhhh, i feel angry for jonah. its not even his fault Continue on author, you have something amazing here am going to be following to see where this goes!... P.S i shed one tear, while reading this.. it really gets you!