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Very new to light novels but this really kept me wanting more. And as I said I'm really new so I can't give feedback, but just keep writing Author-san it's an amazing beginning.
You're novel is extremely well written; the writing, the plot, the cute characters, the potential for amazing development, etc. You have the best writing skills I have seen on the platform by far, I love where you are going with the plot, there are lovable characters (Aiden and Rafe esp, very cute future boyfriends jkjk...) and there is potential for the future! I am also eagerly awaiting your return. Hopefully, you haven't dropped... and are just preparing a big surprise for us :))
need more chapters to read so into it right now, haha it was a great idea to have the dog there for there practice.😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃
I AM OBSESSED!!!!!!! I can’t lie I’ve read this book nearly 6 or 7 times I REALLY hope you contine to write more chapters! This book is legendary I love it
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you want to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new works, you might want to contact rebecca.review@outlook.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters, or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
This is one of the best novels I have ever read on this app. Every time I am on the app I find myself wanting to read another chapter or checking to see if it updated. For real though this is very well made and it has great emotion in it.
Absolutely loved it... You got a fan Great story development Unlike other soccor systems, it was great Hope you continue and update regularly
Hopefully you keep writing this, I'm loving it so far and hope to see more team interaction. And I'm also interested to find out what happens when they find out he ran away
I did not yet read the other book of the author so this will be a no bias review. Honestly, I was frustrated at the beginning, mainly the first 10 chapters because of the introverted and weak MC, to tell the truth, I don't like this kind of characters. I want the MC to be cool and badass, but I understand the circumstances of the MC and character development. Author, you really did a great job with the character design of MC and his teammates. Although we are just done with only 20 chapters, I still like that they are well written. My frustration with the character design of MC turned into pure bliss as the chapters progressed from 10 to 22. For me, we can call it a good book if an author can get hold of the reader even if the character design is not the reader's cup of tea. I don't like the weak MC but I still want to read this book and see where this goes. I want to see the end, and I hope the author doesn't drop it. There are very few football novels that are good l, so keep up the good work. Character design is the highlight of the novel(not just MC, even the side characters.) Worldbuilding is good and gives you a good grasp of what's happening around clubs in the USA(mainly for those who are not familiar with clubs in the US). Till now the pacing of the novel is good, not too slow and not too fast. I still can't say anything about the stability of updates as we are just at the start.
It is absolutely amazing. Being a sportsperson myself I know the feeling of strife to be the best among all. I know the pain, carm**, muscle catches, twists, sprains, trembling limbs after training. This novel is really inspiring. It is one of the best I’ve read so far.😍😍😍
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What if a soccer system was also a guardian angel? Plagued by tragedy, abused orphan Aidan Kane only feels safe when he’s on a football pitch. He’s been using his legs to run from harm for years. Equal parts escapism and survival, his work ethic combined with his god-given gifts have him on the cusp of greatness when the unthinkable happens. Cue divine intervention! With a second chance and an ethereal guide, Aidan navigates his way to safety and a shot at making it big. Finding friends and foes, often in unexpected places, our hero will have to overcome the horrors of his past to achieve his goals on the field. But this time, he has someone special watching out for him.
This novel is so good to be true, can't take my eyes in this ****. It feels like heaven to read, I wanna take a **** much. If this novel got some drive, thank God its still alive.
In simple terms is good ...............................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
Seshata is an amazing author~ love their books~ no complaints form me~ and I will happily read more~ 🐱🐱🐱🐱🐱🐱🐱🐱🐱🐱🐱🐱🐱🐱🐱🐱🐱🐱🐱🐱🐱🐱🐱
This is a well thought out, and heart wrenching sports novel with a unique twist. The mc gets a system at the start, but it’s not op, it just allows him to work harder. The story has many emotional bumps, but every negative event resolved in a very satisfying manner.
Simply amazing. The same high quality writing I expect from Seshata, but this time, the story is so real it hurts. I dare anyone to read one chapter of this and be able to stop. By the time you finish chapter three, if you're not one step away from adopting the MC, you're lying to yourself. The characters are so unique, and the emotions are genuine. So far, the soccer is also exciting and well-described, good pacing with action vs description vs moving the scene along. Beautiful.
I seriously need a mass release author please help saving the pitiful boring life of this faithfull reader or else this poor reader will die of boringness
Although this book is still in its infancy stages (only 8 chapters so far) its so absolutely fabulous that I had to give a review. I usually don’t like system novels because I get the feel that the protagonist relies on it too much, losing their individuality and being just another overpowered host to the system, however this systems novel does exactly what systems are supposed to do: support! The system does not feel forced and it’s entire purpose is to bring out the potencial of the host, not turn him into something new. In other words, it provides the host with a good environment and resources for him to develop himself into a better version of himself, something that was unviable because of his toxic family but something that he always strove for and had the chance to become, the best soccer player in the world. What makes this novel a real gem, however, is not the system, but the emotional connotation it has. It’s a blend of pure and untamed sadness with bright hope, determination and just the right amount of normalcy. And it’s not forced at all!!! (This is a big compliment because I can make an enormous list of novels which’s introductions I just skipped through because the sad background was way too forced, like an observer throwing out information of someone’s pitiful situation while just writing lots of words of self pity to try (keyword ‘try’)to put some feeling to the whole forced narration... ignore my rant) Anyway, the important thing is that feelings are not shown through descriptions, but through actions. Readers can understand and sympathize with the way the MC feels and thinks (even when we cannot relate, and I would hope no one could relate with MCs situation, but unfortunately the world isn’t all sunshine and rainbows). The individuality MC is present in all situations, and it can be observed by the simplest things, such as when he describes his school colleagues, they are not ‘tall and blue eyed’ ,they are ‘midfielders, forwards, defenders’. It’s descriptions such as these together with thoughts and actions clearly based on his life experiences and interests that turns the protagonist into more than just a character, he is a person, he’s Aidan. The side characters are also nothing to scoff at, they are not physical appearance and clothes, they have their own personality and individuality. They go about life in their own way and the interactions they make between themselves and the MC are not absurd, they are normal, part of their daily lives. And I don’t say this as a way to imply the author fills the story with fillers (he does not!!), but as a compliment because it’s in daily interactions that our personality shows the most and the author uses this not only as a way to build character development but also as an important part of the story. All has a motive, conversations and thoughts are never useless additions, and it’s clear. The same way, the world development and character background is not built as an info dump, it’s seamlessly integrated with the flow of the story and only when you analyze it will you notice that you already know things you didn’t before, things that maybe weren’t even said, but were clearly understood. I can only say that no matter who you are, if you stumbled upon this gem, it’s your obligation to give it a chance.
This author has done it again! I'm an avid fan of their other works, but this story in particular has a grip that won't let go. From the first sentence, you know you're in for a journey through the darkest and yet, most hopeful sides of humanity; masterfully lacing witty one-liners with devastatingly terrible descriptions. Author provides a new, fresh outlook on the reincarnation trope and an incredible grasp of sports knowledge, that will keep even non-sports folk enthralled with the story. The characters feel real, the ******* is nail-bitingly wicked and you'll find yourself invested with the main character's struggle from the very start. Well done and goooooaaaaaaaaaaal~
I can't wait for the author to pick up the pen to start writing again, in this case, the computer with typing. lol Such a good book, can't wait to read more.
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Very new to light novels but this really kept me wanting more. And as I said I'm really new so I can't give feedback, but just keep writing Author-san it's an amazing beginning.
You're novel is extremely well written; the writing, the plot, the cute characters, the potential for amazing development, etc. You have the best writing skills I have seen on the platform by far, I love where you are going with the plot, there are lovable characters (Aiden and Rafe esp, very cute future boyfriends jkjk...) and there is potential for the future! I am also eagerly awaiting your return. Hopefully, you haven't dropped... and are just preparing a big surprise for us :))
need more chapters to read so into it right now, haha it was a great idea to have the dog there for there practice.😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃
I AM OBSESSED!!!!!!! I can’t lie I’ve read this book nearly 6 or 7 times I REALLY hope you contine to write more chapters! This book is legendary I love it
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you want to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new works, you might want to contact rebecca.review@outlook.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters, or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
This is one of the best novels I have ever read on this app. Every time I am on the app I find myself wanting to read another chapter or checking to see if it updated. For real though this is very well made and it has great emotion in it.
Absolutely loved it... You got a fan Great story development Unlike other soccor systems, it was great Hope you continue and update regularly
Hopefully you keep writing this, I'm loving it so far and hope to see more team interaction. And I'm also interested to find out what happens when they find out he ran away
I did not yet read the other book of the author so this will be a no bias review. Honestly, I was frustrated at the beginning, mainly the first 10 chapters because of the introverted and weak MC, to tell the truth, I don't like this kind of characters. I want the MC to be cool and badass, but I understand the circumstances of the MC and character development. Author, you really did a great job with the character design of MC and his teammates. Although we are just done with only 20 chapters, I still like that they are well written. My frustration with the character design of MC turned into pure bliss as the chapters progressed from 10 to 22. For me, we can call it a good book if an author can get hold of the reader even if the character design is not the reader's cup of tea. I don't like the weak MC but I still want to read this book and see where this goes. I want to see the end, and I hope the author doesn't drop it. There are very few football novels that are good l, so keep up the good work. Character design is the highlight of the novel(not just MC, even the side characters.) Worldbuilding is good and gives you a good grasp of what's happening around clubs in the USA(mainly for those who are not familiar with clubs in the US). Till now the pacing of the novel is good, not too slow and not too fast. I still can't say anything about the stability of updates as we are just at the start.
It is absolutely amazing. Being a sportsperson myself I know the feeling of strife to be the best among all. I know the pain, carm**, muscle catches, twists, sprains, trembling limbs after training. This novel is really inspiring. It is one of the best I’ve read so far.😍😍😍
Wow well wee 😍😎👌😍😎👌👌😍😎👌😍😎👌😍😎👌😍😎👌😍😎👌😍😎👌😍😎👌😍😎👌😍😎👌😍😎👌😍😎👌😍😎👌😍😎👌😍😎👌😍😎👌😍😎👌😍😎👌😍😎👌😍😎👌😍😎👌😍😎👌😍😎👌😍😎👌😍😎👌😍😎👌😍😎👌😍😎👌😍😎👌😍😎👌😍😎👌😍😎👌😍😎👌😍😎👌😍😎👌😍😎👌 bbb be able the first
ネタバレを明かす What if a soccer system was also a guardian angel? Plagued by tragedy, abused orphan Aidan Kane only feels safe when he’s on a football pitch. He’s been using his legs to run from harm for years. Equal parts escapism and survival, his work ethic combined with his god-given gifts have him on the cusp of greatness when the unthinkable happens. Cue divine intervention! With a second chance and an ethereal guide, Aidan navigates his way to safety and a shot at making it big. Finding friends and foes, often in unexpected places, our hero will have to overcome the horrors of his past to achieve his goals on the field. But this time, he has someone special watching out for him.
This novel is so good to be true, can't take my eyes in this ****. It feels like heaven to read, I wanna take a **** much. If this novel got some drive, thank God its still alive.
In simple terms is good ...............................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
Seshata is an amazing author~ love their books~ no complaints form me~ and I will happily read more~ 🐱🐱🐱🐱🐱🐱🐱🐱🐱🐱🐱🐱🐱🐱🐱🐱🐱🐱🐱🐱🐱🐱🐱
This is a well thought out, and heart wrenching sports novel with a unique twist. The mc gets a system at the start, but it’s not op, it just allows him to work harder. The story has many emotional bumps, but every negative event resolved in a very satisfying manner.
Simply amazing. The same high quality writing I expect from Seshata, but this time, the story is so real it hurts. I dare anyone to read one chapter of this and be able to stop. By the time you finish chapter three, if you're not one step away from adopting the MC, you're lying to yourself. The characters are so unique, and the emotions are genuine. So far, the soccer is also exciting and well-described, good pacing with action vs description vs moving the scene along. Beautiful.
I seriously need a mass release author please help saving the pitiful boring life of this faithfull reader or else this poor reader will die of boringness
Although this book is still in its infancy stages (only 8 chapters so far) its so absolutely fabulous that I had to give a review. I usually don’t like system novels because I get the feel that the protagonist relies on it too much, losing their individuality and being just another overpowered host to the system, however this systems novel does exactly what systems are supposed to do: support! The system does not feel forced and it’s entire purpose is to bring out the potencial of the host, not turn him into something new. In other words, it provides the host with a good environment and resources for him to develop himself into a better version of himself, something that was unviable because of his toxic family but something that he always strove for and had the chance to become, the best soccer player in the world. What makes this novel a real gem, however, is not the system, but the emotional connotation it has. It’s a blend of pure and untamed sadness with bright hope, determination and just the right amount of normalcy. And it’s not forced at all!!! (This is a big compliment because I can make an enormous list of novels which’s introductions I just skipped through because the sad background was way too forced, like an observer throwing out information of someone’s pitiful situation while just writing lots of words of self pity to try (keyword ‘try’)to put some feeling to the whole forced narration... ignore my rant) Anyway, the important thing is that feelings are not shown through descriptions, but through actions. Readers can understand and sympathize with the way the MC feels and thinks (even when we cannot relate, and I would hope no one could relate with MCs situation, but unfortunately the world isn’t all sunshine and rainbows). The individuality MC is present in all situations, and it can be observed by the simplest things, such as when he describes his school colleagues, they are not ‘tall and blue eyed’ ,they are ‘midfielders, forwards, defenders’. It’s descriptions such as these together with thoughts and actions clearly based on his life experiences and interests that turns the protagonist into more than just a character, he is a person, he’s Aidan. The side characters are also nothing to scoff at, they are not physical appearance and clothes, they have their own personality and individuality. They go about life in their own way and the interactions they make between themselves and the MC are not absurd, they are normal, part of their daily lives. And I don’t say this as a way to imply the author fills the story with fillers (he does not!!), but as a compliment because it’s in daily interactions that our personality shows the most and the author uses this not only as a way to build character development but also as an important part of the story. All has a motive, conversations and thoughts are never useless additions, and it’s clear. The same way, the world development and character background is not built as an info dump, it’s seamlessly integrated with the flow of the story and only when you analyze it will you notice that you already know things you didn’t before, things that maybe weren’t even said, but were clearly understood. I can only say that no matter who you are, if you stumbled upon this gem, it’s your obligation to give it a chance.
This author has done it again! I'm an avid fan of their other works, but this story in particular has a grip that won't let go. From the first sentence, you know you're in for a journey through the darkest and yet, most hopeful sides of humanity; masterfully lacing witty one-liners with devastatingly terrible descriptions. Author provides a new, fresh outlook on the reincarnation trope and an incredible grasp of sports knowledge, that will keep even non-sports folk enthralled with the story. The characters feel real, the ******* is nail-bitingly wicked and you'll find yourself invested with the main character's struggle from the very start. Well done and goooooaaaaaaaaaaal~
I can't wait for the author to pick up the pen to start writing again, in this case, the computer with typing. lol Such a good book, can't wait to read more.