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Writing quality: grammar is fine, but your punctuation is so horrible that it makes me want to vomit every time I see a sentance that needs a period 2 stars. Stability of updates 2 stars. nuff said. story development. 2 stars. come on dude. she has no power, and yet she badmouths hirashi hyuga and doesnt get any backlash. 3 stars for character design, she makes some sense, but she's depressing af 2 stars to world background, it's not accurate enough.
absolutely love it, wish the author will continue this, all of this author fanfic i love this the most, please dont drop this, i love the comedy, i love the mc ,... please continue 😭😭😭
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really really good. the interactions with every character is pretty much on point I wish this would carry on. I love the cute moments the cool moments especially the parts where I thought "thats what I always thought" when mc finds the easiest solutions that even I wondered why noone thought of them in the anime. the mc is so awesome she grows as a character throughout the whole time and the growth really hits the spot, overall really love this and really wishing for more.
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I love this story,omg tge comedy is good,damnn author i love you, but someday i want to read your original work, i bet it will be awesome too, ..
To be honest the beginning was really cringy since she shared her knowledge that she knows everything from..manga and anime (uuuuuugh), but it was needed since she literally spawned outside the gate without any connections. Aside from the cringe I also did not like how she got allot of OP stuff in the beginning, but then we would also have to go through allot of training chapters to power her up so ?maybe? it was best to skip all of that stuff since allot of power ups in the narutoverse depend on the tailed beasts and kekkei genkai. I did enjoy reading the story, the characters are well defined (I really love how you portrayed interactions between her family, it is just so wholesome.) and the story is ok.
I love your writing it is very well done. Unlike many fanfics I've read with string OC yours actually can beat Zabuza. I enjoy that while you use the canon as a guide you make changes and make it your own. I was tired of all the fanfics that develop their OC as super strong S ranked ninja or whatnot but they never actually effect the plot line so they loose to Zabuza etc. I'm looking forward to how you handle snake pedo.
You are a feminist aren't you? Lesbian one at that. ................................................................................................................................................................................
⊂ヽ ＼＼ Λ＿Λ ＼( ˘ω˘ ) > ⌒ヽ / へ＼ / / ＼＼ ﾚ ノ ヽ_つ / / / /| ( (ヽ | |、＼ | 丿 ＼ ⌒) | | ) / ノ ) Lﾉ (_／ Nice( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)
The first half deals with the MCs inner demons and can be a bit of a struggle to get through cause it hints at darker themes that I for one am thankful never get graphically retold. But then it becomes a fun tale of people becoming strong and family coming together. I dearly hope our beloved author will update as much as she can cause I am just in love with the pairing in this fic.
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I’m not the biggest Naruto fan, but this story is absolutely fantastic in everything it does! The author knows how to tell a great story full of emotion and realistic developments.
I'm only on the first chapter right now, but I've noticed that the sentences in it are all so short that it makes reading it choppy and awkward. It might just be for the first chap, but I hope it gets fixed or something. Ah well, I'll keep reading.
Hello Author. I apologize if the comment has bad or strange grammar. English is not my first language. About your story, it's amazing. I just loved the richness of details and creativity captivated me a lot. It is a very good story. But, forgive me, I won't be able to follow your story anymore. It is not your mistake, but mine. I think my mindset is too weak. I'm feeling bad. I know it is a naive thought. But I don't think I'm ready for the story yet. Excuse me. Your story is great.
Uno de las mejores novelas fannic que he leído, gracias por el contenido y espero que sigas con el proyecto, gracias. .
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i love the concept of story and i really dont have a problem with it but as i was reading the story i found out that i was not enjoing it no offence but i love the concept but this story just doesnot fit me sorry but just telling you by the way
I love this book the main character is decent not to stupid or arrogant. Story progression isn’t to fast or to slow. And the grammar doesn’t give me a headache trying to figure out what the author is trying to say.
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Good story. I ike it 😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁
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this is good and like the character development and the different views. still seems like the writing style is awkward or at least is still not refined yet but none the less still the story is developing fine.
this is a great book but to me its so depressing. not bad mouthing just it fells like it is. .................................................................................................................................................
The story is awesome, pls don’t drop. 👍😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁
This has got to be one of the most well written fanfic. Although there are a few flaws, overall it is superb. The attention you give to expressing the emotions and the details that you added are soo good. Although the MC is a quite depressing it has a certain charm i haven't read in fanfics for a long time. Although the character of the MC makes me feel a little worried about you, from a person who is in existentialism from time to time i feel like i can see where you are coming from. Or maybe not.
So far so good. There is ocasional errors, and the writing can get better. The way the story develops is mostly told through the narrator. How the characters are set up, it doesnt allow for each of them to describe what they are feeling to eachother, but as more chapters come out, the quality has increased.
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Love the book well all of them. The writing style is well done it’s more of a romance novel than adventure while it still keeps the adventure in it and doesn’t go down down a weird path like the curse heroine.
Its good so please continue!......................................................................... ......................................
Writing quality: grammar is fine, but your punctuation is so horrible that it makes me want to vomit every time I see a sentance that needs a period 2 stars. Stability of updates 2 stars. nuff said. story development. 2 stars. come on dude. she has no power, and yet she badmouths hirashi hyuga and doesnt get any backlash. 3 stars for character design, she makes some sense, but she's depressing af 2 stars to world background, it's not accurate enough.
absolutely love it, wish the author will continue this, all of this author fanfic i love this the most, please dont drop this, i love the comedy, i love the mc ,... please continue 😭😭😭
ネタバレを明かす ************* Good Worka! ************** ****************************************** *************And I need more! *********** ******************************************
really really good. the interactions with every character is pretty much on point I wish this would carry on. I love the cute moments the cool moments especially the parts where I thought "thats what I always thought" when mc finds the easiest solutions that even I wondered why noone thought of them in the anime. the mc is so awesome she grows as a character throughout the whole time and the growth really hits the spot, overall really love this and really wishing for more.
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I love this story,omg tge comedy is good,damnn author i love you, but someday i want to read your original work, i bet it will be awesome too, ..
To be honest the beginning was really cringy since she shared her knowledge that she knows everything from..manga and anime (uuuuuugh), but it was needed since she literally spawned outside the gate without any connections. Aside from the cringe I also did not like how she got allot of OP stuff in the beginning, but then we would also have to go through allot of training chapters to power her up so ?maybe? it was best to skip all of that stuff since allot of power ups in the narutoverse depend on the tailed beasts and kekkei genkai. I did enjoy reading the story, the characters are well defined (I really love how you portrayed interactions between her family, it is just so wholesome.) and the story is ok.
I love your writing it is very well done. Unlike many fanfics I've read with string OC yours actually can beat Zabuza. I enjoy that while you use the canon as a guide you make changes and make it your own. I was tired of all the fanfics that develop their OC as super strong S ranked ninja or whatnot but they never actually effect the plot line so they loose to Zabuza etc. I'm looking forward to how you handle snake pedo.
You are a feminist aren't you? Lesbian one at that. ................................................................................................................................................................................
⊂ヽ ＼＼ Λ＿Λ ＼( ˘ω˘ ) > ⌒ヽ / へ＼ / / ＼＼ ﾚ ノ ヽ_つ / / / /| ( (ヽ | |、＼ | 丿 ＼ ⌒) | | ) / ノ ) Lﾉ (_／ Nice( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)
The first half deals with the MCs inner demons and can be a bit of a struggle to get through cause it hints at darker themes that I for one am thankful never get graphically retold. But then it becomes a fun tale of people becoming strong and family coming together. I dearly hope our beloved author will update as much as she can cause I am just in love with the pairing in this fic.
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I’m not the biggest Naruto fan, but this story is absolutely fantastic in everything it does! The author knows how to tell a great story full of emotion and realistic developments.
I'm only on the first chapter right now, but I've noticed that the sentences in it are all so short that it makes reading it choppy and awkward. It might just be for the first chap, but I hope it gets fixed or something. Ah well, I'll keep reading.
Hello Author. I apologize if the comment has bad or strange grammar. English is not my first language. About your story, it's amazing. I just loved the richness of details and creativity captivated me a lot. It is a very good story. But, forgive me, I won't be able to follow your story anymore. It is not your mistake, but mine. I think my mindset is too weak. I'm feeling bad. I know it is a naive thought. But I don't think I'm ready for the story yet. Excuse me. Your story is great.
Uno de las mejores novelas fannic que he leído, gracias por el contenido y espero que sigas con el proyecto, gracias. .
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ネタバレを明かす i love the concept of story and i really dont have a problem with it but as i was reading the story i found out that i was not enjoing it no offence but i love the concept but this story just doesnot fit me sorry but just telling you by the way
I love this book the main character is decent not to stupid or arrogant. Story progression isn’t to fast or to slow. And the grammar doesn’t give me a headache trying to figure out what the author is trying to say.
ネタバレを明かす Good story. I ike it 😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁
Очень крутая история!супер продолжай писать хочуууууууууууууууууу продууууууууууууууууууууууууууууууууууу продууууууууууууууууууууууууууууууууууу хочуууууууууууууууууууууу!
this is good and like the character development and the different views. still seems like the writing style is awkward or at least is still not refined yet but none the less still the story is developing fine.
this is a great book but to me its so depressing. not bad mouthing just it fells like it is. .................................................................................................................................................
The story is awesome, pls don’t drop. 👍😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁
This has got to be one of the most well written fanfic. Although there are a few flaws, overall it is superb. The attention you give to expressing the emotions and the details that you added are soo good. Although the MC is a quite depressing it has a certain charm i haven't read in fanfics for a long time. Although the character of the MC makes me feel a little worried about you, from a person who is in existentialism from time to time i feel like i can see where you are coming from. Or maybe not.
So far so good. There is ocasional errors, and the writing can get better. The way the story develops is mostly told through the narrator. How the characters are set up, it doesnt allow for each of them to describe what they are feeling to eachother, but as more chapters come out, the quality has increased.
......(\_/) ......( '_') ..../""""""""""""\======░ ▒▓▓█D /"""""""""""""""""""\ \_@_@_@_@_@_/ _______________________ _$$$$$$$___ _______ ________________________$$$$$$$$$$_______ _ ________________________$$$$$$$$$$$_______ _________________________$$$$$$$$$$$$$$___ __________________________$$$$$$$$$$$_____ _____________________________$$$$$$$$$ ...$$$$ ___________________________$$$$$$$$$$_____ __________________________$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$__ ________________$$$______$$$$$$$$$$$$$$___ ______________$$$$$$$$_____$$$$$$__$$$$$__ _____________$$$$$$$$$$_____$$$$____$$$$$_ ___________$$$$$$_$$$$$$$$__$$$$______$$$$ __________$$$$$_____$$$$$$$$_$$$$_______$$$ ___ _____$$$$$_________$$$$$$$$$$$$_______$$$ _______ $$$_____________$$$$$$$$$$$________$$$ _____ $$$__ ______________$$$$$$$$$$________$$$$$$ __$$$$$$__________________$$$$$$$_________
Love the book well all of them. The writing style is well done it’s more of a romance novel than adventure while it still keeps the adventure in it and doesn’t go down down a weird path like the curse heroine.
Its good so please continue!......................................................................... ......................................