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What an interesting Idea but it is ruined by absolute horrendous grammar. Also the further into the story you get, the more its draged out.
the book has a good story, the world background too is wonderful from a neighborhood to a wider galaxy, the characters too had their time on paper but it seems or feels like the author wrote a rough note, read through it and started plugging gaps in thr story while writing doen more ideas, but the author forgot to restructure the words l, sentences and paragraphs leading to repetitions and or using many words to make an explanation. example from the top of my head to explain ( not in the book), mc is a boy that whats to be low key and he goes from school to the house without stopping anywhere, so when the big boys stopped him on the way he beat them till they could not move. this is because mc has been learning martial art from a martial art ckass, he does not go to the class on his way from school to the house but goes there after getting home, he has been going their for a long time but spends a short time there and with that training he was able to beat the big boys. mc was not a full expert so he was injured because he did not have the full time to learn to fight so after he has bitten the boys till they a on the ground, he worked home limping. ^this is how some of the story feels like, all this if restructured or reconstructed could go better like this, mc was a quiet boy who lives a quiet life, he does not have much social life except his martial arts class which he attends after getting home from school, the little time he has for the class is what he used to survive the engagement with the big boys and despite him winning he came out of it with some injuries but was able to limp home.^ how is that for a restructuringif the author reconstruct the words i think it will shot up.
Why it has too low readers I mean c'mon it is a best noval about business and war and I did not seen a noval soo much good.
really like it it has such good world building and it's not as complicated as I expected it's quite fun to and the whole story is free what else can you want from a free story it's just a bit sad that the author hasn't updated since 8+ months and it's unlikely he ever will still the story so far is really I recommend you to try it you'll not regret it(✷‿✷)(ʘᴗʘ✿)(◕ᴗ◕✿)
For Me the Flow of The Story is too Fast..... so this is for me for now.. sorry for the grammar english is not my language..
I am never a fan of stories with unfair system advantages owned by only the MC which he then uses it to overpower everything. But somehow, this story manage to strike the right balance. There were some overpowered moments, but the opponents isn't excessively filled with the usual cliche tropes usually found in traditional system/xanxia stories. As the story expands, the system is used less and less, which is a nice change. It was a pleasant surprise to find that as the story develops, the characters develops an independence from the system (or they try to and succeeded in a way). They try ways to develop technologies that builds on what the system provides as opposed to having the system spoon feed them everything. In my opinion this gives the story more depth and weight. My only critique is the writing quality. There are erroneous spelling errors, punctuations, and grammatical mistakes that sometimes ruin the reading experience. The sentence structure and prose could be better as some sentences requires multiple rereads to understand what it's trying to convey. Tenses are all over the place and sometimes character switches gender (lol), referred to he, then she, then back to he. The quality got somewhat better after he got an editor, but a lot of errors still persist throughout the later chapters. Don't let the writing quality push you away from the story though. The story is still better written and have decent foreshadows than 90% of the top stories here on this platform. It is truly a hidden gem on WN. Give it a go. It delivers on what it promises. Could use more kingdom building, but that's just me being a sucker for a good sci-fi kingdom building. Cheers!
good book. . good book . . . , ,, , ,, , ,, , , , , , , , , , , , , , ,, ,, , ,,,,
This is one of my favorite novel. I really love the world, and the MC is good too. If you haven't read it yet, then read it! I recommend it
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OK so the novel itself it pretty good the character development it good and the character nearby the main it amazing too but it update kinda slow so it a drawback.
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Great story, good detail, fine character development. There is a small problem with grammar but it's better than a lot of novels. I recommend reading it as it doesn't have enough recognition.
It's really good!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I like the story and I do believe the characters are great, however the awful grammar just takes so much away from it, the first few chapters seem to have been edited and fixed by "God of Mortals" editor, but the chapters without the editor are near unreadable. Fragments and run-on sentences together with seemingly unfinished thoughts destroy the story, especially the dialogues.
Love everything about the book , But the main problem falls to the stability of the chapter updates. It is just too slow and non consistent. Another thing that I hope to happen soon is that I want the M.C to come back his home univers it's not a bad thing that I am docking off points for it is just something that I hope to happen sooner rather than later. love the book tho Sorry if the review is bad its my first one.
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I'll be honest here... the plot of this story is awesome and i loved it but the main problem lays within the MC. He is just toooo stupid and a generic beta male. That made me drop this novel pretty quick.
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Heck yeah this story is one of a kind , bro totally hooked add more chapters please write more , there is no other book like this the pace of the story is also quite good and make ARC ENTER BACK TO THE BRIGHT GALAXY IN THE MIDDLE OF THE BATTLE LIKE AN OP BOSS AND THEN HE SHOULD SUMMON EVERY ONE HE HAS TO FIGHT THE GANESH
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You have good story but need to rework. I have read story 100 or chapters does not have Mc and on top You have thing that are unnecessary .
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Really great story, something different from your normal System novel which is something good. Author did an amazing job here. Only kind of downside is that the updates are only a few :(. Except from that absolutely amazing work.
Im only 50 chapters in but im enjoying the story, I just wish the past and present tenses Were used correctly it would make it so much better When reading.
I really don't understand how it only has 4.3 stars and so less viewers I . mean this is the best novel I have seen in a while, for people who think it's about business war and blah blah blah, it's not. it's about a guy named arc grand who works as a labor due to his parents being in coma nad he has to take care of his sisters one day after returning he gets a factory system and he builds his empire, and people it's a very simple novel with really limited fight and blah blah, the only thing the mission are like 10 chaps I bet u can adjust, I truly recommend , it's a hidden gem.
What an interesting Idea but it is ruined by absolute horrendous grammar. Also the further into the story you get, the more its draged out.
the book has a good story, the world background too is wonderful from a neighborhood to a wider galaxy, the characters too had their time on paper but it seems or feels like the author wrote a rough note, read through it and started plugging gaps in thr story while writing doen more ideas, but the author forgot to restructure the words l, sentences and paragraphs leading to repetitions and or using many words to make an explanation. example from the top of my head to explain ( not in the book), mc is a boy that whats to be low key and he goes from school to the house without stopping anywhere, so when the big boys stopped him on the way he beat them till they could not move. this is because mc has been learning martial art from a martial art ckass, he does not go to the class on his way from school to the house but goes there after getting home, he has been going their for a long time but spends a short time there and with that training he was able to beat the big boys. mc was not a full expert so he was injured because he did not have the full time to learn to fight so after he has bitten the boys till they a on the ground, he worked home limping. ^this is how some of the story feels like, all this if restructured or reconstructed could go better like this, mc was a quiet boy who lives a quiet life, he does not have much social life except his martial arts class which he attends after getting home from school, the little time he has for the class is what he used to survive the engagement with the big boys and despite him winning he came out of it with some injuries but was able to limp home.^ how is that for a restructuringif the author reconstruct the words i think it will shot up.
Why it has too low readers I mean c'mon it is a best noval about business and war and I did not seen a noval soo much good.
really like it it has such good world building and it's not as complicated as I expected it's quite fun to and the whole story is free what else can you want from a free story it's just a bit sad that the author hasn't updated since 8+ months and it's unlikely he ever will still the story so far is really I recommend you to try it you'll not regret it(✷‿✷)(ʘᴗʘ✿)(◕ᴗ◕✿)
For Me the Flow of The Story is too Fast..... so this is for me for now.. sorry for the grammar english is not my language..
I am never a fan of stories with unfair system advantages owned by only the MC which he then uses it to overpower everything. But somehow, this story manage to strike the right balance. There were some overpowered moments, but the opponents isn't excessively filled with the usual cliche tropes usually found in traditional system/xanxia stories. As the story expands, the system is used less and less, which is a nice change. It was a pleasant surprise to find that as the story develops, the characters develops an independence from the system (or they try to and succeeded in a way). They try ways to develop technologies that builds on what the system provides as opposed to having the system spoon feed them everything. In my opinion this gives the story more depth and weight. My only critique is the writing quality. There are erroneous spelling errors, punctuations, and grammatical mistakes that sometimes ruin the reading experience. The sentence structure and prose could be better as some sentences requires multiple rereads to understand what it's trying to convey. Tenses are all over the place and sometimes character switches gender (lol), referred to he, then she, then back to he. The quality got somewhat better after he got an editor, but a lot of errors still persist throughout the later chapters. Don't let the writing quality push you away from the story though. The story is still better written and have decent foreshadows than 90% of the top stories here on this platform. It is truly a hidden gem on WN. Give it a go. It delivers on what it promises. Could use more kingdom building, but that's just me being a sucker for a good sci-fi kingdom building. Cheers!
good book. . good book . . . , ,, , ,, , ,, , , , , , , , , , , , , , ,, ,, , ,,,,
This is one of my favorite novel. I really love the world, and the MC is good too. If you haven't read it yet, then read it! I recommend it
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OK so the novel itself it pretty good the character development it good and the character nearby the main it amazing too but it update kinda slow so it a drawback.
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ネタバレを明かす Great story, good detail, fine character development. There is a small problem with grammar but it's better than a lot of novels. I recommend reading it as it doesn't have enough recognition.
It's really good!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I like the story and I do believe the characters are great, however the awful grammar just takes so much away from it, the first few chapters seem to have been edited and fixed by "God of Mortals" editor, but the chapters without the editor are near unreadable. Fragments and run-on sentences together with seemingly unfinished thoughts destroy the story, especially the dialogues.
Love everything about the book , But the main problem falls to the stability of the chapter updates. It is just too slow and non consistent. Another thing that I hope to happen soon is that I want the M.C to come back his home univers it's not a bad thing that I am docking off points for it is just something that I hope to happen sooner rather than later. love the book tho Sorry if the review is bad its my first one.
ネタバレを明かす I'll be honest here... the plot of this story is awesome and i loved it but the main problem lays within the MC. He is just toooo stupid and a generic beta male. That made me drop this novel pretty quick.
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Heck yeah this story is one of a kind , bro totally hooked add more chapters please write more , there is no other book like this the pace of the story is also quite good and make ARC ENTER BACK TO THE BRIGHT GALAXY IN THE MIDDLE OF THE BATTLE LIKE AN OP BOSS AND THEN HE SHOULD SUMMON EVERY ONE HE HAS TO FIGHT THE GANESH
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You have good story but need to rework. I have read story 100 or chapters does not have Mc and on top You have thing that are unnecessary .
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Really great story, something different from your normal System novel which is something good. Author did an amazing job here. Only kind of downside is that the updates are only a few :(. Except from that absolutely amazing work.
Im only 50 chapters in but im enjoying the story, I just wish the past and present tenses Were used correctly it would make it so much better When reading.
I really don't understand how it only has 4.3 stars and so less viewers I . mean this is the best novel I have seen in a while, for people who think it's about business war and blah blah blah, it's not. it's about a guy named arc grand who works as a labor due to his parents being in coma nad he has to take care of his sisters one day after returning he gets a factory system and he builds his empire, and people it's a very simple novel with really limited fight and blah blah, the only thing the mission are like 10 chaps I bet u can adjust, I truly recommend , it's a hidden gem.