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I liked it very much. It's a pity that it's abandoned. and the main question after reading - where is the stark?)......................................
it's a pity that you have not update this book again...cuz I this has a lot of potential and you can add more of your own ark after cap was announce dead....maybe he could teach Peggy magic and become immortal
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*cries deeply in a weaboo voice* "Please... Why no updates??" *cries suddenly turn into gurgles as the poor societal leech drowns in a river of her own tears*
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**in a shady web alley** "You! Hey you! Yeah you, author man. C'mere... You want spirit stones, I got premium spirit stones, I can hook you up.. but first I'm gonna need something from you." *Glances both ways and whispers* "Chapters."
bro please do not drop this ive had enough most of you authors have a very good story and the reader can tell its going somewhere good but suddenly without even giving us a logical reason you either delete it or it gets dropped so please dont be like them this novel is very good so please frequent updates or at least tell us why your leaving it
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The grammar is horrible makes the reading almost impossible in my opinion, if it was fixed it MIGHT be a decent story. His ability allows him to become way to overpowered way too fast, the story itself moves way too fast. All in all just skim through it fast because you won't miss anything too important.
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Really great idea to start out with him being in WW2 not many MCU fanfics do that. Ps. And I love how you made Peggy the love interest I have not seen a marvel fanfic do that
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Primeiramente, peço desculpas por dar feedback antes de ler, mas deixe eu te dizer, a sinopse está perfeita! Por isso, já vou deixando minha mais alta avaliação. Caso eu se decepcione com a história, venho aqui tirar minha nota máxima.
Ayo lanjutkan thor jangan hentikan novel ini..novel ini sangat bagus dari alur cerita dan karakternya sangat luar biasa .......ayo min lanjutkan jgn berhenti
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Dont waste your time with this one, updates are 1 chapter per tow week sometimes one per month, authore is unrelaiable and got some nasty attitude with readers, 1/5 hopeless novel
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So far I really like the authors knowledge and how he thinks about the future effects and how the MC changes his actions in accordance with this. I like the idea of the system even though I think the limitations should be more obvious to the MC in some way. If your a fan of plot following author (so far) with good knowledge I would give this one a read. The only downside for me is I can't really see his character I'm not asking for him to turn into a guy who walks around wearing flashy colours, just someone who is more distinctive and I could look at a decision and go yes he would do this or no he would do that. Some kind of backstory or character development isn't necessary because we need a character to begin with.
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First I set 5 stars, now 3. And here's why: in chapter 30, the author ruined the story. I had great expectations for this story. I was hoping that the MC would keep his strength in the circle from everyone, build up strength with his sister, without attracting attention. But instead, the MC did something stupid by showing his abilities to the military. The author, why repeat the story by analogy with "I'm in Marvel"? We already have a story where the MC behaves like a hero of humanity saving everyone around. Me and I think many others hoped to see another development of events in your story ... I'm sorry, but I think that I will give up reading this story ...
The Novels is slow pace but good. It has shown how the MC slowly develops his strength and character. Even with the future knowledge he doesn't continuously pursue strength but also tries to get experience which normally people don't do.
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The idea's good but the story pales when it comes to execution. The chapter's are small and the grammar needs an overhaul. There are a lot of O.C.s (Original Characters) and characters lack depth. I recommend the author to scrap this version of the story, then get a beta reader or editor and post it as a brand new fanfiction. Increase of word length and complexity along with a steady update schedule is the key to attracting more readers while keeping the existing reader base hungry for more. Till then, I'm going to stop reading this fanfiction. I hope that the author will consider my views. Yours sincerely, BasiliskFang.
This good fan fic go die you critism but not make fan fic them self if they can critism so the can make fan fic better why only critism if they can't make novel them self😑
I think story is pretty good !! at least dont drop before 100 chapters ! i will give your story 9/10 and it is one of the best marvel fanfic on web novel
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Please more?…...…..….…............................................................ Die 140 char............. Dieee.......... Dieeee......................................... Dieeeeee
I just binged this story today and I love it. The beginning I was uncertain about it, but it really took off in a great way! The grammar is a little rough, but in my opinion not enough to make it difficult to read. Thanks author for sharing this story and I hope you don’t drop the novel!
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I liked it very much. It's a pity that it's abandoned. and the main question after reading - where is the stark?)......................................
it's a pity that you have not update this book again...cuz I this has a lot of potential and you can add more of your own ark after cap was announce dead....maybe he could teach Peggy magic and become immortal
Continue it please. I love it. ……………………………||||||||||||||||||||€€_€_£€€_×+××_^_^+^_^_^_^_€+€+€+€€€€+€+€+€€+€+€€€€¿£\€+<+€+€+€´+€€€´€´×+±+´€+€+€€+€+€+€+€
*cries deeply in a weaboo voice* "Please... Why no updates??" *cries suddenly turn into gurgles as the poor societal leech drowns in a river of her own tears*
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**in a shady web alley** "You! Hey you! Yeah you, author man. C'mere... You want spirit stones, I got premium spirit stones, I can hook you up.. but first I'm gonna need something from you." *Glances both ways and whispers* "Chapters."
bro please do not drop this ive had enough most of you authors have a very good story and the reader can tell its going somewhere good but suddenly without even giving us a logical reason you either delete it or it gets dropped so please dont be like them this novel is very good so please frequent updates or at least tell us why your leaving it
Good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good.
.................................. .................................. .................................. .................................. It is in my library, recommended
The grammar is horrible makes the reading almost impossible in my opinion, if it was fixed it MIGHT be a decent story. His ability allows him to become way to overpowered way too fast, the story itself moves way too fast. All in all just skim through it fast because you won't miss anything too important.
❤️👍👌💕💕👌👏👍❤️😊❤️👏👌💕👏❤️👍👌👌💕💕👌👍👍❤️❤️👍👌💕💕💕👏👍👍❤️❤️👏👌👌👌👍👍❤️👏👌👌💕💕❤️❤️❤️👏👌💕💕😊👌👌👌👍❤️👏👌💕👌👍❤️💕👏❤️👌💕👏💕👌👍💕💕💕👌❤️👍💕💕👌❤️👍💕💕👌❤️
Really great idea to start out with him being in WW2 not many MCU fanfics do that. Ps. And I love how you made Peggy the love interest I have not seen a marvel fanfic do that
ネタバレを明かす Primeiramente, peço desculpas por dar feedback antes de ler, mas deixe eu te dizer, a sinopse está perfeita! Por isso, já vou deixando minha mais alta avaliação. Caso eu se decepcione com a história, venho aqui tirar minha nota máxima.
Ayo lanjutkan thor jangan hentikan novel ini..novel ini sangat bagus dari alur cerita dan karakternya sangat luar biasa .......ayo min lanjutkan jgn berhenti
ネタバレを明かす Dont waste your time with this one, updates are 1 chapter per tow week sometimes one per month, authore is unrelaiable and got some nasty attitude with readers, 1/5 hopeless novel
Fun novel!!!!!!Fun novel!!!!!!Fun novel!!!!!!Fun novel!!!!!!Fun novel!!!!!!Fun novel!!!!!!Fun novel!!!!!!Fun novel!!!!!!Fun novel!!!!!!Fun novel!!!!!!Fun novel!!!!!!Fun novel!!!!!!Fun novel!!!!!!Fun novel!!!!!!
So far I really like the authors knowledge and how he thinks about the future effects and how the MC changes his actions in accordance with this. I like the idea of the system even though I think the limitations should be more obvious to the MC in some way. If your a fan of plot following author (so far) with good knowledge I would give this one a read. The only downside for me is I can't really see his character I'm not asking for him to turn into a guy who walks around wearing flashy colours, just someone who is more distinctive and I could look at a decision and go yes he would do this or no he would do that. Some kind of backstory or character development isn't necessary because we need a character to begin with.
the story is so goodddddddd.sssss s ssssssssssss ssssssssssss ssssssssssssss ssssssssssssss ssssssssssssss ssssssssssss sssssssssss .... please dont dropped it...
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ネタバレを明かす First I set 5 stars, now 3. And here's why: in chapter 30, the author ruined the story. I had great expectations for this story. I was hoping that the MC would keep his strength in the circle from everyone, build up strength with his sister, without attracting attention. But instead, the MC did something stupid by showing his abilities to the military. The author, why repeat the story by analogy with "I'm in Marvel"? We already have a story where the MC behaves like a hero of humanity saving everyone around. Me and I think many others hoped to see another development of events in your story ... I'm sorry, but I think that I will give up reading this story ...
The Novels is slow pace but good. It has shown how the MC slowly develops his strength and character. Even with the future knowledge he doesn't continuously pursue strength but also tries to get experience which normally people don't do.
dont drop it contienu doing greit work :)) good luck good luck good luck good luck good luck good luck good luck good luck good luck good luck good luck good luck good luck good luck good luck good luck good luck good luck good luck good luck good luck good luck good luck good luck good luck good luck good luck good luck good luck good luck good luck good luck good luck good luck good luck good luck good luck good luck good luck good luck good luck
ネタバレを明かす The idea's good but the story pales when it comes to execution. The chapter's are small and the grammar needs an overhaul. There are a lot of O.C.s (Original Characters) and characters lack depth. I recommend the author to scrap this version of the story, then get a beta reader or editor and post it as a brand new fanfiction. Increase of word length and complexity along with a steady update schedule is the key to attracting more readers while keeping the existing reader base hungry for more. Till then, I'm going to stop reading this fanfiction. I hope that the author will consider my views. Yours sincerely, BasiliskFang.
This good fan fic go die you critism but not make fan fic them self if they can critism so the can make fan fic better why only critism if they can't make novel them self😑
I think story is pretty good !! at least dont drop before 100 chapters ! i will give your story 9/10 and it is one of the best marvel fanfic on web novel
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Please more?…...…..….…............................................................ Die 140 char............. Dieee.......... Dieeee......................................... Dieeeeee
I just binged this story today and I love it. The beginning I was uncertain about it, but it really took off in a great way! The grammar is a little rough, but in my opinion not enough to make it difficult to read. Thanks author for sharing this story and I hope you don’t drop the novel!
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