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My cup of tea. Waiting for you to come back and continue writing. Hope you get over your writer's block. ❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
The beginning is similar to the quote of Laozi - the road to a thousand Lee, begins with one step. Or, as the Americans say - the road, overpowering, walking. Catching the vines - for some reason, I remembered the image of Tarzan)) In Milarka what eyes? Blue? For some reason, the main character, paid attention to the color of the eyes, and the color of the younger brother are ignored? What does an eye mean? Strength, dexterity, presence or absence of magic? Apparently there is potential ... The author of success, when there will be more chapters, the author does not forget to send an announcement, then there will be comments respectfully
Right. Not that many mistakes, and I can see you are editing stuff. This is good, but I still suggest that you pay attention to word "seems". You used it a lot in the beginning chapters. As for the story? Yea I assume he is or will be OP. Not that I would give you bad review due to that, but it is overused. Especially the system stuff. I personally would prefer if he fared for himself without that system. Now he will have everything handed to him. Story has potential, if the author makes it unique. Besides that, yea give it a try if you are into system stuff.
I am the only one who came for the cover image of Sun Wukong of Warrior Orochi 2? XD. Fuck, this brings me such fond memories of my childhood playing it on Play 2 :'3.
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Nicely done I say so my self keep up the good work. I'm just hoping for a faster update. 😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁
Shameless 5-star review here. ~Author here~ Hello everyone, I welcome you all to the world I've built. Forgive me if there's any mistakes I've made as I'm writing this mobile( it's so hard doing it mobile) and with the help of Grammarly keyboard. Writing quality is a bit bad as I'm not an English native (at least I'm quite good in it). Pls rate, review, and comment if you like this novel 😍
The school resemblance is great, but the writing quality needs a bit more of a push. The descriptions are quite a lot, sometimes you don't have be to specific. Don't tell, show applies here. Overall hoping to see more.
Hey Webnovelist! Good day for writing! If you want to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new works, you might want to email rebecca.review@outlook.com. We are mainly looking for adventure novels (Fantasy, Sci-fi, Paranormal Urban, Action, Thriller/Suspense, Game). A brief introduction, along with a few samples or links, will be appreciated when reaching out. You might be our next top writer!
My cup of tea. Waiting for you to come back and continue writing. Hope you get over your writer's block. ❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
The beginning is similar to the quote of Laozi - the road to a thousand Lee, begins with one step. Or, as the Americans say - the road, overpowering, walking. Catching the vines - for some reason, I remembered the image of Tarzan)) In Milarka what eyes? Blue? For some reason, the main character, paid attention to the color of the eyes, and the color of the younger brother are ignored? What does an eye mean? Strength, dexterity, presence or absence of magic? Apparently there is potential ... The author of success, when there will be more chapters, the author does not forget to send an announcement, then there will be comments respectfully
Right. Not that many mistakes, and I can see you are editing stuff. This is good, but I still suggest that you pay attention to word "seems". You used it a lot in the beginning chapters. As for the story? Yea I assume he is or will be OP. Not that I would give you bad review due to that, but it is overused. Especially the system stuff. I personally would prefer if he fared for himself without that system. Now he will have everything handed to him. Story has potential, if the author makes it unique. Besides that, yea give it a try if you are into system stuff.
I am the only one who came for the cover image of Sun Wukong of Warrior Orochi 2? XD. Fuck, this brings me such fond memories of my childhood playing it on Play 2 :'3.
ネタバレを明かす Nicely done I say so my self keep up the good work. I'm just hoping for a faster update. 😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁
Shameless 5-star review here. ~Author here~ Hello everyone, I welcome you all to the world I've built. Forgive me if there's any mistakes I've made as I'm writing this mobile( it's so hard doing it mobile) and with the help of Grammarly keyboard. Writing quality is a bit bad as I'm not an English native (at least I'm quite good in it). Pls rate, review, and comment if you like this novel 😍
The school resemblance is great, but the writing quality needs a bit more of a push. The descriptions are quite a lot, sometimes you don't have be to specific. Don't tell, show applies here. Overall hoping to see more.
Hey Webnovelist! Good day for writing! If you want to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new works, you might want to email rebecca.review@outlook.com. We are mainly looking for adventure novels (Fantasy, Sci-fi, Paranormal Urban, Action, Thriller/Suspense, Game). A brief introduction, along with a few samples or links, will be appreciated when reaching out. You might be our next top writer!