Story of a time traveler

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Rose2426

By far... This is the best original sci-fi novel I've read on this app The author's creativity combined with his/her knowledge of some *actual* physics (yes ACTUAL) has made this a fine piece of art. The visual effect could be improved The world, the characters, the storyline.... Muaahhhh LOVE IT!!

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Scarlettbunny

It is a very well put presentation of Stephen Hawking's work, then mixing in an smart FL with a potential ML already announced at the beginning with a bitter sweet back story. The only real issue I have (only based to the end of chapter 5) is that you had the balls to actually tell you reader to skip 2-3 paragraphs because of the detail of scientific discovery. No, that is not okay! You are writing a sci-fi! If any f***er is going to complain about too much scientific detail on a novel then they should go perform a physics experiment with the mass of their body! Right on to the good stuff. Grammar: Your first chapter was beyond expectation but the further you go in the more mistakes you find and unfortunately that plays a huge part in breaking up the flow of the story. Go back have a read, in particular the part where Ryme leaves the pizza shop. Characters: Well they got personalities! each one is different and you can tell them apart from the dialogue but as for actual looks? No idea, it's lacking in that department. As for the dialogue, it seems rushed and not all that put together. I would have loved to see where Ryme shows up to the meeting early expanded. Go wild, you are the painter takes us to where you want us to be with your words. World: I find one of the hardest things to ever do. To be able to keep up with what everything looks like and the dialogue and what people look like and how others feel. Is a little overwhelming but completely necessary in any good read. You want to be taken to the same room, see the same people be able to look at the landscape and believe you are there. Unfortunately just saying New York won't cut it that much all I see is skyscrapers. Give it a little more effort, you have the skill to describe complicated theories with examples so there should be no reason you can't put that same effort into writing everything else.

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Allen_Clay012

It's a shame that no one reviewed this novel. In my case I enjoyed the fact that the author gave details. The author seems to be knowledgeable in science especially physics that he/she was able to describe how stuff works in his/her story. Here is my verdict for the ratings... Writing Quality 4/5 - I am not confident in spotting grammatical errors so I wouldn't comment on that matter. Stability of Updates 5/5 - Why would this matter? Quality of chapters is always better than quantity. Story Development 5/5 - I love the progress of the story so far despite being slow. The love story is also okay since it sounds a bit sensible. For me I prefer this kind of romance over the cliche and forced ones. Character Design 5/5 - Yup I like character with brains rather than brawns or emotional ones. World Background 4/5 - A story based on the real world, check. So far the setting of the story is good. 4.6 is the total verdict of the novel. I will follow the story as promised. Sounds interesting especially the scientific stuff that is mentioned by the author. I really, really love sci-fi stories!