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Everythings are good ...i like it a lot and its enjoyable to read.. so good job ... and thank you for the story..keep up the good work...PIECE...
Review at chapter 14 currently :D First of to the writing quality. You could say the chapters are nice cause they are rather "long" if u compare it to many other fanfics. But the english is pretty bad grammarwise. English quality is around second year gymnasium(school) with a C i would say roughly. For the updates part there is currently nothing to complain about. Regular updates and more than 1 chapter a day usually. The Story developement is rather new thats why 4 stars for it. He doesnt follow the mainplotline and makes his own. The character design is rather bleak in my opinion. First thing is personal but i dont like the mcs name and the name of the crew. Name feels like an mtl from an hyroglyph which the mtl doesnt really now :D :/. Furthermore it confuses with the story slighty or better said u have to read twice sometimes cause name is in his crew too. Crewname etc really sounds slightly chuunibyou :/ same with some dialoges. For the last part of the World background there isnt much to say currently. Seems like the normal OP background but it is currently too early to say much about it. But i guess people who are unfamiliar with OP-verse would have to read some things up to understand some story parts. If the author reads this heads up :P Guess u just need a bit more practice for ur english if u are interested in developing urself. For the story part etc its mostly about the preferences from the readers but well my honest opinion is stated here and i even wrote a long reply for it on a broken keyboard :'D
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The story is good.....but mc is an idiot.....muscle freak....i guess....why can't people understand that with out speed strength is useless.....
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Everythings are good ...i like it a lot and its enjoyable to read.. so good job ... and thank you for the story..keep up the good work...PIECE...
Review at chapter 14 currently :D First of to the writing quality. You could say the chapters are nice cause they are rather "long" if u compare it to many other fanfics. But the english is pretty bad grammarwise. English quality is around second year gymnasium(school) with a C i would say roughly. For the updates part there is currently nothing to complain about. Regular updates and more than 1 chapter a day usually. The Story developement is rather new thats why 4 stars for it. He doesnt follow the mainplotline and makes his own. The character design is rather bleak in my opinion. First thing is personal but i dont like the mcs name and the name of the crew. Name feels like an mtl from an hyroglyph which the mtl doesnt really now :D :/. Furthermore it confuses with the story slighty or better said u have to read twice sometimes cause name is in his crew too. Crewname etc really sounds slightly chuunibyou :/ same with some dialoges. For the last part of the World background there isnt much to say currently. Seems like the normal OP background but it is currently too early to say much about it. But i guess people who are unfamiliar with OP-verse would have to read some things up to understand some story parts. If the author reads this heads up :P Guess u just need a bit more practice for ur english if u are interested in developing urself. For the story part etc its mostly about the preferences from the readers but well my honest opinion is stated here and i even wrote a long reply for it on a broken keyboard :'D
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