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When Allura said that she wanted to have a little adventure in her life, she didn’t mean something like being pursued by assassins from a world she had no idea existed. When she said she wanted to see something terrifyingly amazing, she didn’t mean seeing a number of unknown creatures being shot and killed without mercy. And, when she said she wanted to be someone important, she didn’t mean to say that she wanted to be a member of such a powerful royal family that had ruled for more than a hundred years.
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The book has a lot of potentials, but as already mentioned by previous reviews, there are too many gramatical mistakes like your use of is instead of was in the first few paragraphs in c1. I like the story line, and if you just work on this, it'll go a long way.
Writing Quality: 3 There were too much grammar mistakes. Honestly, I would recommend you to use grammarly to make up for that. Updates: 4 So far so good. Story Development: 3 The beginning was well-paced, it clearly showed Allura's confusion about the beings that proclaimed themselves as from another world. This shows a promising plot. However, only 5 chapters are available so far so I can't really tell that much. Character Design: 4 The characters have an evident distinction from one another unlike those novels out there that speaks like a robot. Greatly done. Overall, this novel shows promise. Just need to polish the chapters because, to be honest, too much obvious grammar mistakes turns me off. Keep this up.
Review Swap Valid as of Chapter Five Writing Quality: 3 or 4 I'd settle with 3.5. The writing quality does flow smoothly but I'm removing half a star because of the mixed up tenses. I'd give the writing a solid four otherwise. As for commas and other punction, ****** writing programmes like grammarly and pro writing aid can help you there. Story Development: The pacing is actually quite fast. There's no slow build up, and the FL learns of her identity within the beginning chapters. Of course there's only five chapters out so far - so it's too soon to judge. However the story is certainly developing in a good direction, the bad people after our FL 🤔 Guessing she learns her identity quickly so she can learn to fight back. Character Design: Five chapters is not enough to a judge character. All I'm getting from our FL is someone who is living in fear ¯\_(ツ)_/¯ so not much to comment on. The other characters she's with are interesting though, exactly what role do they play in the long run? Will they continue acting as her advisors/protectors? World Background: Still vague slightly 🤔 though we do know the FL is in a town where people are murdered a lot. We don't know exactly the details behind why she is there, and why people tend to get killed there. I'm glad to see however that her background history of the place she used to live is explained in detail.
The synopsis is good, well written Author-san! I haven't red your chapters yet but I'll do soon. I'm just leaving my review here as for the fulfillment of our review swap. Since the chapters quantity are still small I couldn't verify how should I rate the stability of your updating I'll just give it a five star. Keep on writing Author-san, your story will surely be interesting
Nice beginning!👏 Intriguing beginning, enough to make a reader be dive into it just to know its whole story. 👏 The story is a little blur though. (It is because it has only 4 chapters so far) Characters were well-introduced.👍 Proofreading is highly recommended. Tenses were mixed and commas were sometimes missing.. (Well, everything has a room for improvement) Overall, this has potential.. Keep writing!👍
I'm writing this review though I know it's still early to write one. But since it's a part of review swap... My apologies if I couldn't justify the novel by this review. But these are my honest opinions after I've carefully read the story so far. This novel sure has a lot of potential and as I can see it , till chapter 4, it still has a lot of stones unturned. I liked how the transmigration was made. The overall feel of mystery that the author wants to create is evident in its turn of events. Just one thing that I gotta say, despite everything being good, you need to edit its grammar again. Except for that, I liked it so far. Thank you for the story. Keep it up author and let us find more about your world.