Mystical Encounters

LV 4

JohnnyKbca

As I understand you're a beginner writer, I'll add 2 more stars to each review score, while the review part will show my actual evaluation. Writing Quality: 1: I think this is the aspect where you have the most to improve. First, I would suggest the use of some tool for text correction. In my case, I use Grammarly. It is by no means perfect, but more often than not it makes the right corrections, and it's really easy to use. Also, one suggestion I have is for you to try not repeating the same name so often. Here is an example from Chapter 5: "She went to the backyard and found Fluff in a corner sleeping comfortably. Looks like Elis had took good care of Fluff. She'll build a small shelter for Fluff later." This works to break some of the immersion. You could, for example, rewrite the sentence above so it reads: "She went to the backyard and found Fluff comfortably sleeping in a corner. Looks like Elis took good care of it. She'll build a small shelter for small creature later. And lastly, would be for you to take care not to mix past and present tenses. Stability of Updates 5: You seem to have a steady rate of releases, but even if you didn't, I would still give it a 5. Personally, I don't like this category, as sometimes the writer needs more time to finish up a chapter, but may end up sacrificing the quality to keep the release rate. Story Development 2: You seem to keep a similar pace for many of the story events, which is not good. In fight scenes for example, you should build the ******* a bit more. In just the first half of chapter 6, Elis: Incinerates a plant trap. Saves a group of people from a monster. Obtains a fire orb. And defeats someone from a rich family. I felt very little reading it. Character Design 3: I do think the characters have some personality. But, at least for now, it hasn't been very well explored, and I don't feel very much attached to them. World Background 3: Similar to the character design, you went over some details of the city and some countries, but nothing too deep or that made an impression, at least for now. Review score (1+5+2+3+3)/5 = 2.8 Score given = (3+5+4+5+5)/5 = 4.4 Sorry if I sounded harsh at any time. I do think that after some improvements, your story can be quite enjoyable.

LV 2

Ashley_Babe

The book had great potential. But the grammatical errors and fast pace mars its beauty. Keep up your good work. I am sure you will improve with time. But I must say that the grammatical errors make it hard to read. So, get an editor or proofreader, if possible. Or use Grammarly. Good luck!

LV 3

Sani2341

So to get the biggest issue out first: while your spelling is great (which is already a step up from a lot of stories on WN), your Grammar could do with some improvements all in all, or the first few chapters just need a slight revision if you already got better. The worldbuilding so far has been quite interesting and well done, although I personally dislike some of the videogame-like aspects (i.e. A Rabbit 'dropping a rare Item'), although they may decrease over time and jsut be a bit of early installment weirdness.

LV 4

ShinSungmi

As far as I have read, it has a creative plotline which is equally interesting. The grammar and the writing style is amazing too, and I don't see any problems with it. Keep it up!

LV 10

_Sha

From the start we can imagine the action nature of the story which is wow, I like action, minor details are carefully handled. I am looking forward its development, the female lead is promising to herself that she would become stronger not to find a man like other cliché novels, I hope the author could keep the pace of story.

LV 5

Vrinda13

I like the plot of this story. I think this story has a lot of potential. The only problem is grammar. At many places, the narration is in past form and at many, it is in present form, which you can solve by proof reading your chapters. I also think that there is excessive use of pronouns. Writer don't prefer to use the names which is confusing. If we know the names of characters then we can easily imagine them. I will recommend you to proofread the chapters from a reader's POV before updating it.

LV 5

Shiksha_Jerath

The writing quality could use some more work. I think the story could be a great work but is akin to an uncut gem. The tenses are mixed up which makes a jarring change for the reader. The character design is idyllic. I don't like everything about the character explored in one long shot so I like it that the author has kept it a bit in the grey area. This way if they want to add new things or make changes down the road, it leaves them with a lot of leeways. 😊 The background settings though explored, don't go deep enough. Not to rain on the author's parade or anything, I just like background details to be explained properly but that's just me. 😏 Overall, the author could slowly proofread and edit the chapters slowly and those minuscule problems can be solved along the way. My only advice to the author : Don't get disheartened if the response to the story is not heartening as of now, just keep on improving your weak points and the story will definitely reach the masses in time. Good luck

LV 5

stella2138

nice story, nice writing. I feel myself in your book's world and it's delicious. makes one want for more. the cover is nice but please change it. don't worry when you find the right one your heart will call out to it.its not a must but I just feel you should.

LV 4

Daoist_Food

Although I'm reviewing this while the novel is only starting, I think the plot and writing quality is great! The synopsis really captured me into reading and the character design is really interesting. Although not daily, the updates are consistent. Great job and good luck, author!

LV 4

chonnie

I think this novel genuinely has so much potential; where its only hindered by a little bit of technical and pacing issues. While there were some events I'm not fond of (for example in Chapter 2? I think there was this girl who tried to fight the mc and lost against her. I think it wasn't as fleshed out as it could be). In the beginning, it's a little bit confusing due to the quick pace, but it definitely helped keep the plot interesting. What I loved most was the world building aspect. I loved the descriptions of the creatures in the world. Overall, the only thing this novel really needs is polishing. I'm hype to see where the story goes :) Kudos to the author and keep writing!!

LV 14

zetsubouaichan

The story is just beginning, but I can tell that the story will turn out well later as the story continue to progress, and the characters develop. The writing flow nicely. Although there are some mistakes, it didn't bother my reading experience. The first few chapters were written in the third person pov, and later on, the author changed it to first person pov. I have to say that I preferred the third person pov since the author did not stick to just one character pov. Sometimes, it can get confusing for readers when it switched. It can be a bit dangerous as the characters' personality might sound all the same. If the author is careful about this, then, that's alright. Keep on writing!

LV 2

abel_cxpher

Very interesting....But you need to work on the grammar.......There are a lot of grammatical errors....But I hope this wld improve as the novel advances....

LV 4

KhanQi

Although this book has only just started, I am very optimistic. The title is concise, but the content is not simple. The plot of the story is full of ups and downs, which fascinates people. I hope the author can persist in updating and bring good stories to more people.

LV 4

IceSnowball

This is an interesting story:) There are a few mistakes with grammar and tense. The author described the fighting scenes well. The world building and story development are good. Good job😊

LV 15

Rxel

Though the story has not gotten very far yet, I can already say that the world building is coming along nicely, and the characters have distinct personalities. Though there are several gramatical errors, it does not detract from the reading experience. The fight scenes are written nicely as well. Keep up the good work, author! Hope to see more ☺🎉

LV 4

KhanQi

Although this book has only just started, I am very optimistic. The title is concise, but the content is not simple. The plot of the story is full of ups and downs, which fascinates people. I hope the author can persist in updating and bring good stories to more people.

LV 3

K_A_U

Really, good book, it has alot of potential. I really like how you show the pov of the different characters. But you still need to work on your grammar, most especially the tenses. But it is obvious that you are improving, and thats good. So keep it up author, remain steadfast.

LV 4

Irelia

This story has a lot of potential to develop. I like how different Pov are shown to illustrate things. Although there were some grammatical mistakes which can be clearly seen in the first few chapters, you can tell that the author has put in alot of effort to improve. Make the chapers slightly longer as well. Stability of updates: 5/5 i am new here so i am not sure but i will give it 5/5 Story development: Has potential Character design: 5/5 World background: 5/5 hope future chapters will illustrate more