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The characters are so well developed and each character has their own unique story. The story is written so well with enough elements of humour and equal seriousness of the situation of being an alien. It's funny and good to read. Love it!
I will simply leave a review saying this is an excellent novel in my humble opinion. Although, it's sad not to see this pretty good work on top. I just hope in time something comes of this.
Hey! Good day to you! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to email mollyringdom*@*gmail.com (delete *）We are mainly looking for adventurous novels (Fantasy, Sci-fi, Paranormal Urban, Action, Thriller/Suspense, Game Fiction). Looking forward to your email.
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Hi! This is Molly, an editor of the international writing contest SWA II. I believe your book has great potential, so I invited you to join in 2 week ago. Please reply to me so I can discuss this with you in detail. This contest is free entry, and we can provide you a $100 advance by joining the contest.
I see normal, and think 2 things, 1. Average high schooler, 2. Someone who wants a normal life
$115,500 for the Best Adventure Novels +Get Hardcover Publish Hey Writers! Come to check out this adventure novel writing competition, both new and published stories can participate! This competition is mainly looking for four genres: Fantasy, Urban, Game, and Sci-fi. You can either submit your published works, rewrite some previous ideas, or create a new story if any given examples or tips inspired you! Web-fiction or Light Novel writing experience is desired, so you might be the winner! For more information, you may visit: https://bit.ly/2ObQnRy or contact Email :Rebecca_661@outlook.com
author chetta ...glad to meet you here...story pollichu (Awesome)...writing quality kidilanatto (Great writing quality) ....author chettan evideya thamasikunathu ...njan Malappuram annu and Glad to meet a malayali here
I got so lost while reading he first chapter in this novel! If you 're still looking for reasons to read this nov, then I'm throwing you in to the magnificent world with me! You're not going to be disappointed!
Ah, the coveted tenth review! I'll be snatching that. Just_A_Man, I really appreciated for that review you did, because I could get it to an even ten. Anyway, I love writing this and the community we have here is small yet pretty freaking cool. So, come hang out and read a chapter or two and support yo boy!
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you want to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new works, you might want to contact rebecca.review@outlook.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters, or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
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I write honest reviews. Hopefully, you can use this to temper your own writing. Writing Quality It's understandable. Lots of grammar mistakes, such as wrong usage of tenses or misspelled words. The syntax isn't as good as it could be, but I'm assuming the author isn't a native English speaker. There isn't a lot of descriptions. At times in the dialogue, the author uses something called the 'talking heads'. This is when two characters have nothing but dialogue, aka, something like this: "Hey." "Hello. How's it going." "I'm good. What about you?" "Good." To solve this, try adding dialogue tags, and actions between every few lines of dialogue, like so: Tang Xiao smirked at the girl in front of her. "So? What can you do about it?" The girl clenched her fists tightly. She glared at Tang Xiao with fire in her eyes, "Just you wait! Tang Xiao, you're not getting away with this!" she spat out, one shaking finger pointing towards Tang Xiao. "Oh, but I already have, darling." Not the best, but something I just came up with on the spot. You get the idea. Some sentences are mere repeats of one another. The character's dialogue sound especially forced, like puppets on a string. Stability Personally, I don't care about stability when reviewing. It's a useless part, so it's an auto 5. Story A decent pace, although a little bit on the faster side. The plot itself was...confusing. Personally, I would not continue reading it because there are no stakes, and Chapter 11 contains a massive wall break and a plot twist. What is the author's end goal in writing this? Trying planning out future arcs, and make a brief outline. We follow the story of Normal - Taro, who's constantly bullied. He transmigrates to Earth, where he can't speak the language. There is light foreshadowing for why he is there - that, I will give the author credit for. But remember, readers are usually here for action. Right now, the whole plot is like a puppet play. Character The only character that stood out was Taro. Even he was still quite one dimensional. My first impression of him was a dull-eyed character with no guts. But of course, this story is still young. Character development is always a thing. None of the other characters really stand out. This is mainly due to the forced dialogue. Create the characters first, author, and let them speak for themselves. Don't make them spew info-dumps. World The world of Wados sounds like one similar to BNHA. There was a brief description at the beginning, but the MC transmigrates soon after so I can't say much. Since I've only read up to chapter 11, this rating is going to be average as I have not seen any effective world building techniques other than the average info-dumps. Try to show the information, not tell it straight away. This will make your novel come alive, and allow the world to have depth. Good luck on your future works! Either way, the concept of this is pretty different from others, as most novels transmigrate into a fantasy world. I hope you can use this advice to improve in the future, and I look forward to seeing where you end up.
I'm loving the start I think I may like this novel........... _____________________________________________..........................................
Nice story, it's fun to read and the characters are well thought of, nice work author, keep it up 🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤💋💋💋💋💋👄
This is interesting to read. The synopsis alone is an attention seeker in a good way. The plot is different from your typical male dominated novels. Keep it up...
It's an outer world story. It's not stereotypical and keeps the reader questioning what's gonna happen next. The plot seems to revolve around a seemingly unsuspected being who is transported to our wierd earth. Seems lit.👍👍
The characters are so well developed and each character has their own unique story. The story is written so well with enough elements of humour and equal seriousness of the situation of being an alien. It's funny and good to read. Love it!
I will simply leave a review saying this is an excellent novel in my humble opinion. Although, it's sad not to see this pretty good work on top. I just hope in time something comes of this.
Hey! Good day to you! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to email mollyringdom*@*gmail.com (delete *）We are mainly looking for adventurous novels (Fantasy, Sci-fi, Paranormal Urban, Action, Thriller/Suspense, Game Fiction). Looking forward to your email.
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Good stuff! [img=update][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=recommend]
Hi! This is Molly, an editor of the international writing contest SWA II. I believe your book has great potential, so I invited you to join in 2 week ago. Please reply to me so I can discuss this with you in detail. This contest is free entry, and we can provide you a $100 advance by joining the contest.
I see normal, and think 2 things, 1. Average high schooler, 2. Someone who wants a normal life
$115,500 for the Best Adventure Novels +Get Hardcover Publish Hey Writers! Come to check out this adventure novel writing competition, both new and published stories can participate! This competition is mainly looking for four genres: Fantasy, Urban, Game, and Sci-fi. You can either submit your published works, rewrite some previous ideas, or create a new story if any given examples or tips inspired you! Web-fiction or Light Novel writing experience is desired, so you might be the winner! For more information, you may visit: https://bit.ly/2ObQnRy or contact Email :Rebecca_661@outlook.com
author chetta ...glad to meet you here...story pollichu (Awesome)...writing quality kidilanatto (Great writing quality) ....author chettan evideya thamasikunathu ...njan Malappuram annu and Glad to meet a malayali here
I got so lost while reading he first chapter in this novel! If you 're still looking for reasons to read this nov, then I'm throwing you in to the magnificent world with me! You're not going to be disappointed!
Ah, the coveted tenth review! I'll be snatching that. Just_A_Man, I really appreciated for that review you did, because I could get it to an even ten. Anyway, I love writing this and the community we have here is small yet pretty freaking cool. So, come hang out and read a chapter or two and support yo boy!
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you want to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new works, you might want to contact rebecca.review@outlook.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters, or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
Its safe to say you can definitely get much better. Good story line, not the typical everyday story and that is a good thing. ✌🏿✌🏿✌🏿✌🏿✌🏿✌🏿✌🏿✌🏿✌🏿✌🏿💪🏼💪🏼💪🏼💪🏼💪🏼💪🏼💪🏼💪🏼💪🏼💪🏼💪🏼💪🏼💪🏼💪🏼💪🏼💪🏼💪🏼💪🏼💪🏼💪🏼💪🏼💪🏼💪🏼💪🏼💪🏼💪🏼💪🏼💪🏼💪🏼💪🏼💪🏼💪🏼💪🏼💪🏼💪🏼💪🏼💪🏼
I write honest reviews. Hopefully, you can use this to temper your own writing. Writing Quality It's understandable. Lots of grammar mistakes, such as wrong usage of tenses or misspelled words. The syntax isn't as good as it could be, but I'm assuming the author isn't a native English speaker. There isn't a lot of descriptions. At times in the dialogue, the author uses something called the 'talking heads'. This is when two characters have nothing but dialogue, aka, something like this: "Hey." "Hello. How's it going." "I'm good. What about you?" "Good." To solve this, try adding dialogue tags, and actions between every few lines of dialogue, like so: Tang Xiao smirked at the girl in front of her. "So? What can you do about it?" The girl clenched her fists tightly. She glared at Tang Xiao with fire in her eyes, "Just you wait! Tang Xiao, you're not getting away with this!" she spat out, one shaking finger pointing towards Tang Xiao. "Oh, but I already have, darling." Not the best, but something I just came up with on the spot. You get the idea. Some sentences are mere repeats of one another. The character's dialogue sound especially forced, like puppets on a string. Stability Personally, I don't care about stability when reviewing. It's a useless part, so it's an auto 5. Story A decent pace, although a little bit on the faster side. The plot itself was...confusing. Personally, I would not continue reading it because there are no stakes, and Chapter 11 contains a massive wall break and a plot twist. What is the author's end goal in writing this? Trying planning out future arcs, and make a brief outline. We follow the story of Normal - Taro, who's constantly bullied. He transmigrates to Earth, where he can't speak the language. There is light foreshadowing for why he is there - that, I will give the author credit for. But remember, readers are usually here for action. Right now, the whole plot is like a puppet play. Character The only character that stood out was Taro. Even he was still quite one dimensional. My first impression of him was a dull-eyed character with no guts. But of course, this story is still young. Character development is always a thing. None of the other characters really stand out. This is mainly due to the forced dialogue. Create the characters first, author, and let them speak for themselves. Don't make them spew info-dumps. World The world of Wados sounds like one similar to BNHA. There was a brief description at the beginning, but the MC transmigrates soon after so I can't say much. Since I've only read up to chapter 11, this rating is going to be average as I have not seen any effective world building techniques other than the average info-dumps. Try to show the information, not tell it straight away. This will make your novel come alive, and allow the world to have depth. Good luck on your future works! Either way, the concept of this is pretty different from others, as most novels transmigrate into a fantasy world. I hope you can use this advice to improve in the future, and I look forward to seeing where you end up.
I'm loving the start I think I may like this novel........... _____________________________________________..........................................
Nice story, it's fun to read and the characters are well thought of, nice work author, keep it up 🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤💋💋💋💋💋👄
This is interesting to read. The synopsis alone is an attention seeker in a good way. The plot is different from your typical male dominated novels. Keep it up...
It's an outer world story. It's not stereotypical and keeps the reader questioning what's gonna happen next. The plot seems to revolve around a seemingly unsuspected being who is transported to our wierd earth. Seems lit.👍👍