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How come an assassin knows reincarnation never mentioned he read novels movies or any of that ,the how? Author why did you need to put "that little girl" to the family and why a girl it is always a girl in a novel there are no boys cause if he really loved "old girl in previous world" he wouldn't be swayed by the "little girl" and is he a pedophile cause I think a lot of people in a cultivation world are orphans it did not show cause of weak/no talent . And I want to know why the "little girl's parents " abandoned her if she has a really talent and don't say they are poor cause they could have betrothed the "little girl" or put her in an orphanage Just here to get exp's don't bother reading this I just made it to get exp's Yes road to 775 words
The development of the story is quite good. Though it's not yet complete but you can feel the actions and thrilled of the story. The author can portray the motif of the character and it's role to make their lives full with tremendous activity. The character show the advantage of being on top and how to make it sustainable in a certain period of time. The character should take part of it's role to be ahead from the others. In real life the main character portray that to excel in these life competition you should be ahead from what others are thinking...
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It seems to be a good story and interesting from what I can get of it from the summary. I will give this novel a chance and read it so keep the chapters rolling on in. I’ll give it a good rating for now but I’m sure it can only get better the longer I read. 🥰🥰🥰
The story has a good potential but : 1. there's one word missing every 2 paragraph 2. The MC is supposed to be an assassin who was bettrayed by his most trusted dude, so logically he should have basicaly no trust left in others but now he met a random little homeless girl and he's like common now ur my little sis and his parents are okay, then this girl is revealed to be an absolute genuis cultivator. 3.He trust the little girl as if she is his love from his last life when he knew her for well less than 1 day. 4. His dad is the boss of the best familly but he make basic mistakes that even a 10 years old wouldn't make. Exemple: when his son give him some blueprint telling him that it's his master work, there's no questions like okay you have never leaved home but idk ur master or even WTF SOMEONE CAME INSIDE THE HOUSE AND I WASN'T EVEN AWARE well idk some logical response. Too many mistake for me dropped at like 20 chapters.
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Nice chapter. Keep up the good work. Full of thrill and actions. Character is the best also the supporting characters. More action and fighting's on the chapter
Nice character strong and talented.keep up the good work and let us read more action and thrills. Very intelligent characters very good plot.
Just want to rate I dont have anything to say 😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌
The novel is nothing new, we can already understand how the main plot will develop. However the story is still interesting, especially the interactions between the different characters and the protagonist resolves the different situations. So if the novel is more centered on the sub-plot like now it is still enjoyable to read in the free time. I have to point out that I can't understand is the development during the temporal jump from the orphanage to the school, for first the level of power should be higher considering what is written in the first chapters, also the protagonist organization should be more developed (a powerful information network is the first thing that you need to construct as soon as you have manpower, otherwise your subordinates are only cannon fodder to protect you.)
Just Found a good novel. A gem. I read 28 chapters in 1 go. It’s written well. And lengthy. Not a bite size that feels like 1 paragraph. Novel is interesting and keeps you entertained. I’m glad to read. It. Please continue with such excellent story.
Not sure if you are reading your own story or not, a lot of "tense" mix ups. Past and Present tense in the same sentence makes it aggravating to read in a relaxed and carefree manner. Overall it's a good basic story structure, I would recommend either re-reading your chapters to ensure they flow well together and that you aren't mixing up your "tenses" or have another person read through your chapters before posting to do this for you. The PoV is really consistent which is great compared to a lot of other original stories on this site, so thank you! Just try and read your chapters a few times out load before you post them as final edits, it will help you catch most, if not all, the smaller errors and putting it into a word processor should help catch the rest. Also, "a live" is not the same as "alive".
Really good story in my point of view. The story development is quite smooth, the mc is building is own army but we don't see him build his own cultivation method and that could be nice. The characters design are nicely done with some evolution going on. As for the world world background i don't have anything to say, it is just perfect, well maybe do tell some more details about the cultivation world or maybe you will when the mc is getting stronger, can't wait to see. Now if i have to say a negative things is the writing quality (not bad but not good either). It lacks some good proofreading (same words or written next to each other, some contradictroy it writing is done often and could be avoid by proofreading). So far so good with some mishap happening with the writing but i recommend this story.
The synopsis is right on point... shocker! To all out there, I highly recommend this novel. There are a few character inconsistencies for a reborn assassin and a lot of grammar and spell errors that can be anoying. This things, they prevent the reader from fully enjoying and appreciating the story for what it is. If you can ignore those few things, you will find a good novel with a solid plot that has great potential for an epic adventure. Lets hope for the best.
Was planning to review at ch1 but I found myself reading more. Interesting concept and great execution. People complain about the grammar but you can't expect everyone to have a master's in English. Hope to see some more in the future!
Poorly plotted out characters that are either bad ass one second or dumb as a door nail the next 1 star The english was understandable but it hurt to read it and was badly written 2 stars World backround was not plotted out well same as the characters 1 star Plot line was semi usable until it met a author who doesnt flesh out any of the story 2 stars In all 1 star rateing and this isnt the worst rateing ever... iv seen worse novels and that is saying something... (i have a major issue with how dim minded the mc clearly is and how the mcs name from one world and the father of mc after reincarnated has nearly the same name as the mc) to me these small issues show bigger flaws the story wasnt plotted out properly and was clearly rushed to be posted and it doesnt have a editior to fix the numerous spelling errors and sentence hang ups (Please understand im actually being kind in this review some of my other ones with even worse spelling errors make me blow my top off and i lack the ability to function in my mental anguish and inner screaming at the many issues i see in the original novels... some some so bad it makes all the issues in this one near nothing )
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Well, I'd say this novel is worth my time in writing a review since I quite like it so far. Definitely give this novel a shot! Although you will see some grammatical mistakes and some misspellings, it won't be too big of a deal. In the synopsis, the mc is described as an op assassin. However, once you start reading several chapters, you'll have a better opinion of him!
Its has a good first impression ill tell you that. The story has a somewhat great story and plot but even tho ive only read till the second chap, its safe to say that the novel will continue on well. Should read if ya have the time...
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So far so good. Few mistakes but thats ok. Just try to edit twice just to make sure. Great plot, keep going and dont drop It please. Fuck this 140 characters shot
Love the backstory and everything but I hate how mature the mc get when he is still young. He is already a god at age 7. Thats why I shamelessly gave this a 3 star.
It's shameless of me to 1 star this work but as a reader of WN I'm biased. I feel like this story can be compared to a roller coaster. There might be ups and downs from what I can see but idk. But im hoping it'll be up at most of the times. As a reader I promise to give out the best review I can. Seeing as this is his first serious work as you can see from all his other dropped work. I hope he don't plan to drop this anytime as I can see him have amazing things to do with this novel. This is so sad, Alexa play despacito 7
It's shameless of me to 5 star my work but as the author I'm biased. What I plan with this story can be compared to a roller coaster. There will ups and there will be downs. But im hoping it'll be up at most of the times. As the author I promise to give out the best content I can. This is my first serious work as you can see from all my other dropped work. I don't plan to drop this anytime as I have amazing things to do with this novel. So I hope everyone can stick around and witness how the story goes.
Pretty good so far! Character development is good along with world building and the author's writing style although pretty average, leaves enough for the imagination, quite good, i r8 8 8/8 m8
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As a reader i want to say the author did well in story development but the chapters are too short.. The mc given that he is reincarnated still should have time to be a kid.. The mc is too advance way of doing things.. I thinks its better if he gets the kids by being a companion just like the mc in Tales of demon and God...anyways i will see the story progress more! More powers for the author!
Pretty good so far! Not a bad read to waste some time, pacing is good, wish they would describe the outside world/clothing/food a bit more but its only been 2 chapters.
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ネタバレを明かす How come an assassin knows reincarnation never mentioned he read novels movies or any of that ,the how? Author why did you need to put "that little girl" to the family and why a girl it is always a girl in a novel there are no boys cause if he really loved "old girl in previous world" he wouldn't be swayed by the "little girl" and is he a pedophile cause I think a lot of people in a cultivation world are orphans it did not show cause of weak/no talent . And I want to know why the "little girl's parents " abandoned her if she has a really talent and don't say they are poor cause they could have betrothed the "little girl" or put her in an orphanage Just here to get exp's don't bother reading this I just made it to get exp's Yes road to 775 words
The development of the story is quite good. Though it's not yet complete but you can feel the actions and thrilled of the story. The author can portray the motif of the character and it's role to make their lives full with tremendous activity. The character show the advantage of being on top and how to make it sustainable in a certain period of time. The character should take part of it's role to be ahead from the others. In real life the main character portray that to excel in these life competition you should be ahead from what others are thinking...
Aaahahahhahahhahhahahhahahahhahahahahdhdbdgrvegshnsnskensniwnsbhsshbsgs sbd dbd d. D d s s. S s s e e e e t. For t f d d. F f g g f s w w w w e r. R t t t
It seems to be a good story and interesting from what I can get of it from the summary. I will give this novel a chance and read it so keep the chapters rolling on in. I’ll give it a good rating for now but I’m sure it can only get better the longer I read. 🥰🥰🥰
The story has a good potential but : 1. there's one word missing every 2 paragraph 2. The MC is supposed to be an assassin who was bettrayed by his most trusted dude, so logically he should have basicaly no trust left in others but now he met a random little homeless girl and he's like common now ur my little sis and his parents are okay, then this girl is revealed to be an absolute genuis cultivator. 3.He trust the little girl as if she is his love from his last life when he knew her for well less than 1 day. 4. His dad is the boss of the best familly but he make basic mistakes that even a 10 years old wouldn't make. Exemple: when his son give him some blueprint telling him that it's his master work, there's no questions like okay you have never leaved home but idk ur master or even WTF SOMEONE CAME INSIDE THE HOUSE AND I WASN'T EVEN AWARE well idk some logical response. Too many mistake for me dropped at like 20 chapters.
ネタバレを明かす Nice chapter. Keep up the good work. Full of thrill and actions. Character is the best also the supporting characters. More action and fighting's on the chapter
Nice character strong and talented.keep up the good work and let us read more action and thrills. Very intelligent characters very good plot.
Just want to rate I dont have anything to say 😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌😌
The novel is nothing new, we can already understand how the main plot will develop. However the story is still interesting, especially the interactions between the different characters and the protagonist resolves the different situations. So if the novel is more centered on the sub-plot like now it is still enjoyable to read in the free time. I have to point out that I can't understand is the development during the temporal jump from the orphanage to the school, for first the level of power should be higher considering what is written in the first chapters, also the protagonist organization should be more developed (a powerful information network is the first thing that you need to construct as soon as you have manpower, otherwise your subordinates are only cannon fodder to protect you.)
Just Found a good novel. A gem. I read 28 chapters in 1 go. It’s written well. And lengthy. Not a bite size that feels like 1 paragraph. Novel is interesting and keeps you entertained. I’m glad to read. It. Please continue with such excellent story.
Not sure if you are reading your own story or not, a lot of "tense" mix ups. Past and Present tense in the same sentence makes it aggravating to read in a relaxed and carefree manner. Overall it's a good basic story structure, I would recommend either re-reading your chapters to ensure they flow well together and that you aren't mixing up your "tenses" or have another person read through your chapters before posting to do this for you. The PoV is really consistent which is great compared to a lot of other original stories on this site, so thank you! Just try and read your chapters a few times out load before you post them as final edits, it will help you catch most, if not all, the smaller errors and putting it into a word processor should help catch the rest. Also, "a live" is not the same as "alive".
Really good story in my point of view. The story development is quite smooth, the mc is building is own army but we don't see him build his own cultivation method and that could be nice. The characters design are nicely done with some evolution going on. As for the world world background i don't have anything to say, it is just perfect, well maybe do tell some more details about the cultivation world or maybe you will when the mc is getting stronger, can't wait to see. Now if i have to say a negative things is the writing quality (not bad but not good either). It lacks some good proofreading (same words or written next to each other, some contradictroy it writing is done often and could be avoid by proofreading). So far so good with some mishap happening with the writing but i recommend this story.
The synopsis is right on point... shocker! To all out there, I highly recommend this novel. There are a few character inconsistencies for a reborn assassin and a lot of grammar and spell errors that can be anoying. This things, they prevent the reader from fully enjoying and appreciating the story for what it is. If you can ignore those few things, you will find a good novel with a solid plot that has great potential for an epic adventure. Lets hope for the best.
Was planning to review at ch1 but I found myself reading more. Interesting concept and great execution. People complain about the grammar but you can't expect everyone to have a master's in English. Hope to see some more in the future!
Poorly plotted out characters that are either bad ass one second or dumb as a door nail the next 1 star The english was understandable but it hurt to read it and was badly written 2 stars World backround was not plotted out well same as the characters 1 star Plot line was semi usable until it met a author who doesnt flesh out any of the story 2 stars In all 1 star rateing and this isnt the worst rateing ever... iv seen worse novels and that is saying something... (i have a major issue with how dim minded the mc clearly is and how the mcs name from one world and the father of mc after reincarnated has nearly the same name as the mc) to me these small issues show bigger flaws the story wasnt plotted out properly and was clearly rushed to be posted and it doesnt have a editior to fix the numerous spelling errors and sentence hang ups (Please understand im actually being kind in this review some of my other ones with even worse spelling errors make me blow my top off and i lack the ability to function in my mental anguish and inner screaming at the many issues i see in the original novels... some some so bad it makes all the issues in this one near nothing )
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Well, I'd say this novel is worth my time in writing a review since I quite like it so far. Definitely give this novel a shot! Although you will see some grammatical mistakes and some misspellings, it won't be too big of a deal. In the synopsis, the mc is described as an op assassin. However, once you start reading several chapters, you'll have a better opinion of him!
Its has a good first impression ill tell you that. The story has a somewhat great story and plot but even tho ive only read till the second chap, its safe to say that the novel will continue on well. Should read if ya have the time...
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So far so good. Few mistakes but thats ok. Just try to edit twice just to make sure. Great plot, keep going and dont drop It please. Fuck this 140 characters shot
Love the backstory and everything but I hate how mature the mc get when he is still young. He is already a god at age 7. Thats why I shamelessly gave this a 3 star.
It's shameless of me to 1 star this work but as a reader of WN I'm biased. I feel like this story can be compared to a roller coaster. There might be ups and downs from what I can see but idk. But im hoping it'll be up at most of the times. As a reader I promise to give out the best review I can. Seeing as this is his first serious work as you can see from all his other dropped work. I hope he don't plan to drop this anytime as I can see him have amazing things to do with this novel. This is so sad, Alexa play despacito 7
It's shameless of me to 5 star my work but as the author I'm biased. What I plan with this story can be compared to a roller coaster. There will ups and there will be downs. But im hoping it'll be up at most of the times. As the author I promise to give out the best content I can. This is my first serious work as you can see from all my other dropped work. I don't plan to drop this anytime as I have amazing things to do with this novel. So I hope everyone can stick around and witness how the story goes.
Pretty good so far! Character development is good along with world building and the author's writing style although pretty average, leaves enough for the imagination, quite good, i r8 8 8/8 m8
ネタバレを明かす As a reader i want to say the author did well in story development but the chapters are too short.. The mc given that he is reincarnated still should have time to be a kid.. The mc is too advance way of doing things.. I thinks its better if he gets the kids by being a companion just like the mc in Tales of demon and God...anyways i will see the story progress more! More powers for the author!
Pretty good so far! Not a bad read to waste some time, pacing is good, wish they would describe the outside world/clothing/food a bit more but its only been 2 chapters.
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