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The novel is not bad per say, but it's really not for me It starts out pretty cute and nice the first 4 chapters or so but after that there's alot of, dear God he is dumber than a box of rocks moments That seemingly only apply to him which is a bit..eh It's well written and all but the Mc is just too dumb and naive for me
Separation trope, enough said. ....................................................................... ............................................................
Honestly author just submit an appeal for them to consider signing your book. There’s always that option. They have previously signed some very bad books, and yours is actually ok
Absolutely trash..... I mean at first the MC starts with his gf and they separate when they were standing at arms reach and in the middle of a house, so if the earth did split between them they both would have been dropped without even knowing what happened to them. Second the supposedly deity gets angry when MC is unconscious and can't answer the system or whatever then gives him a supposedly "weak" class and makes it so he can't do anything. Thirdly in the entire world only MC was unconscious so the "deity" got angry at him. Like really.... At try to make it bearable. Author purposely makes him extremely weak and gives him a bunny to make his enemies die of laughter.... Really, are you trying to get some kind of Pokémon and apocalypse mixed sh.it. Trash
ネタバレを明かす This is really good. Better than a lot of the **** on here. Sometimes it gets frustrating but it’s because the story takes paths that you don’t expect. And this is something great about it. YOU get so mad sometimes that you end up liking it and understand that sometimes things don’t go your way but still end up good
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The author is a bad man, making us wait a day to be able to read his scripture. Horrible, when I found I had reached the end I started to starve, just like the Dracas. We need for him to give us a big boon, enough to last for 2 whole years, just like Jormungand. However, don't sacrifice anyone to be able to continue writing.
WTF how do you have a grade higher then 3, don't read it drags you in just to f... with you like 3-4 time the MC decisons dosen't sem logical ,and the author gets feedback in the coments but he doesn't addresses the problem.
Overall a really good story a little hard to follow at times, lots of little flash backs to past memories, and MC is not to OP which makes the story exciting(for me anyways) very short chapters
The story came off amazing in the beginning unfortunately l feel like the latest chapters have been lacking something or any form of system upgrade but l'll continue to read cause l still like it
The novel start quite interesting for the first 10 chaps, and afterwards it become a long detail and not important leveling story.. from here i skip most of them, just peek at the title.. untill he come out and meet apes, the story start keeping up. Here, i still skip some part. The moment MC meet human-snake tribe, the story can be score 5 stars! There is only one or two paragraph i skip here. Overall, although there is too much detail world building can still be found here and there, but I can see how it become better..
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I was curious about how the relationship will develop with the characters. How do you plan to develop the relationship betweem the mc and the women? Will the system comtinue to play an aid role or will it change in later parts.
A well built story should be the first thing i say, good characters and even best world background, almost unknow 'til now. At first i hate the mc, a mental trauma, a bunny by his side and getting stronger just eating other beings, it remain me certain ghoul. But great things about our mc, he has a goal even if sublime, he doesn't start with any cheat, is a total stupid but somehow figure things out and don't give up on others. The story goes right so far and i hope the author talk more about the world, the system, the higher beings or just the Abyss. Until now we still don't know how monster get stronger or eveb if they can, why other humanoids aren't part of the system or why they don't cultivate beyond the limits..And i really what to know why Kitsi ended like that..
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I tried to like this story but it was a struggle to read. In many instances there were missing words or improper grammar. The author really needs an editor and to proofread their work. Many of the sentences feel unsophisticated and drawn out (as in, the wording is ******, and using more words than necessary.) Many sentences can be written to be more concise, impactful, and meaningful, delivering the same amount, if not more information in a way that is more enjoyable to read (as in better word flow). A good way to improve in this area is to write a few sentences, then see how many different ways you can rewrite it while portraying the same information. Sometimes just simply rearranging words will make it many times more pleasant to read. This may increase the amount of time it takes you to put out chapters, but any author whom loves their own work wont mind putting in the extra effort to improve its quality. Example - a random piece of paragraph from Ch.12) "Zhao Wei couldn't continue watching any longer as he could see that the horn was slowly being inched out with every kick. Problem was even if he wanted to kill or capture it, he didn't dare come near it as he was sure he wasn't rocky balboa and wouldn't get back up after the first hit. Secondly, he felt what it's fur felt like, although it looked fluffy it was tough as steel." (73 words) After rewriting) "Zhao Wei realized he could no longer stay idle, the bunny’s every kick freed its horn inch by inch. But he was faced with a dilemma; he was no Rocky Balboa, one hit and it was lights-out for him. Secondly, though soft and fluffy in appearance, he had felt the bunny’s fur was as tough as steel." (57 words - and what i feel is a much smoother word flow) Another problem i had with this story was, some things were just unrealistic, even for a fantasy/post apoc setting. Shoving ones foot into burning ash will not help the healing process of wounds on the foot, instead you'll get burns that'll become open wounds and fester with infections. Fresh ash may be sterile, but id never suggest it be used in place of clean bandaging, even if you didn't have any, using hot ash in this case would only make things ten times worse. Now his hands are burnt, his torso wounds are burnt, and his feet are burnt. In a more realistic fashion, the story would end there, he would be royally f**ked. Next problem, and the one that left me rolling my eyes and moving on from the story is the rabbit somehow knowing where the human heart is. For it to know applying chest compressions (safely i might add - given its strength) could stimulate the heart into beating was just silly, even for a supernaturally strong rabbit that can apparently damage a tree that's as hard as iron. (There's also little reason for it to do so, given it was captured by the guy just prior. If i were the rabbit, id have probably just let the fool croak.) Despite the fact that it shows human-like intelligence in the following chapter (Which i only read partially through before stopping) that should not mean knowledge of human-related things. Things that happen within a novel need to be at least somewhat believable within the scope of their genre. I wont be reading the rest of the story, but i hope the novel tones down such things in future chapters. :)
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Wonderful story. deserves a higher rank! ..................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
really good, waiting for new chapters every day........................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
So far it's a very good story. It starts up slow but after a few chapters it starts picking up the pace. The writing quality is good and you always have a feeling of wanting to know whats next. The power system could be explained in more detail, but I suspect the author hasn't done so yet because the MC's understanding of it is currently still lacking. I would definitely recommend the read and I hope the author keeps up the good work.
I REALLY like this so far but I have a genuine word of advice DON'T waste about 20 chapters on a character you just introduced for the first time and make it a flashback it leaves a foul feeling in a decent amount of readers, instead after a few chapters AFTER the characters into you can add the important past bits in enclosed sections in the chapter when that ingfo is most nesessitated
One of the best novels I've read by far. And I've read an ocean full. The world building and character arcs and plot developments great, with good grammar to boot. Really glad I added this to my "must read" list. Highly recommended
Great story. One of the best original novels I have read. It is a top 10 material. This story is better than some of the fan-fictions up there.
I give 5 star for you because this novel have my favorite genre and you mention my country. Your story is not bad xD *justreadonechapter* what should I write again? Ah, 140 140 140 140 Ok I'm done.
Good story for a system based theme. The only downside on my part as a fast reader is that too many flowering words for one action. But all in all its a good story for serious reader who will focus much on word by word.
In getting sick and tired of this redundant formula that is a system novel. This fad is so unoriginal and boring. It ruins any fun i would have reading a novel. I won't vote any novel above or below a 3 if they have a system, even if they are written well.
l'm just writing for anyone who reads this review on this good novel pls read this and push it to top 10 cause this is simply better than some actual webnovels posted here on this website. if ya wanna see a normal dude become the king of beasts with his at first weak powers then please support this novel with powerstones to make more people see this and for the author a man named shia labeouf once said,"JUST DO IT!" keep up the good work dude
Just wondering is this story inspired by everyone else is a returnee and re:monster? Also l’ve only read 7 chapters but the sypnosis sounds alot like it. The webnovel overall is really enjoyable from what l’ve read especially the bantar with the boyfriend and girlfriend in the beginning hope you continue with the good quality👌
TLDR: the novel has smooth grammar really good world building and character development. This story is really good. I feel like it has done several things most novels on webnovel don't do well at. The first is character building because in this story I get a real sense of the characters growth :even though it is a tad unrealistic to go from a modern day youth to what he became so quickly the characters are well defined and the growth doesn't seem arbitrary and just to fuel the story. Not just that but the side characters introduced so far have clearly defined goals and characteristics which is a really nice change compared to being introduced with a few paragraphs of backstory and then making a leap of logic of that being enough to justify all they do. And next comes one of the most enjoyable parts of the story for me, the world building. It's been really good so far even with the system trope because it feels like the system isn't the whole novel which is great. It feels like the system is an aid to getting stronger rather than being the sole reason the character is getting stronger different from what it feels like in a lot of other novels. The world building has been very steady throughout the novel and as we move along in the story we find out more about the world gradually rather than through big info dumps every dozen chapters. Like how we gradually learn about the ecosytems that have been introduced so far and how we learn about the history and background of things through stories that are spread out. It keeps you wanting to read more and learn more about the world the author is creating rather than something just to get out of the way to get to the "real parts" of a novel on webnovel like faceslapping and power tripping. For the grammar there have been a few mistakes but overall you have to go looking for them to find them and there are no glaring mistakes that will deduct from the readability of the story. It feels like a smooth ride throughout grammar wise when reading. Anyway from the wall of text of above the short of it is its a really good novel that I recommend you to read.
A good novel,I like the world and so far the mc is interesting enough. Recommend to anyone that likes apocalypse game type worlds. A few things that bother me it's his stats... by doing NA it kind of feels like you have just given up bothering to calculate his growth it also makes it hard for me to determine how much hes grown in a set point more so when months are skipped in the novel. Also stats are important hes not got anything else but the ability to raise his stats with out limitation by either training or eating monsters but if we cant see them then who fucking knows. I hope this is a momentary thing and we will start to see his stats again in the future. Next is the world granted its early days but I feel like your rushing describing the environment and skipping bits which makes things a little confusing, all I can suggest is to slow it down explain things in more detail as so far I am liking this novel but yeah if you keep skipping description or doing them half arsed then things are gonna get a lot more confusing on the future. Keep up the good work and cant wait to read more
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The novel is not bad per say, but it's really not for me It starts out pretty cute and nice the first 4 chapters or so but after that there's alot of, dear God he is dumber than a box of rocks moments That seemingly only apply to him which is a bit..eh It's well written and all but the Mc is just too dumb and naive for me
Separation trope, enough said. ....................................................................... ............................................................
Honestly author just submit an appeal for them to consider signing your book. There’s always that option. They have previously signed some very bad books, and yours is actually ok
Absolutely trash..... I mean at first the MC starts with his gf and they separate when they were standing at arms reach and in the middle of a house, so if the earth did split between them they both would have been dropped without even knowing what happened to them. Second the supposedly deity gets angry when MC is unconscious and can't answer the system or whatever then gives him a supposedly "weak" class and makes it so he can't do anything. Thirdly in the entire world only MC was unconscious so the "deity" got angry at him. Like really.... At try to make it bearable. Author purposely makes him extremely weak and gives him a bunny to make his enemies die of laughter.... Really, are you trying to get some kind of Pokémon and apocalypse mixed sh.it. Trash
ネタバレを明かす This is really good. Better than a lot of the **** on here. Sometimes it gets frustrating but it’s because the story takes paths that you don’t expect. And this is something great about it. YOU get so mad sometimes that you end up liking it and understand that sometimes things don’t go your way but still end up good
ネタバレを明かす The author is a bad man, making us wait a day to be able to read his scripture. Horrible, when I found I had reached the end I started to starve, just like the Dracas. We need for him to give us a big boon, enough to last for 2 whole years, just like Jormungand. However, don't sacrifice anyone to be able to continue writing.
WTF how do you have a grade higher then 3, don't read it drags you in just to f... with you like 3-4 time the MC decisons dosen't sem logical ,and the author gets feedback in the coments but he doesn't addresses the problem.
Overall a really good story a little hard to follow at times, lots of little flash backs to past memories, and MC is not to OP which makes the story exciting(for me anyways) very short chapters
The story came off amazing in the beginning unfortunately l feel like the latest chapters have been lacking something or any form of system upgrade but l'll continue to read cause l still like it
The novel start quite interesting for the first 10 chaps, and afterwards it become a long detail and not important leveling story.. from here i skip most of them, just peek at the title.. untill he come out and meet apes, the story start keeping up. Here, i still skip some part. The moment MC meet human-snake tribe, the story can be score 5 stars! There is only one or two paragraph i skip here. Overall, although there is too much detail world building can still be found here and there, but I can see how it become better..
ネタバレを明かす I was curious about how the relationship will develop with the characters. How do you plan to develop the relationship betweem the mc and the women? Will the system comtinue to play an aid role or will it change in later parts.
A well built story should be the first thing i say, good characters and even best world background, almost unknow 'til now. At first i hate the mc, a mental trauma, a bunny by his side and getting stronger just eating other beings, it remain me certain ghoul. But great things about our mc, he has a goal even if sublime, he doesn't start with any cheat, is a total stupid but somehow figure things out and don't give up on others. The story goes right so far and i hope the author talk more about the world, the system, the higher beings or just the Abyss. Until now we still don't know how monster get stronger or eveb if they can, why other humanoids aren't part of the system or why they don't cultivate beyond the limits..And i really what to know why Kitsi ended like that..
ネタバレを明かす I tried to like this story but it was a struggle to read. In many instances there were missing words or improper grammar. The author really needs an editor and to proofread their work. Many of the sentences feel unsophisticated and drawn out (as in, the wording is ******, and using more words than necessary.) Many sentences can be written to be more concise, impactful, and meaningful, delivering the same amount, if not more information in a way that is more enjoyable to read (as in better word flow). A good way to improve in this area is to write a few sentences, then see how many different ways you can rewrite it while portraying the same information. Sometimes just simply rearranging words will make it many times more pleasant to read. This may increase the amount of time it takes you to put out chapters, but any author whom loves their own work wont mind putting in the extra effort to improve its quality. Example - a random piece of paragraph from Ch.12) "Zhao Wei couldn't continue watching any longer as he could see that the horn was slowly being inched out with every kick. Problem was even if he wanted to kill or capture it, he didn't dare come near it as he was sure he wasn't rocky balboa and wouldn't get back up after the first hit. Secondly, he felt what it's fur felt like, although it looked fluffy it was tough as steel." (73 words) After rewriting) "Zhao Wei realized he could no longer stay idle, the bunny’s every kick freed its horn inch by inch. But he was faced with a dilemma; he was no Rocky Balboa, one hit and it was lights-out for him. Secondly, though soft and fluffy in appearance, he had felt the bunny’s fur was as tough as steel." (57 words - and what i feel is a much smoother word flow) Another problem i had with this story was, some things were just unrealistic, even for a fantasy/post apoc setting. Shoving ones foot into burning ash will not help the healing process of wounds on the foot, instead you'll get burns that'll become open wounds and fester with infections. Fresh ash may be sterile, but id never suggest it be used in place of clean bandaging, even if you didn't have any, using hot ash in this case would only make things ten times worse. Now his hands are burnt, his torso wounds are burnt, and his feet are burnt. In a more realistic fashion, the story would end there, he would be royally f**ked. Next problem, and the one that left me rolling my eyes and moving on from the story is the rabbit somehow knowing where the human heart is. For it to know applying chest compressions (safely i might add - given its strength) could stimulate the heart into beating was just silly, even for a supernaturally strong rabbit that can apparently damage a tree that's as hard as iron. (There's also little reason for it to do so, given it was captured by the guy just prior. If i were the rabbit, id have probably just let the fool croak.) Despite the fact that it shows human-like intelligence in the following chapter (Which i only read partially through before stopping) that should not mean knowledge of human-related things. Things that happen within a novel need to be at least somewhat believable within the scope of their genre. I wont be reading the rest of the story, but i hope the novel tones down such things in future chapters. :)
ネタバレを明かす Wonderful story. deserves a higher rank! ..................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
really good, waiting for new chapters every day........................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
So far it's a very good story. It starts up slow but after a few chapters it starts picking up the pace. The writing quality is good and you always have a feeling of wanting to know whats next. The power system could be explained in more detail, but I suspect the author hasn't done so yet because the MC's understanding of it is currently still lacking. I would definitely recommend the read and I hope the author keeps up the good work.
I REALLY like this so far but I have a genuine word of advice DON'T waste about 20 chapters on a character you just introduced for the first time and make it a flashback it leaves a foul feeling in a decent amount of readers, instead after a few chapters AFTER the characters into you can add the important past bits in enclosed sections in the chapter when that ingfo is most nesessitated
One of the best novels I've read by far. And I've read an ocean full. The world building and character arcs and plot developments great, with good grammar to boot. Really glad I added this to my "must read" list. Highly recommended
Great story. One of the best original novels I have read. It is a top 10 material. This story is better than some of the fan-fictions up there.
I give 5 star for you because this novel have my favorite genre and you mention my country. Your story is not bad xD *justreadonechapter* what should I write again? Ah, 140 140 140 140 Ok I'm done.
Good story for a system based theme. The only downside on my part as a fast reader is that too many flowering words for one action. But all in all its a good story for serious reader who will focus much on word by word.
In getting sick and tired of this redundant formula that is a system novel. This fad is so unoriginal and boring. It ruins any fun i would have reading a novel. I won't vote any novel above or below a 3 if they have a system, even if they are written well.
l'm just writing for anyone who reads this review on this good novel pls read this and push it to top 10 cause this is simply better than some actual webnovels posted here on this website. if ya wanna see a normal dude become the king of beasts with his at first weak powers then please support this novel with powerstones to make more people see this and for the author a man named shia labeouf once said,"JUST DO IT!" keep up the good work dude
Just wondering is this story inspired by everyone else is a returnee and re:monster? Also l’ve only read 7 chapters but the sypnosis sounds alot like it. The webnovel overall is really enjoyable from what l’ve read especially the bantar with the boyfriend and girlfriend in the beginning hope you continue with the good quality👌
TLDR: the novel has smooth grammar really good world building and character development. This story is really good. I feel like it has done several things most novels on webnovel don't do well at. The first is character building because in this story I get a real sense of the characters growth :even though it is a tad unrealistic to go from a modern day youth to what he became so quickly the characters are well defined and the growth doesn't seem arbitrary and just to fuel the story. Not just that but the side characters introduced so far have clearly defined goals and characteristics which is a really nice change compared to being introduced with a few paragraphs of backstory and then making a leap of logic of that being enough to justify all they do. And next comes one of the most enjoyable parts of the story for me, the world building. It's been really good so far even with the system trope because it feels like the system isn't the whole novel which is great. It feels like the system is an aid to getting stronger rather than being the sole reason the character is getting stronger different from what it feels like in a lot of other novels. The world building has been very steady throughout the novel and as we move along in the story we find out more about the world gradually rather than through big info dumps every dozen chapters. Like how we gradually learn about the ecosytems that have been introduced so far and how we learn about the history and background of things through stories that are spread out. It keeps you wanting to read more and learn more about the world the author is creating rather than something just to get out of the way to get to the "real parts" of a novel on webnovel like faceslapping and power tripping. For the grammar there have been a few mistakes but overall you have to go looking for them to find them and there are no glaring mistakes that will deduct from the readability of the story. It feels like a smooth ride throughout grammar wise when reading. Anyway from the wall of text of above the short of it is its a really good novel that I recommend you to read.
A good novel,I like the world and so far the mc is interesting enough. Recommend to anyone that likes apocalypse game type worlds. A few things that bother me it's his stats... by doing NA it kind of feels like you have just given up bothering to calculate his growth it also makes it hard for me to determine how much hes grown in a set point more so when months are skipped in the novel. Also stats are important hes not got anything else but the ability to raise his stats with out limitation by either training or eating monsters but if we cant see them then who fucking knows. I hope this is a momentary thing and we will start to see his stats again in the future. Next is the world granted its early days but I feel like your rushing describing the environment and skipping bits which makes things a little confusing, all I can suggest is to slow it down explain things in more detail as so far I am liking this novel but yeah if you keep skipping description or doing them half arsed then things are gonna get a lot more confusing on the future. Keep up the good work and cant wait to read more
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact geekyteddyyo@gmail.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.