[HP X DXD] Master of a Universe

LV 5

Ballad

Personally the Story is interesting, Sadly it falls into the usual Crossover problem.There's no reason at all for Harry to attend Hogwarts, he is a Scion of the Gremory Family. They can literally hire the best Wizarding Tutors for Harry and not Subpar teaching. Problem Number 2, Harry instantly became friends with Hermione and already started revealing secrets to people with no mental defenses.It's an Ok Fic, but it's quite brain dead plot wise lol.

LV 15

Roktah

starred out really well, but then the consistency issues started to happen, because the author needed harry to experience his hogwarts struggles for some reason. at first wizards are described as a failed experiment by the devils with only the most powerfull reaching high class. then the founders were ultimate class(very few devils even manage that). once harry arrives in diagon alley he says the average wizard is mid class and that there are quite a few high class around? i'm sorry but the author doesn't seem to understand the difference between those classifications,i would put dumbledore on the peak of low class maybe, sirius bella etc high low class, average adult wizards mid low class, owl level students beginner low class. there is a skill difference between dumbledore and lets say sirius but the power difference is there but its actually not that significant. dumbledores magic is not more potent than other wizards he just has a little more or can channel more and the rest is skill talent and experience.

LV 14

Tiny_Tim_5672

It’s an ok story nothing wrong in the grammar or formatting but man it feels like I’m reading a clifnote version of the Harry Potter movies like the story is just dragging on with basically a one to one retelling of the Harry Potter story but with extra added lines every now and then to remind you it’s supposed to be a DXD crossover

LV 3

Arrowinmyknee

A good start. Please more. I want to see how it goes on.

LV 13

Shannon_Smacher

great story keep it coming! cannot wait to see where this goes!

LV 2

Joy_Boy_9017

FIVE STARS - FIVE STARS - FIVE STARS - FIVE STARS - FIVE STARS - FIVE STARS - FIVE STARS - FIVE STARS - FIVE STARS - FIVE STARS - FIVE STARS - FIVE STARS.

LV 1

Godemalex

Really, I can’t read this story. First 20 chapters were good, but then… The story became not interesting, half of wrote chapters was about what? About school that doesn’t need for demon. I can’t understand that part, when some people have a good concept and have a good start, but then destroy everything. So, thanks, but no.

LV 3

Bananaking123

Yo, i just see you write Dxd fic Here is my advice never write Dxd story by using Dxd anime as reference, Because unlike in light novel, dxd version anime ruin a lot of characters, especially Issei's characters hard to the point that reduce him into fanservice machine.

LV 2

DaoistZack

The story was quite interesting, especially in the beginning, but after he started attending Hogwarts it kinda flopped. It quickly turned into the usual Hermione jerk, where she is suddenly god's gift to mankind, and the smartest witch of the generation as a 12yo... A lot of plotholes are made, and Harry start sharing secrets out of nowhere. I feel like the author fell into the usual cliches of believing in the superiority of muggles and muggleborns, and how it's unfair the muggleborns can't use magic at home. You don't allow kids to use guns at home, I don't know why some people think that giving them access to wands without supervision would be a good idea smh.

LV 1

creating_shots

This is a grate fanfic I love the story and the change in Harry's personality from cannon I was thinking why not have the 4 founders of Hogwarts have an Heir trial since they had no descendants they used a ritual so that who passes the trial becomes blood adopted in there house and also become the head of there family. Harry finds and passes all the trials in his first year he finds and completes the trial of Rowena Ravenclaw, In his second year he completes the trial of Salazar Slytherin and also makes the Basilisk his familiar as well. in his third year he completes the trials of Helga Hufflepuff and In the fourth Year he completes the trial of Godric Gryffindor before the tri-wizard tournament. he also uses a ritual and the blood of the for original satans that one founder each had because of a contract with there decedents and becomes a pure blooded devil and descendent of the original satans as well but still have the potter blood and sirius also makes him the black family heir. He takes issei into his universe and uses his authority in it to remove the boosted gear without killing him and takes it for him selves and also removes the evil pieces in himself and returns them to rias after mutating them all. He also clams Hogwarts as his personal property and all the wards that were other wise deactivated because of being forgotten are reactivated by him. He also gains the hobby of collecting and raising every type of herp and magical creatures form all over the world and to learn every magic there is. If you do not like it you can always ignore it this is just a child's rambling nothing more nothing less. though I hope that you at least thing about it .

LV 4

jabberwockyy

The starting chapter was eerily similar to The Mutant Obscurus Gamer. But interesting premise. Let's see where it goes.

LV 15

Archangel1999

the story was great until harry went to Hogwarts then it goes downhill very fast

LV 14

Wesley_Hylry

First, I must congratulate the author, despite some points that could be improved, It is a well thought out story, in addition to having a certain logic, the world of DxD and Harry Potter as integral worlds Yes, Harry Potter's spells may seem weak, but studying them only adds new ideas for the protagonist with his own demonic magic besides remember, even super powerful attacks started based on ordinary attacks, Madara and his sea of ​​flames is just a fireball super powered by chakra. Don't pay so much attention to the other negative reviews, give the story a chance

LV 14

DaoOfCulture

Ngl, this FF surprised me. Originally, I skipped over it thinking, "HP mixed with DxD, haha no." But after giving it a go due to boredom, the writing is clear and the world building is interesting, to say the least. The author does a good job mixing dxd and hp to an impressive degree and I look forward to how it will continue to progress. Keep up the great work and give more chaps.

LV 4

god_of_the_empty

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LV 2

chocolatechipsrule

The chapters are short, which wouldn’t be a problem, but they are released inconsistently, sometimes you’ll get one 2 days in a row, other times you’ll see nothing for days. The story has lots of potential, but isn’t using it to its fullest. Lots of chapters for the first and second year seem to mostly just to show time passing until something happens. The problem also occurs during the summer chapters where barely anything happens. It doesn’t show his progress with magic, but says he made a lot of it. I at least hope they do something interesting during year 3 like taking the dementors, something that makes it less like the books. Also, he should get more contracts with wizards, pureblood, muggleborn, even teachers. More needs to be done to show that the worlds are connected rather than him just being a ‘regular wizard’ during his time at hogwarts. Also needs more interaction with devils, either from the Gremorys or from other houses. They are definitely going to be important later, but there’s been very little interaction with any of them so far. Even less with other devil heiresses Rias knows since he’s only talked to any of them once. Lastly he isn’t using his abilities to his fullest. His sacred gear allows him to learn whatever he wants to from his magus, but also allows him to mass produce things with their help. Despite making them and having them for months, they haven’t done much to have been a good idea to have. He can also gets stronger by adding magical creatures and plants to it, but he has yet to go looking for any of them, despite definitely having the capability to do so. As a character, while he’s well built, you’ve made Harry far too passive when it comes to doing things. He’s wasting his potential, and when he does anything to get stronger its barely or never shown. He also needs to interact with other characters more, since it feels like he doesn’t talk to them unless they start the conversation. The story is great, but that doesn’t mean it shouldn’t get better where it can.

LV 13

evilgod_3214

The writing quality falls short of expectations. The presence of spelling mistakes, confusing phrases, and poorly structured paragraphs make it challenging to comprehend the intended message. Understanding the content requires significant effort and reflection, which should ideally not be the case. Additionally, the portrayal of different characters lacks depth and distinction, as their personalities all feel nearly identical throughout the story

Well written Story, not the typical bad Crossover where he doesn't attend Hogwarts for some reason. He is based trying to keep a connection to his parents, but isn't the standard goody two shoes Harry easily manipulated.

Amazing, keep up the good work, because I need more. Mooooooooooore. Mooooooooooore. Moooooooooore. Moooooooore. MMMOooooooooooore. Yes please post more.