Nice. That's bound to be fun.
"So... your formation is made up of black holes, Cyrus?"
Fantasy · KenKaizen
I recommend breaking up these long paragraphs into smaller ones, makes the reading experience easier.
"Oh no you don't," I yelled as I transformed my sword into a javelin and hurled it towards the flying beast. I clipped one of the wings of the chimera instantly stopping the momentum of its propulsion making it crash into the ground. The behemoth picked itself off the ground and shifted its focus back to me once again, "now what type of creature attacks a defensless boy." The creature let out deep growl as it shook off some of the debris from its crash. "See i was gonna let you go with a warning, because i know you really dont know any better." I said to the monster as i slowly walked towards the towering creature. "But you see that boy you were so desperately trying to get to is my son," i said to the chimera as I was now standing in front of it. "What would you do if something tried to kill your ofsrping," i said as i formed a solar long sword in my hand. The creature tried side swiping me with one of its claws but i blocked the attack with my forearm easily. Immediately I unleashed a counter with a descending slash of my long sword cutting clean through its massive paw. The monster wailed in pain and in a rage it blasted fireball at me in retaliation.
Fantasy · KenKaizen
Personally, I was hoping for a clan that worships blackholes instead. otherwise, it's peak.
The story so far has been a blast. The story is paced very well and has a great style. The characters have a lot of personality and are easy to like. The world already shows much promise and feels like it's going to be one for the times. Then there's the power or magic system which has a fun premise to it. Unfortunately the story just started so there's not too much to say, but from the little we got, I can already tell this will be great, and I have high hopes for it. The best of luck to the author, and keep up the good work. When it has more chapters, I'll make an actual in-depth review, but so far 6 chapters in this has been my first impression.
Inertia: Beneath the Starlit Veil
Fantasy · KenKaizen