Good start, with great prospective moving forward. The writing is excellent. The plot is interesting. The MC is relatable. The world at large can be explored, and I'm sure it will be as the story progresses. It's a slow paced 'weak to strong', so if that's your cup of tea, would recommend picking this up.
Though the writing can feel a bit predictable and cliché at times, it still clearly has a lot of potential, and the author seems to be improving as he goes. The trope of 'side characters' also breathes some fresh air, not common among books I tend to read. The world also seems have to have quite a bit of lore behind it, which can make for an interesting decipher. The grammar and spelling is fine, if a little simple and bland. Overall, I would suggest giving the book a try.
If you like gore, this is the book for you. It is a story that tiptoes the lines of sanity and craziness. In terms of grammar and spelling, there is no real complaint. Give it a try.
I hate harem. This is the only good one, because its takes a longer time with each person. No real complaint about spelling or grammar. There is a lot of potential here, keep it up.
Wolf man.
Rade's claws scraped the stone as he crouched, his body tensing like a predator ready to pounce. The moonlight glinted off his blood-red eyes as he stared at Sophia, his breath ragged, his muscles coiled with deadly intent.
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What's up Mr Narrator.
Narrator: Okay, now he's getting personal... coughs awkwardly
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Is his spear stirring?
And for the first time in a long while, the MC felt something stir within him. Something he thought he had lost.
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?????
As if even Death pray for her life!
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Wake up!
"Mr. Barracks!" she cried, her voice breaking as they carried her away. "Please, wake up! Mr. Barracks!"
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original Eclipsed Light
Over three millennia after 'The Battle of the Heavens', the sapient races have rebuilt what was once destroyed, carving out a piece of the world for themselves. But make no mistake, monsters rule the land, children of the past chaos. Humans are confined within prisons of their own making, but hope is not lost. From the sky's scar, a mystical energy empowers certain humans to become mages and fight back against the onslaught. Growing up in such a world, Alex faces trials and adversaries that will either make him or break him. Left an orphan, only his younger siblings keep him moving forward. What role does he play in deciding this world's future? How much is he willing to sacrifice for his goals? Only Lumen knows. *** Note from Author: This book will be a slow burn. The MC will spend a significant amount of time powerless. Just a heads up. The world is from the future. *** Credit to TAKAYSU for the Book Cover Art Check out my other book, Trifecta of Realms: The Last Sentinel NA Book on Royal Road: https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/95590/eclipsed-light23 Chs 7 Koleksi
See this! I just gifted the story: Pizza
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