As the captain?
As the captain, Roman couldn't just leave his post and go have fun. Among the crew with abilities, the only one who truly wasn't afraid of dying was Luffy, so in the end, it was Luffy, Zoro, and Sanji who excitedly suited up in bubbles and went off to:
Paper Paper Fruit In One Piece
Anime & Comics · Yeye_Qiu
Yesssss
Nah, I'm kidding. I have a rough outline for the upcoming chapters. So I don't think there'll be too big of a gap this time.
One Piece : Safety second
Anime & Comics · Mr_Procrastinator
Mh... it's a bit ripetitive. He felt at home too many times, he felt accepted too many times. Now you're writing on this style, but you can't mix action, a fast recap of all the pros and cons of the period, and than another action that... is without time. I mean, if you draw the way you write, you could draw a point in the line, that is your current point of view, at the end of a certain period of time. The next chapter you jump of something more than one action. It's not the proper word but you do a 'time skip' of sort. Then, from that point of view, you write an action of a point before, but without any time indication. And then another action that could have happened before or after the last action. And then maybe another action that I don't know when to put. It's a mess of a painting. Now, I don't want to be mean, I know that it's difficult because I too write, but then I find errors and horrors far worse in my writing and... well, I delete all normally, so sorry if you feel discouraged after reading this, I didn't want this and I sincerely hope you'll continue this story and continue writing, if I may, there are many styles similar to yours, even only by changing the order and adjusting the sequence and other small things. Well... if you'll continue writing here I'll continue to read, and if I may, I will suggest somethings sometimes that I find hard to read.
A suggestion... it's all good, really, but it's too much serious. Everything seems to have a purpose. It's not something unreadable, I'm not saying this, but if Jackson doesn't live something with more easy, why has he to become stronger? It's the same concept of live to work and work to live. I understood that he want to be remembered by the world, but for what?
First chapter, so I don't wanna write a review yet, but the idea is good. The writing... so so, I mean, it is good -, it seems to me like a collage of paragraphs. Like you write a bit, delete another, rewrite a part of... I don't know. I feel like it. But it is still good 👍 keep going on please 🥺
welcome backkkk! thanks for the chapter
'is decayed' or 'woods' another thing: there is a point after keel, I seems to remember, that maybe it's a mistake of key writing
The wood that made the deck of the "Rubbish boat" are decayed, withering, and rotten, the small cabin which serves as the sleeping and storage area in the whole boat has a broken roof and a window with no glass. Most importantly, the foundation and life of a ship, the keel. Appears to be in such deplorable condition that it might just break off into pieces if one violent wave would even do so much as graze it, the only salvageable thing is the mast. The mast's wood is also withering but is the most stable part of this ship, even though the sail looked like it was made by a 5 year old child, it still can serve its purpose to take it's sailor on a journey.
One Piece: A Sailor's Journey
Anime & Comics · Freix_Gren
'was water' I think 🤔
In the middle of nowhere where the only thing that could be seen in the distance were water, the sky and sometimes the occasional birds and fishes. A small floating structure could be seen gently swaying with the waves.
One Piece: A Sailor's Journey
Anime & Comics · Freix_Gren
I appreciate it 👍👍
A/N: I wanted to do a Shounen Power-up, the kind where MC is cornered and he awakens his inner power, but as I was writing it, I realized that its better to write a reason pulled out of nowhere than a power pulled out of nowhere
To a Better Future - One Piece
Anime & Comics · DaoistCCIYLb
'feel' doesn't sound right. I would have used 'felt' because it's all the period in the past. Changing between too many verb's time was a mistake my teacher was crazing me about.
Percy Jackson and the Art of Gacha
Anime & Comics · Fox_red