The story seems good so far, looking forward for more I specially like the limitations on hes powers, sure he can probably get better at it in the future but still Secondly i like how you have handled hes powers so far Great story, man
I think it would also be interesting to see things like the protagonist saving people that would originally die and beneficial things like that which you're already doing But also: some times the changes he makes to history may have a negative outcome, such as enemies being stronger, working together, new threats that weren't there originally, people who weren't supposed to die dying and so on
Ok so hear me out, i saw this idea few years ago about an alternative universe where ben and ghost freak team up and instead of escaping the omnitrix he helps ben giving him advice and what not There was also the concept of Ben's aliens being somewhat empowered by ectonurite dna
Its a plot hole, its assumed that it was created by aliens but in omniverse it's said to have been created by humans, whit jorge Washington being one of the founding members i believe It also apparently started as a response to paranormal threats and not aliens
Love the lovecraftian vibes on this one Oh and just the never ending dramatic terror Michael felt It was gold the way you described it whit hes pov Simply amazing how vividly you managed to describe it
Also i liked the horror "bits" in these chapters although im not a great critique and i can't say much about it It was entertaining
The name for the chapter could be "A hunter and it's prey"
I honestly was willing to look past the possible harem in the future but there's some edgy stuff in here I'm not particularly found of The story was good in the first chapters but it goes down hill from that, it's almost like it's a different person writing it, not only that, there's no stakes in the story anymore and you made an osmosian even more op And again, the EDGY stuff, not a big fan of that
Ben 10: Branching The Omniverse
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